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1/21/2026 for Traditional Cinquain Poetry Contest sponsored by Sotto Poet

My son is 33 years old now, but this how I remember him when he was a small boy.  This is my take on "3) The beauty of your loved ones."  

 

My Boy

My boy,
inscrutable,
mystifying his folks,
a live, moving Mona Lisa -
unknown

Shy one,
timid, withdrawn,
not uttering a peep -
we sure would like to talk to you.
reserved

Pure soul
open, guileless
trusts with an open heart
like a flower in a garden
guilt free

Mild child
patient, peaceful
would not hurt anyone -
if but more of us were like you
kindly

Thinker,
keen observer,
silently noticing,
nothing escapes your watchful eyes
wise one
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Goldsmith Avatar
May 11, 2026 at 12:10 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "My Boy" write. I would print this off/frame it as a gift for him. Have a blessed day with your wonderful win...............
Crandall Avatar
May 11, 2026 at 9:05 PM
Thanks, Paula!
Poteet Avatar
May 8, 2026 at 7:14 AM
You chose the most popular topic as did I. Enjoyed your piece immensely. I raised two sons and am helping raise two grandsons with a great grandson who at two matches your last cinquain perfectly. and Though my boys are very different, I see many similarities in your piece here. Congratulations
Crandall Avatar
May 8, 2026 at 7:21 PM
Thanks, Reason! Wow, that's nice, grandsons and great grandsons. I may be having my first grandchild in the next few years. My son is recently married, and kids are in their plans.
Dietrich Avatar
May 7, 2026 at 10:01 PM
I love yours. It's actually one of the best in the contest, in my opinion. Congrats for making the winner list!
Crandall Avatar
May 8, 2026 at 7:18 PM
Thanks, Andrea!
Godwin Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 2:34 PM
Are you trying to make me cry? Have you showed this to him? Forget about how truly poetic it is, it's beautifully, sincerely emotive and feels written by your heart. LOVE THIS
Crandall Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 6:42 PM
Thanks, CayCay! I'm glad you like this one. Thanks for your appreciation. I haven't showed it to him. I think about how I sometimes wanted him to achieve when he was already a superstar, in his own way. I was lucky to have a good kid. Now, he's a good grown-up - lol!
Rodrigues Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 8:58 AM
Very nice! We are the whole. Love that we can see our kids through different mirrors. I was ruminating on my eldest a couple days ago.
Crandall Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 10:33 AM
Thanks, yep, it's nice to go back to a certain point in time!
Jones Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 8:20 AM
A touching write full of the endearing love of a father. It is emotive and sweet you did well. I don’t know how to write in this form lol. But I enjoyed reading your poem. Best wishes for contest!
Crandall Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 10:32 AM
Thanks, Karen! I'm sure you'd do a good job with this form!
Rodgers Avatar
January 21, 2026 at 4:17 PM
Hello David, Ahhhh “A live, moving Mona Lisa” made me smile, it’s such a beautiful way to show mystery and admiration at once for your boy. The way you show your strength, patience, and trust feels gentle and full of love and he is carefully seen and valued. Winter Blessings, David, Daniel
Crandall Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 10:33 AM
Hi Daniel - nice to hear!
Crandall Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 10:31 AM
Hi Daniel - nice to hear!
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