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My Dream Within A Dream

Mother lowers her sullen face 
against a  volatile wind, 
    tasting the insolence
of a heavy laden gust 
  As she heaves quietly 
from musings of unaswered dreams
grating her  senses -- hope clinging--
     through pits of lonely thoughts
delicately cleansing snarled faith
and disheveled pauses... 
   where hours impairs near death
as uncertain answers grow pale
      ...Waking her slow breaths flowing 
from tears... Dad in a stupor :

I dreamed within her own dream 
a fervent wish of life restored
    that she hears my silent words
her boney figure collapsing --
through the bleakest of bleak  nights
  numbed from pain ...from agony,

That under panels of glass, 
     ...we clutch onto that wish for life 
My dream blending with her plea...
and realize she has learned 
     to pray with me in the rain.

Copyright © Nette Onclaud | Year Posted 2025

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Krishika Upadhyay Date: 9/15/2025 8:43:00 PM This is haunting and intimate. The intertwining of dreams, grief, and hope creates a powerful emotional landscape. Thank you for sharing this with us. Login to Reply

Paula Goldsmith Date: 9/15/2025 10:32:00 AM I enjoyed reading your powerful write with a great ending. Great Picture... "Good Luck" I also did this one. Have a wonderful day writing away............ Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/15/2025 9:42:00 AM Very poignant and much different from my own poem. It's so interesting to see my fellow poets' interpretations of this interesting challenge. How are things going for you lately? Did you ever ask for Soup's help with that last contest where the winner list didn't show. I think other sponsors are having similar problems. I just wish they never made changes to Soup the way they did Login to Reply