My Clock

I walk 
On a thin metallic needle
Behind a plastic seal

Beginnings are usually deceptive
Wider bases cleverly deceive
Towards fine tapering ends, 
They lead?
Mislead.

Exploiting my needs
Hopeful susceptibility

The love for light
A little respite
Also cheats
Consoling myself
A dark patch maybe
I cement my belief
But a distant voice
Faintly speaks
The needle is painted black

Can't you see
That you can't?


Even if I could
I retaliate
Your scratched glass
This so-called protective shield
Would have obscured my vision
Curtailed my inherent abilities

Perfectly planned
Painted black
A tapering end

I obediently walk

Locked

The metal erodes
Facilitating the final fall

Tick tock
Tick tock

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 8/18/2010 7:22:00 PM
Assalam o Alaikum! I was browsing the contents of new poets which including myself then i saw your profile beside a Pakistani flag and i got excited to found a Pakistani fellow .. after all these words are really practical as tick tock .. tick tock .. keep up the same Manal :)
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Date: 8/5/2010 1:11:00 AM
Thank you everyone for reading and commenting. :)
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Date: 8/3/2010 5:23:00 PM
Wow excellent poem. Welcome to the soup
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Date: 8/2/2010 8:56:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Manal. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/1/2010 12:55:00 PM
Welcome to Poetry Soup.. so enjoyed reading your creative write tonight..looking forward to many more.. with luv..
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Date: 8/1/2010 1:44:00 AM
U HAD ME FOLOWING YOU 2 THE END OF THE POEM TWICE. LoVED YOUR WRITE.-SKAT
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