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My Feelings Crumble

Feelings crumble
        inside me when we said good-bye
      The worse was when, you love, of my humble
        life, looked at me then sighed
  against my arms you lay as if in dreams asleep
  No longer to play and laugh at my side, I weep
    Your memory I always keep
  You're with me still, walking close for when I stumble







6-10-19
"Crumbling" Rhyme Contest
Sponsor:  Dear Heart
4th place

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Constance La France Date: 6/30/2019 7:09:00 PM Jeanne congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful write and sorry for my delay in visiting ~ Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 6/30/2019 6:34:00 PM a poignant piece Jeanne, congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Jeanne Mcgee Date: 7/1/2019 5:39:00 PM Thanks Jan. Much appreciated

Early Jae Date: 6/26/2019 3:17:00 PM Beautiful! Congrats!! Login to Reply

Susan Ashley Date: 6/25/2019 9:47:00 PM Oh, your poignant and intimate poem is deeply moving, Jeanne. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply Jeanne Mcgee Date: 7/1/2019 5:39:00 PM Thank you. These are the hardest to write.. ..with tears in your eyes

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/25/2019 11:59:00 AM this is so poignant. Congrats on your win, Jeanne. Login to Reply Jeanne Mcgee Date: 7/1/2019 5:36:00 PM Thank Andrea. Written about loosing my dog.

Caren Krutsinger Date: 6/21/2019 7:33:00 AM "You are with me still" - this is true of all my friends, even the ones who have gone home ahead of me. Login to Reply Jeanne Mcgee Date: 7/1/2019 5:36:00 PM Thank you Carmen.

Winged Warrior Date: 6/11/2019 9:11:00 AM Great entry my friend...first line, I think should be 14 spaces in...forgive me if I am wrong...best of luck...lots of love...^WW^ Login to Reply Jeanne Mcgee Date: 6/11/2019 10:33:00 AM yes, you were right...I've noticed that sometimes the first line will go back to left justify after entry. The submitted poem stayed in place. Thanks so much.