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My Feelings Crumble

Feelings crumble inside me when we said good-bye The worse was when, you love, of my humble life, looked at me then sighed against my arms you lay as if in dreams asleep No longer to play and laugh at my side, I weep Your memory I always keep You're with me still, walking close for when I stumble 6-10-19 "Crumbling" Rhyme Contest Sponsor: Dear Heart 4th place

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Constance La France

Date: 6/30/2019 7:09:00 PM

Jeanne congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this wonderful write and sorry for my delay in visiting ~

Jan Allison

Date: 6/30/2019 6:34:00 PM

a poignant piece Jeanne, congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/1/2019 5:39:00 PM

Thanks Jan. Much appreciated

Early Jae

Date: 6/26/2019 3:17:00 PM

Beautiful! Congrats!!

Susan Ashley

Date: 6/25/2019 9:47:00 PM

Oh, your poignant and intimate poem is deeply moving, Jeanne. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/1/2019 5:39:00 PM

Thank you. These are the hardest to write.. ..with tears in your eyes

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/25/2019 11:59:00 AM

this is so poignant. Congrats on your win, Jeanne.

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/1/2019 5:36:00 PM

Thank Andrea. Written about loosing my dog.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/21/2019 7:33:00 AM

"You are with me still" - this is true of all my friends, even the ones who have gone home ahead of me.

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 7/1/2019 5:36:00 PM

Thank you Carmen.

Winged Warrior

Date: 6/11/2019 9:11:00 AM

Great entry my friend...first line, I think should be 14 spaces in...forgive me if I am wrong...best of luck...lots of love...^WW^

Jeanne Mcgee
Date: 6/11/2019 10:33:00 AM

yes, you were right...I've noticed that sometimes the first line will go back to left justify after entry. The submitted poem stayed in place. Thanks so much.