Nette Onclaud Poet Dramatic Verse

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Constance La France's My Dream Within A Dream Contest... 15 Sept 25...' When we dream of dreams which can change the route of life in a positive way, we should claim this  as right and truly done...' by poet

My Dream Within A Dream

Mother lowers her sullen face 
against a  volatile wind, 
    tasting the insolence
of a heavy laden gust 
  As she heaves quietly 
from musings of unaswered dreams
grating her  senses -- hope clinging--
     through pits of lonely thoughts
delicately cleansing snarled faith
and disheveled pauses... 
   where hours impairs near death
as uncertain answers grow pale
      ...Waking her slow breaths flowing 
from tears... Dad in a stupor :

I dreamed within her own dream 
a fervent wish of life restored
    that she hears my silent words
her boney figure collapsing --
through the bleakest of bleak  nights
  numbed from pain ...from agony,

That under panels of glass, 
     ...we clutch onto that wish for life 
My dream blending with her plea...
and realize she has learned 
     to pray with me in the rain.

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Constance La France October 2, 2025 at 3:29 AM Nette, congratulations on your win in my Dream Within A Dream contest, judged 09/29. Your poem is beautiful and I love the quote and image, Constance

Sara Kendrick September 30, 2025 at 11:20 AM Congratulations on your work being on the winners' list. Way to go. I enjoyed reading this one today. It is emotive drawing in the reader. Sara K

Unseeking Seeker September 30, 2025 at 3:53 AM Superbly penned, Nette, though melancholic but that’s how life can feel like sometimes. Congratulations on your top win.

Paula Goldsmith September 29, 2025 at 8:45 AM Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your powerful write write again. Have a fun day with your win as you go writing away..........

Kim Rodrigues September 29, 2025 at 5:42 AM Yes, dear poet, sometimes we dream within somebody else’s dream, wanting to relieve their pain, wanting them to have life. Great, emotive right. Congrats, Nette!

Danny Derden September 19, 2025 at 5:13 PM This is deeply moving—an elegy wrapped in dreamscape and devotion. Your imagery is rich and aching, each line a thread of grief and hope interwoven. The final gesture, praying in the rain, is heartbreakingly tender. Keep writing; your voice carries profound emotional truth.

Paige Hind September 18, 2025 at 12:30 PM Deep, and very beautiful.

Valsa George September 16, 2025 at 8:27 PM A very touching narration when the time is around for losing a dear mother. The pain, the hope, the deep longing for restoring a life, the ardent prayers - all these are woven into this, making it a poem quite outstanding. All the best dear Netto.

Krishika Upadhyay September 15, 2025 at 8:43 PM This is haunting and intimate. The intertwining of dreams, grief, and hope creates a powerful emotional landscape. Thank you for sharing this with us.

Paula Goldsmith September 15, 2025 at 10:32 AM I enjoyed reading your powerful write with a great ending. Great Picture... "Good Luck" I also did this one. Have a wonderful day writing away............

Andrea Dietrich September 15, 2025 at 9:42 AM Very poignant and much different from my own poem. It's so interesting to see my fellow poets' interpretations of this interesting challenge. How are things going for you lately? Did you ever ask for Soup's help with that last contest where the winner list didn't show. I think other sponsors are having similar problems. I just wish they never made changes to Soup the way they did