My Hot Wind Blew Her

Polka dots on your dress brought a lifting spirit
Moonbeams glistened off your hair 
as you whispered your green eyes spoke of eternal things
but all I could see were your lips forming musical words

Moving in unison they formed complex notions of philosophy and zen
the silence around you overpowered my senses
And my mute voice screamed you are a beauty
I love you

That moment in my minute with eternity didn't last long
she said she had to be excused
her bladder was bursting
trying to be funny, I suggested using my coke cup

I can tell you that was not the shining moment of my life 
she declined my offer
and like a dandelion in the desert my hot wind blew her away.
I never saw her again
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 7/17/2018 8:54:00 AM
This poem is beautiful and sad..The way it ends...makes the reader feel so much..That Farewell.Lovely poem.
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Norberto Franco Cisneros
Date: 7/17/2018 8:38:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words, though we did not meet or communicate verbally we made a connection through our poetry as it separately exists. I like the way you paint pictures with words that give a variety of feelings. I'm sorry you are leaving; for someplace nice, I hope, and where the day's stresses do not interfere with a good night's sleep. Thank you Sweet Spirit.
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