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Sara Jama's My Bloody Valentine Contest ~ 2/13/25

My Bloody Valentine

As darkness approaches, I grow anxious for our meeting
when your first touch will make me shiver in greeting.
An invitation to a private feast, darling, for you to dine.
After centuries together, I've no fear you will not decline.

We've quipped about it being called Valentine's 'Day'
when only in the night is it safe to come out and play.
Since the first time you made love to me in your lair,
I cannot get enough of your animalistic savoir faire. 

My proposal will be waiting when you rise from bed.
You'll find me in the garden. It's nearly time to be fed.
My hunger is growing for what my body requires from you.
My thirst will be quenched when moonlight shines through.

Ebony the night, and in its silence, I'm desperately needing
to feel your lips on mine and nibbles to start the bleeding.
All of me will surrender when you wake and become mine...
my lover in shadowed places; my beloved bloody valentine.

Around my shoulders you'll wrap me in your heavy cloak.
Passion will arouse between us with every tender stroke.
Moving through the fog, we will tryst inside your crypt...
my buttons unfastened and your pants slowly unzipped.

There's a sudden feeling that I get from you each night,
eagerness for what's to come when I feel your first bite.
I'll tilt my head back and desire will hit me with a rush.
Your crimson lips silence me as my blood begins to gush.

You drink just enough to keep our love a burning ember.
Being in your arms is the only place I will ever remember.
Drink from me, darling, as if the libation is a fine wine,
and then I will drink from you, my beloved bloody valentine.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025


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Date: 2/14/2025 7:27:00 PM
Lin, I read all the placements but what I like about your poem is that it has teeth, blood, storyline, and innuendo that captivates me. It grabs me. And held me on to every word, and I didn't want to let go. Your poem epitomizes Bloody Valentine the most.
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/15/2025 2:12:00 AM
Thank you for enjoying my lines, Connie. I think your comments are bloody well appreciated!
Date: 2/14/2025 4:01:00 PM
I was going to pass comment but I’m too busy mopping my brow, you little devil you. A touch of the Jolly Cooper here me thinks. Seriously, Lin, a little eerie erotica to enliven my valentines evening. Problem is… I climb my stairs at night in the dark… and a couple of them creak……. YIKES!!!
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/15/2025 9:33:00 AM
oh but Terry... jolly fits you so much better.
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Terry Flood
Date: 2/15/2025 3:14:00 AM
Bloody corrective text… I did of course mean JILLY Cooper
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/14/2025 7:33:00 PM
Lol Terry. Not long ago on another poem I was called a little vixen. Here’s what you need to do while climbing the stairs… whistle.
Date: 2/14/2025 8:34:00 AM
Lin, wow!! This is really something we all need to try out! lol!! You created a very dark and passionate sense of lust. It's hard to imagine how violent love making can become, but your take on this theme crosses fantasy and reality in a believable way. Take care!
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/14/2025 8:52:00 AM
I'm definitely not an advocate of violent love making, but I used my imagination with Vampires. lol A nibble ok... A bite to draw blood? Only in their dark world. I had fun with this one and tried to draw a little humor among their lustful behavior.
Date: 2/13/2025 2:44:00 PM
you sure made me smile with this sensual humourous but bloody write Lin lol:-) but i still don't celebrate valentine's day lol:-) hugs jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/13/2025 2:46:00 PM
I get valentine kisses from my kiddos. The sweetest kind. Sensual humour! That’s a good theme.
Date: 2/13/2025 10:32:00 AM
Hello Lin Lang, Wow! This is so different. it feels more like Halloween. then changed to Valentine Hugs. /Darlene/
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 2/14/2025 12:36:00 PM
Hello Lin Lang, oh! i did not know that. Your welcome. Hugs. Darlene/
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/13/2025 10:43:00 AM
Darlene, vampires don’t only come alive on Halloween. They can celebrate every night with a feast on each other, bloody or not. Thanks for commenting.
Date: 2/13/2025 8:12:00 AM
Lol Valentines day meets Halloween, you rose well to the challenge Lin. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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Lin Lane
Date: 2/13/2025 8:54:00 AM
Bloody well that you think I did, Tom. Thanks! lol I didn't want to write about a bloody mess and took the more sensually humorous approach. I think I may have gotten a little too caught up in their torrid nightly feasting. They certainly are a handsome couple, despite the fangs.
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