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my eyes tried to tell you

my eyes tried to tell you golden and round the setting sun peeks over sloping mountaintops while cobalt shadows inch into the rust-brown crevices like a silent blanket smothering the light of day the moon will be full or so they say on the six o’clock weather report there is no sign of rain until the clouds reappear and the ring around the moon squeezes harder you wanted to see the rising moon after sunset and i laid both at your feet while watching your wide-eyed innocence as if the circus tent was filled with elephants it was the only show in town until i hugged you just before you cried and we talked all through the rising of the moon about old songs and dead poets i searched for words to comfort you but it was darker than the moon could illumine and my words were thin as tin foil though my eyes tried to tell you tolbert

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Date: 5/17/2025 3:26:00 AM
Hello Wayne, congratulations on your POTD win with this very touching and heartfelt poem. Beautifully written and a great read. Wishing you a wonderful weekend.
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Date: 5/17/2025 2:18:00 AM
Dear Wayne, beautiful poem! Exquisitely written! I love this line "about old songs and dead poets". Congratulations on POTD! Best,Anne
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Date: 5/17/2025 1:42:00 AM
- A heartbreakingly beautiful poem, the last verse deeply moving... congratulations on your p.o.t.d.... enjoy :) - hugs
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Date: 5/17/2025 12:59:00 AM
Heart tugging, soulful, melancholic, fatalistic, tender, compassionate, spiritual. A delight to read this afternoon. Warmest congratulations on POTD, wayne
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Date: 5/16/2025 7:11:00 PM
A FAV- I love this piece, absolutely
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wayne tolbert
Date: 5/16/2025 9:14:00 PM
Thanks so much Paige! You made my day...thank you! ~tolbert~
Date: 5/15/2025 4:29:00 PM
Unique poetry. I really like this. Evocative and lovely
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wayne tolbert
Date: 5/15/2025 10:23:00 PM
Thank you so very much Andrea. I am always thrilled when you read and comment on something I have written... Many blessings, my friend. ~tolbert~
Date: 5/15/2025 3:24:00 PM
Again, i don't know where it's going to lead me down, "while watching your wide-eyed innocence as if the circus tent was filled with elephants" a weary vibe came over me, i'm not sure i quite get what's going on here with the innocence ~
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wayne tolbert
Date: 5/15/2025 10:29:00 PM
Awww...Anaya, my friend. I am so happy the phrase caught your attention! I always enjoy an 'off-the-wall' phrase like the 'elephant' reference and it is especially rewarding that you picked up on it. You made my day! Thank you. May your day be richly blessed. ~tolbert~
Date: 5/15/2025 11:27:00 AM
Lovely…filled with emotion!
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wayne tolbert
Date: 5/15/2025 10:33:00 PM
Thank you so much Kim. I appreciate you in many ways and two are that you read this and took the time time comment. Thank you so very much my friend...May you have a blessed day. ~tolbert~

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