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I used to be an impenetrable fort, A castle with walls so high That no one could enter them. Sometimes I sat at the windows Looking down over people, Strange and far away. That day you shook the gate, Looking for a golden key, But I didn't give. You brought your spear, Your Unicorn of love, Your golden hair and singing voice... And in that instant the outside of me crumbled as if I were Jericho, my walls simply fell away. You looked deep inside me with clarity and innocence, as my hand danced in sundust, and reached for you to save me with a smile white and warm, and bring me to the outside. *** April 4, 2017 Copyright © Darren White

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Date: 4/9/2017 4:51:00 PM
This is breathtaking Darren:) A fairytale for the 21st. century flowing with Hope and Love. So inspiring with loving sentiments that deeply touch the soul. 'You are the sun' in every beautiful word you write and share Darren...thank you:) This is exceptional writing. a fave, 7+ lynnxxx
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Darren White
Date: 5/12/2017 1:26:00 PM
Oh Lynn, I only now see your comment, sorry! Thank you sooo much, also for fave and 7 :)
Date: 4/5/2017 8:42:00 AM
I guess if there is stardust sun dust must also exist.. this is perfect!
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 8:49:00 AM
Richard, thank you so much, yesm sundust exists, I am here on my back, watching those little coloured specks dance :)
Date: 4/5/2017 5:18:00 AM
Oh Darren. Good Morning. This is beautiful beyond words not to mention poetic without saying. May the poetic wand and gods be with you always. I actually read the entry three times to soak in her beauty. Excuse me your words of beauty. Well done entirely.
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 8:48:00 AM
Good morning Lisa :) Thank you for your beautiful words, I love the "poetic wand"!
Date: 4/4/2017 11:08:00 PM
Very nicely done, Duir! Love your work bro.
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 12:08:00 AM
Hey there Budgie! Good to see you, and thanks <3
Date: 4/4/2017 10:00:00 PM
So lovely! Great images!
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 12:07:00 AM
Thanks so much Kim, for your always kind words :)
Date: 4/4/2017 9:47:00 PM
I really liked the image of the high impregnable walls you put around yourself and then the freeing power of love. It's beautifully done :) Amitiés
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 12:07:00 AM
Thank you, yes, it can feel that way, can't it? :)
Date: 4/4/2017 7:36:00 PM
Part of a beautiful process, Darren. : ) I love the title.
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 12:07:00 AM
Heh, good, thanks Doug :)
Date: 4/4/2017 5:53:00 PM
A beautiful poem Darren with all the elements of hope and love <3 <3 <3
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 12:06:00 AM
Thanks Sara <3 :)
Date: 4/4/2017 3:21:00 PM
that was beautiful!
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 12:06:00 AM
Hi Jaymi! Thank you so very much, i am happy you like this :)
Date: 4/4/2017 2:07:00 PM
This is so nice Darren. I love it :)
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Darren White
Date: 4/4/2017 2:09:00 PM
Thank you so much Heidi, I am glad you like it :)
Date: 4/4/2017 1:27:00 PM
So very beautiful.
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Darren White
Date: 4/4/2017 1:30:00 PM
Thanks Tim, so good that I had a few poems up my sleeve, for moments where I absolutely can't find the energy to write :) Glad you like it!
Date: 4/4/2017 1:27:00 PM
This was pure magic my friend. So soft and alluring, this is one that takes the readers breath away. You are so very talented and this one right here may be my all time favorite from you. Bravo Darren.
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Darren White
Date: 4/4/2017 1:32:00 PM
Ohhhh, honestly? Thank you! I am so happy I had this one written already, for days like this one, where I couldn't find a word of poetry inside :)

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