My First Car

My first car was an '87 Camaro.
That car was fast and sharp as an arrow.
I was sixteen and in high school.
I loved it, but boy was it a piece of stool.

I had it for a month, then it became a joke.
I was driving one night and the engine broke.
It started to steam and smoke everywhere.
I was afraid, so I just left it on the highway there.

When I came back, I was hoping my day would be brighter.
But it got much worse when I saw about a dozen firefighters. 
They were surrounding it and when I saw it I nearly froze.
They thought it was on fire, and filled it up with their water hose.

I should have junked it, but for this car I truly cared.
So I got a new engine and paid for everything to be repaired.
After that it ran like new and without a rattle or a squeak.
Little did I know that it had a slightly large oil leak.

So a couple days later, I was out on this amazing date.
I was thinking about us in the back seat, but that would wait.
As I was driving to this remote make-out spot, 
I looked at the temperature gauge and it was very hot.

So of course it started to smoke and the firemen got called again.
When they got there, I didn't know what I was in for then.
One fireman smiled and asked if I was going to the make-out point up there?
I smiled back and said yeah, then he said really, with my daughter Claire.  

After that night, I did what I should have long ago and got rid of the car, 
I also never saw Claire again, her dad told me to stay away, very far.

***For Paula Swanson's Contest***

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 9/9/2011 9:38:00 AM
This is, unfortunately, very witty. Well I know It wouldn't be a good experience for you, but you wrote it in a good way. Congrats on your win :)
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Date: 9/8/2011 4:08:00 PM
Creative work..Sharing with the soup family a spot from your life..Congrats on your win..Sara
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Date: 9/8/2011 7:57:00 AM
Nice rhyming narrative! Claire wasn't good for you anyways! Can u picture YOUR life as a firefighter? Congrats on this winning piece and all the time u put in writing it. Best 2 U! Gwendolen
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Date: 9/7/2011 11:00:00 PM
A camaro again!! Seems it wasn't a good car. Congratulations on your great win. Lee
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Date: 9/7/2011 8:19:00 PM
LOL boy this topic sure made for some funny writings! [I once ran into a telephone pole trying to drive my 1st car and blow my nose! The kids in the backseat flew out the doors!] Congrad's on your WIN. light & love
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Date: 9/7/2011 7:39:00 PM
congrats on your win cory
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Date: 9/7/2011 5:00:00 PM
Congratulations Chris on a great win. Joyce
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Date: 9/7/2011 12:32:00 PM
hey Chris congrats on your great win..David
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Date: 9/7/2011 10:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in this contest Chris. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/7/2011 10:35:00 AM
Congrats Chris on third place with this cool write ..luv..
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Date: 9/7/2011 10:21:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in the "Driving Me Crazy" poetry contest sponsored by Paula Swanson. CR
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Date: 8/28/2011 2:09:00 AM
I am reading so many poems about horrendous cars and thinking, these can't possibly be true stories. Yours seems like one that is not true even though it is hilarious. So is it at least partly true? or was there honestly a girl named Claire that you were gonna take to a make out point? haha. Hey long time no see .What's UP?
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Date: 8/28/2011 2:09:00 AM
PS loved the "stool" line. Classy way to do it!
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Date: 8/27/2011 10:24:00 AM
Maybe you should have driven away with claire that night! Good poem.
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