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Daddy look at this place Mommy said it’s a disgrace cos nothing’s in the right place the floor’s an obstacle race and my best book on space isn’t in the book case BUT my kid sister Grace is lurking on the staircase she’s got a grin on her face - That smile I’d like to erase! Daddy I can only assume she’s been in my bedroom As she can now reach the door Daddy I’ve warned her before One day there’s gonna be war! Daddy just hear my plea Please please give me a key Then I can lock my sister out And then mommy won’t shout… At me! Look At This Place! Poetry Contest Sponsored by Matt Caliri 04/12/21

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Jack Horne

Date: 4/25/2021 7:35:00 AM

LOL, glad I was an only child

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 4/16/2021 10:29:00 PM

Hello Jan ... What a great poem considering I've had kids that you described so - well done Jan - Lindsay

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 4/16/2021 7:39:00 AM

What a cute poem with a definite message in it to keep out of my bedroom- sisters (and brothers) are such pests sometimes - thank God I have none but my husband does and couldn't agree with you more. Hope you got the verse for the collaboration. Well penned my friend. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Terry Flood

Date: 4/14/2021 4:17:00 PM

No decent parent should show favouritism, but we both know that parents don’t always read the rule book. A clearly deep felt write, Jan, and all the more profound for it. Nice job. Terry

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/14/2021 10:44:00 AM

- Like most siblings ... of course you have to get a key ... a lovely poem, Jan :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Rico Leffanta

Date: 4/13/2021 12:03:00 PM

Children do start young to gain their parents favour! Well said, Jan! Aloha! Rico

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 1:54:00 PM

Thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile

Date: 4/13/2021 7:14:00 AM

At first I thought the title sister was a scapegoat and then I thought differently! I enjoyed the read and thinking about it! Happy Tuesday and good luck xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 1:53:00 PM

Thanks Mike:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 4/13/2021 12:51:00 AM

Relatives often cause some pain. Give her a key :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 1:53:00 PM

Thanks Victor:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 4/12/2021 9:47:00 PM

Hi Jan, I loved, loved this—good content and rhymes. I found it to be so relatable, it caused me to take a walk down memory lane. And I started thinking about the relationships I had with my own siblings when we were growing up. Best wishes in the contest. Best wishes in the contest. Have a wonderful evening:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2021 1:53:00 PM

Thanks Alexis:-) hugs jan xx