My Beloved Young Mother

Sacrificing her childhood at an early age of sixteen ,been wedded to an elderly man of thirty,lacked intimacy and understanding with my dad, amid lot of risk & struggle had given birth to me at the age of seventeen; acquiring no warmth neither from parents nor spouse~ she wrestled alone Without happiness & support she survived in this enormous city taking care of me, gradually gifted me a sibling when I turned four.Though we were deprived of food we filled our stomachs with pure love fed by her in abundance. benevolently given birth to her children~ in the unknown world To provide us education she strived arduous to claim source of income from her imperfect life partner;Feeling disgusted at one point of time, lost patience and found a difficult chore in a bijou factory (since she had no education) eminently suffering health problems ,gave up after we requested her. fatigued by tussles swiftly sought occupation~ fell ill aftermath Luckily, I completed my graduation and immediately acquired job for supporting my family.Now I can find a little comfort in her lovely eyes.Though not entirely, at least she is blissful that I am independent.Now, wishing her second child(my brother) to complete his studies successfully without any hurdles. altruistic soul with thirsty eyes now awaits ~ for his victory.
Aug 13, 2020. Note:Let the pens flow..Haibun- poetry Contest. Sponsored by Jenish Somadas.

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Date: 9/22/2020 11:35:00 AM
Like Susan say, a deeply moving and intimate tribute to your beloved mother. So many women of my mother's era, endured the same. God bless them each and every one. Many congrat's on your win.
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Date: 9/18/2020 4:45:00 PM
Your poem is a deeply moving and intimate tribute to your beloved mother. Emotion and imagery flows effortlessly from your talented pen, V. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Date: 9/16/2020 11:36:00 PM
Congrats on your win Deepa.. A touching story..
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V. Deepa
Date: 9/17/2020 12:39:00 PM
Thankyou dear Jenish sir for motivating me to take up this new poetic form :-)This is my first try. Am glad your liked the story. Take care.Warm regards to you:-)
Date: 8/29/2020 6:08:00 PM
wow, she is super young, V. She sounds so marvelous and I can see your heart poured into this. You are doing her proud, and I am sure she knows this!
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V. Deepa
Date: 9/17/2020 12:37:00 PM
Yes...dear Andrea mam..she is a wonderful personality filled with love and kindness..:-)Yup ,mum is proud of me..but doesn't know about my poetry works. Thankyou for your kind words. Take care.Much love:-)
Date: 8/17/2020 3:33:00 PM
She sounds an amazing lady Deepa, you must be so proud of her. Tom
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V. Deepa
Date: 8/18/2020 2:46:00 AM
Hello Tom sir, Thankyou.Yes, she is a gem, am truly proud of her.:-) I believe your doing fine..! Take care.Warmest regards:-)
Date: 8/13/2020 3:49:00 PM
Hello Deepa, your mother has gone through rough times. Times are hard whether single or married,or widowed. But your mom has come a long way, and one day will have grandchildren. She id the bet she could at those times. She now has you and your brother to be proud of. Much love Darlene
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 8/14/2020 3:56:00 PM
Hello Deepa, I know you will keep your mom happy. Enjoy your evening my friend. Much love Darlene
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V. Deepa
Date: 8/14/2020 6:58:00 AM
Yes, Darlene mam. You are right.Mother's love is immeasurable..!! Sure, we will keep her happy.Thankyou mam:-) Have a lovely day.Much love:-)
Date: 8/13/2020 2:25:00 PM
This is quite a touching story, Deepa. Kudos to you and your family for overcoming obstacles that many face. You should be very proud of yourself for completing your education and supporting your family. Your poem delivers on your theme brilliantly. ..In some ways I too can relate to your story.
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V. Deepa
Date: 8/14/2020 6:55:00 AM
Thankyou Vijay sir for your lovely appreciation and uplifting words:-) Yes, I am proud about myself sir. Am surprised to know that you can relate to my story. Anyways let's be strong and spread our knowledge and smile to everyone around us.:-) Take care.Have a wonderful day.Warm regards sent..:-)
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