Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

Notes About The Poem

My Bedroom

Daddy look at this place
Mommy said it’s a disgrace
cos nothing’s in the right place
the floor’s an obstacle race
and my best book on space
isn’t in the book case

BUT my kid sister Grace
is lurking on the staircase
she’s got a grin on her face -
That smile I’d like to erase!

Daddy I can only assume
she’s been in my bedroom
As she can now reach the door
Daddy I’ve warned her before
One day there’s gonna be war!

Daddy just hear my plea
Please please give me a key
Then I can lock my sister out
And then mommy won’t shout…
At me!

Look At This Place! Poetry Contest

Sponsored by Matt Caliri 

04/12/21

♡Like0

Share Poem

---

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Jack Horne April 25, 2021 at 7:35 AM LOL, glad I was an only child

Lindsay Laurie April 16, 2021 at 10:29 PM Hello Jan ... What a great poem considering I've had kids that you described so - well done Jan - Lindsay

Jennifer Proxenos April 16, 2021 at 7:39 AM What a cute poem with a definite message in it to keep out of my bedroom- sisters (and brothers) are such pests sometimes - thank God I have none but my husband does and couldn't agree with you more. Hope you got the verse for the collaboration. Well penned my friend. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Terry Flood April 14, 2021 at 4:17 PM No decent parent should show favouritism, but we both know that parents don’t always read the rule book. A clearly deep felt write, Jan, and all the more profound for it. Nice job. Terry

Anne-Lise Andresen April 14, 2021 at 10:44 AM - Like most siblings ... of course you have to get a key ... a lovely poem, Jan :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Rico Leffanta April 13, 2021 at 12:03 PM Children do start young to gain their parents favour! Well said, Jan! Aloha! Rico Jan Allison April 13, 2021 at 1:54 PM Thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile April 13, 2021 at 7:14 AM At first I thought the title sister was a scapegoat and then I thought differently! I enjoyed the read and thinking about it! Happy Tuesday and good luck xxoo Jan Allison April 13, 2021 at 1:53 PM Thanks Mike:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar April 13, 2021 at 12:51 AM Relatives often cause some pain. Give her a key :) Jan Allison April 13, 2021 at 1:53 PM Thanks Victor:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. April 12, 2021 at 9:47 PM Hi Jan, I loved, loved this—good content and rhymes. I found it to be so relatable, it caused me to take a walk down memory lane. And I started thinking about the relationships I had with my own siblings when we were growing up. Best wishes in the contest. Best wishes in the contest. Have a wonderful evening:-) Alexis Jan Allison April 13, 2021 at 1:53 PM Thanks Alexis:-) hugs jan xx

Robert Pettit April 12, 2021 at 2:38 PM My late younger brother always got the upper hand, I assume. He was four years younger than me despite being a boomboom. Jan Allison April 12, 2021 at 2:50 PM thanks for sharing that Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

David Kavanagh April 12, 2021 at 2:21 PM Heya Jan, You capture sibling rivalry here, in a lighthearted innocent poem, that really works so well, kids who’d have em, cheers David Jan Allison April 12, 2021 at 2:43 PM Thanks David:-) jugs Janxx

Christopher Flaherty April 12, 2021 at 2:03 PM Because it is i not but she who always gets the blame Jan Allison April 12, 2021 at 2:42 PM oh so true Christopher:-) hugs Jan xx