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My Brief Sweet Breath of Yesterday

You stole my breath away that day we met. As dark clouds burst, you led me by my arm inside a small café out of the wet, but I could not escape your rain of charm! With idle chat, you knew how to disarm me. How you poured it on! I was a flower that blossomed from your smile so soft and warm as there we lingered for more than an hour. I watched your moving lips and felt their power, just thinking of them placed upon my own! Then suddenly my reverie turned sour. You reached into your wallet; I was shown a photo of your lovely fiancé. You were my brief sweet breath of yesterday! for Jared Pickett's At First Glance Free Poetry Contest

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Date: 8/19/2020 10:36:00 AM
A bittersweet romantic Italian sonnet from your golden pen. Another delightful read. Loved the line "but I could not escape your rain of charm" after coming in out of the storm. Your mastery of this form never ceases to amaze.
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Date: 4/7/2011 11:48:00 AM
Great poem, Andrea. The ending was a real surprise : ) Jack
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Date: 3/21/2011 6:41:00 AM
lovely little story youve written hear, congrats on the placement, really enjoyed.
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Date: 3/16/2011 3:49:00 PM
I liked this when I read it before and I still do. Congratulations Andrea. Loe, Joyce
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Date: 3/16/2011 12:24:00 PM
sad end and i didn't see it coming! Congrad's on this fine win! Light & Love
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Date: 3/16/2011 8:17:00 AM
Congratulations in the contest of Dr. Ram Mehta "The Spenserian Sonnet" Andrea. A well deserved winner. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/15/2011 9:35:00 PM
Kudos Andrea for 3rd position in Dr Ram's Spenserian contest with this creative piece. Hope it's just a fiction. Luv & best wishes - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 3/15/2011 8:24:00 PM
Such a sweet breath my friend. So refreshing and lovely. Many warmest comgratulations for this win.
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Date: 3/15/2011 3:44:00 PM
What a lovely story....melancholy and tender!! WEll done, Andrea! Congrats on your win!!
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Date: 3/15/2011 1:20:00 PM
A great win for a great write.........George
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Date: 3/15/2011 10:40:00 AM
Guess all the best ones are taken, Andrea. How disappointing. Great sonnet and congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/15/2011 8:38:00 AM
Great to see you at the top againAndrea. Congratulations on your quite worthy poem's honored third place. Agape, Moses
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Date: 3/15/2011 8:22:00 AM
Super congrats Andrea on a spectacular win in Dr. Ram's Sonnet contest befitting the Queen of the Sonnet luv.. enjoy another top ten sweet victory my friend with luv..
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Date: 3/15/2011 7:58:00 AM
Congratulations on the third place win in my contest, Andrea
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Date: 2/22/2011 12:20:00 PM
~~MAGNIFICENT~~I am stopping by just to thank you Andrea, for your kind comment and also to ask you to continue with your writing endeavors. Love,Carol
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Date: 2/22/2011 6:11:00 AM
Andrea - you weave feelings well with a twist. One finds almost there and lo behold expectations veer off dramatically in a different direction. Best luck for contest. Thnx for visiting my work,"sex meditating" and liking the verse. Luv & Best wishes always - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 2/17/2011 12:35:00 PM
This is perfect... I love how you wrote this; how you turned the phrasing into feeling into being into leading... And then the 'gotcha' at the end. Best wishes in the contest. This is excellent. Love, Deb
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Date: 2/16/2011 2:30:00 PM
So good Andrea.No it wasn't a bio it was wrote for a friend I felt she needed to think about her relationship before making a mistake.Glad your reading my stuff.Appreciate your input and comments.~LUV~Teresa
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Date: 2/16/2011 11:57:00 AM
You did some very nice work here, Andrea. Great use of the "volta" as Dr. Ram requested. The last think you wanted to see was a photo of his fiance. Best wishes in the contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 2/15/2011 7:51:00 PM
Best of luck in the contest with this moving piece Andrea. Wish I had time to post to so many more, but I just do what I can...Love, Connie
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Date: 2/15/2011 8:47:00 AM
So beautiful,sweet sad and sweet . I'm .tryin to get back on track,plenty to catch up with :)
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Date: 2/14/2011 4:53:00 PM
ooo! nice entry Andrea, nice sweet memory,,, enjoyed good luck in the contest,..p.d.
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Date: 2/14/2011 4:00:00 PM
Great sonnet Andrea. Good luck in the contest. Thanks for your always kind comments. Love, Joyce
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Date: 2/14/2011 2:25:00 PM
Thanks for commenting on my blog.
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Date: 2/14/2011 10:01:00 AM
Such a beautiful and so enchanting a write you have sketched that too with a charm of its own kind. It was really a joy to read such a refreshing Sonnet. My good wishes for your contest entry my friend. Love and best wishes always....Ravindra Dietrich.
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