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Jan Allison
Trashed#2 Sponsored by Broken Wings
Got N/A in original contest

The bruises are in my heart and soul From the outside no one can see I do everything you ask I’m just a prisoner You control my life I feel worthless Someone please Set me Free Penned 2nd September 2015

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Judy Konos

Date: 1/9/2016 9:39:00 AM

Just saw this on Google as a Nonet example and what do you know? It is written by my friend Jan! Quite Thrilling the poem and the Google accolade....wow...

Jan Allison
Date: 1/9/2016 1:15:00 PM

oh wow that is awesome Judy I must go see lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 10/14/2015 10:07:00 PM

Jan, Congrats on your trashed #2 win. SKAT <3

Jan Allison
Date: 10/15/2015 1:07:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Balveen Cheema

Date: 10/12/2015 12:51:00 PM

We are surely prisoners of our past sorrows! By freeing them you win! Congrats Jan! Love, Balveen

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2015 12:52:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Balveen:-) hugs jan xx

Neva Romaine

Date: 10/12/2015 10:38:00 AM

Hey Jan, a warm and hearty congratulations on your win in this contest!! This is a powerful piece on inner pain and sadness. How could it get trashed? No matter - Broken Wings saw the excellent writing and expression in it. Be Blessed, Neva

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2015 11:15:00 AM

You can never tell what the sponsors are after and I got an N/A - I'm just grateful for a second chance with these trashed contests - as long as my poem gets read by others then a place in a contest is merely a bonus :-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/12/2015 3:17:00 AM

Congrats on a wonderful win Jan, quite an emotion! Wonder why it got trashed in any contest?

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2015 3:30:00 AM

Guess it wasn't what the sponsor was looking for - having read the winning poems it's a shame we don't know which contest they were originally entered in:-( I have seen some awesome poems and its great to get them read again:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/11/2015 10:28:00 PM

A fine poem with a clear and important message. Congrats on your win.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/12/2015 3:29:00 AM

Thanks Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Jennings

Date: 10/11/2015 6:39:00 PM

I have felt this way. A dark feeling very cleverly summed up. Congratulations, Jan ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2015 6:45:00 PM

Oh CayCay how sad,I think verbal abuse is equally as bad as physical abuse ... it's just that no one can actually see the scars:-( hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 10/11/2015 5:22:00 PM

Excellent piece that deserves to be a winner! Congratulations, dear Jan, on your win! Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2015 5:25:00 PM

Thanks Pandita so good for our poems to be given a second chance to shine:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/11/2015 2:50:00 PM

Very powerful, Jan, and even though expressed in such condensed form, the message is loud and clear. Happy to see you are now on the winner's list for this one! Congrats! Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 10/11/2015 2:52:00 PM

I'm delighted to to have the chance for the poem to get more exposure - such a heartbreaking situation that sadly some people will be able to relate to - verbal abuse can't be seen but the damage is inside:-( hugs jan xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 9/8/2015 6:21:00 PM

You wouldn't know what happened to each of us judging by appearances. There is too much abuse out there, but frankly I am at a loss as to how to end it. I can only work on my local space. Anyhow, you express this very well.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/9/2015 1:06:00 AM

Thanks for all your support Duke:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 9/7/2015 5:54:00 AM

This is very expressive, Jan. The choice of form is a wise one; the content awfully sad. Unfortunately many are not capable, or do not have the courage to deal with such abuse. But there is help for those who seek it...a case of taking the first important step! ~ hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 9/7/2015 8:24:00 AM

I thought few words made the message more powerful Paul - verbal/physiological abuse cannot be seen like physical abuse but it just as damaging:-(I wasn't going to even enter the contest I found the images quite harrowing ... then inspiration hit:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/5/2015 12:29:00 AM

this kind of abuse is almost as bad as the physical, and usually they go together! A great little form to give a powerful punch at the end of it!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2015 2:34:00 AM

Thanks Andrea - I wanted it to have that effect on people - thanks for the positive feedback:-) hugs jan xx

Dorian Petersen Potter

Date: 9/4/2015 6:35:00 PM

Powerful pen Jan!Well written piece in all its sadness.No woman should ever go thru some horrible like this but sadly it happens everyday all over the world.Excellent Nonet in form and content.Wish you the best in the contest dear friend.A 7! In his light, God bless you!Wishing you a very lovely weekend!Hugs!:) D

Jan Allison
Date: 9/5/2015 2:33:00 AM

Thanks Dorian I have not written a nonet for a long time think this is my second one but I thought fewer words would have more impact on the subject:-) hugs jan xx

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 9/4/2015 2:30:00 PM

superb Jan hugs 7

Jan Allison
Date: 9/4/2015 2:37:00 PM

Thanks Shadow - I wasn't going to write for the contest I found the images so harrowing but this came to me and I had to post it:-) hugs jan xx

Thomas Martin

Date: 9/2/2015 4:27:00 PM

Wow, Jan! So sad and well-written.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 4:31:00 PM

Thanks Thomas. I wasn't going to enter the contest originally I found the images so harrowing:-( hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/2/2015 1:38:00 PM

Sad that this is a reality for some women and men..I enjoyed reading your contest entry..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 1:49:00 PM

Men women and children suffer - so so sad:-( Hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 9/2/2015 1:07:00 PM

Jan, you penned it wonderfully, such a deep and sad theme, best of luck, but quite sure it is a winner and thanks for visiting my neighbor poem ~~

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 1:48:00 PM

Thanks Broken Wings:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/2/2015 12:45:00 PM

i feel the pain, jan... this is indeed a compelling piece; wow!.. huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 1:48:00 PM

Thanks Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Anu Nayak

Date: 9/2/2015 11:57:00 AM

Dear Jan, this poem has lot of pain of abuse..... wish all abuses are abused to leave this globe....wish....... good luck for the contest dear....love, Anu:-)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 11:59:00 AM

Thanks Anu I found it very hard to write for the contest the images are so harrowing:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 9/2/2015 10:02:00 AM

Very good write, and so much of the abuse out there good luck in the contest a 7 Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 10:04:00 AM

Thanks Eve. I found the images so chilling i wasn't going to enter the contest - then this came to me last night:-( hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 9/2/2015 9:51:00 AM

Gut wrenching lines, Jan. Actually, verbal abuse is more damaging than physical abuse, with lasting effect on the victim. 7. All the best in the contest! PS. It is indeed a tough situation with your mom, I hope you'll be able to cope better as the days go by. Take care. hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 9:53:00 AM

Abuse of any sort shouldn't happen but sadly we know it does - yes verbal abuse wears the victim down it simply cannot be seen like bruises:-( hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/2/2015 9:19:00 AM

Oh, my sweet Jan. This is so sad. Yes, in one way or another, we are all walking wounded. Abuse has many shapes and forms. Good luck in the contest. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 9:21:00 AM

Verbal abuse can be as damaging as physical abuse:-( Hugs jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 9/2/2015 7:42:00 AM

The contest says, "Knock us down with your lines" this falls under the category of "Knock us over backwards with your lines" Excellent Jan....

Jan Allison
Date: 9/2/2015 7:46:00 AM

Thanks Judy I wasn't going to enter the contest I found the images so heartbreaking but thought the nonette style would suit a short but powerful poem:-) hugs jan xx