Jeanne Mcgee Poet Rhyme

My Feelings Crumble

Feelings crumble
        inside me when we said good-bye
      The worse was when, you love, of my humble
        life, looked at me then sighed
  against my arms you lay as if in dreams asleep
  No longer to play and laugh at my side, I weep
    Your memory I always keep
  You're with me still, walking close for when I stumble







6-10-19
"Crumbling" Rhyme Contest
Sponsor:  Dear Heart
4th place

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Constance La France June 30, 2019 at 7:09 PM Jeanne congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful write and sorry for my delay in visiting ~

Jan Allison June 30, 2019 at 6:34 PM a poignant piece Jeanne, congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Jeanne Mcgee July 1, 2019 at 5:39 PM Thanks Jan. Much appreciated

Early Jae June 26, 2019 at 3:17 PM Beautiful! Congrats!!

Susan Ashley June 25, 2019 at 9:47 PM Oh, your poignant and intimate poem is deeply moving, Jeanne. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Jeanne Mcgee July 1, 2019 at 5:39 PM Thank you. These are the hardest to write.. ..with tears in your eyes

Andrea Dietrich June 25, 2019 at 11:59 AM this is so poignant. Congrats on your win, Jeanne. Jeanne Mcgee July 1, 2019 at 5:36 PM Thank Andrea. Written about loosing my dog.

Caren Krutsinger June 21, 2019 at 7:33 AM "You are with me still" - this is true of all my friends, even the ones who have gone home ahead of me. Jeanne Mcgee July 1, 2019 at 5:36 PM Thank you Carmen.

Winged Warrior June 11, 2019 at 9:11 AM Great entry my friend...first line, I think should be 14 spaces in...forgive me if I am wrong...best of luck...lots of love...^WW^ Jeanne Mcgee June 11, 2019 at 10:33 AM yes, you were right...I've noticed that sometimes the first line will go back to left justify after entry. The submitted poem stayed in place. Thanks so much.