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I walk On a thin metallic needle Behind a plastic seal Beginnings are usually deceptive Wider bases cleverly deceive Towards fine tapering ends, They lead? Mislead. Exploiting my needs Hopeful susceptibility The love for light A little respite Also cheats Consoling myself A dark patch maybe I cement my belief But a distant voice Faintly speaks The needle is painted black Can't you see That you can't? Even if I could I retaliate Your scratched glass This so-called protective shield Would have obscured my vision Curtailed my inherent abilities Perfectly planned Painted black A tapering end I obediently walk Locked The metal erodes Facilitating the final fall Tick tock Tick tock

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 8/18/2010 7:22:00 PM
Assalam o Alaikum! I was browsing the contents of new poets which including myself then i saw your profile beside a Pakistani flag and i got excited to found a Pakistani fellow .. after all these words are really practical as tick tock .. tick tock .. keep up the same Manal :)
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Date: 8/5/2010 1:11:00 AM
Thank you everyone for reading and commenting. :)
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Date: 8/3/2010 5:23:00 PM
Wow excellent poem. Welcome to the soup
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Date: 8/2/2010 8:56:00 AM
I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Manal. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/1/2010 12:55:00 PM
Welcome to Poetry Soup.. so enjoyed reading your creative write tonight..looking forward to many more.. with luv..
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Date: 8/1/2010 1:44:00 AM
U HAD ME FOLOWING YOU 2 THE END OF THE POEM TWICE. LoVED YOUR WRITE.-SKAT
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