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Daddy look at this place Mommy said it’s a disgrace cos nothing’s in the right place the floor’s an obstacle race and my best book on space isn’t in the book case BUT my kid sister Grace is lurking on the staircase she’s got a grin on her face - That smile I’d like to erase! Daddy I can only assume she’s been in my bedroom As she can now reach the door Daddy I’ve warned her before One day there’s gonna be war! Daddy just hear my plea Please please give me a key Then I can lock my sister out And then mommy won’t shout… At me! Look At This Place! Poetry Contest Sponsored by Matt Caliri 04/12/21

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Date: 4/25/2021 7:35:00 AM
LOL, glad I was an only child
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Date: 4/16/2021 10:29:00 PM
Hello Jan ... What a great poem considering I've had kids that you described so - well done Jan - Lindsay
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Date: 4/16/2021 7:39:00 AM
What a cute poem with a definite message in it to keep out of my bedroom- sisters (and brothers) are such pests sometimes - thank God I have none but my husband does and couldn't agree with you more. Hope you got the verse for the collaboration. Well penned my friend. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 4/14/2021 4:17:00 PM
No decent parent should show favouritism, but we both know that parents don’t always read the rule book. A clearly deep felt write, Jan, and all the more profound for it. Nice job. Terry
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Date: 4/14/2021 1:52:00 PM
Best Wishes for the contest, Jan! This splendid poem reminds me of my childhood and the bedroom I had. A favorite!
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Date: 4/14/2021 10:44:00 AM
- Like most siblings ... of course you have to get a key ... a lovely poem, Jan :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/13/2021 12:03:00 PM
Children do start young to gain their parents favour! Well said, Jan! Aloha! Rico
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Date: 4/13/2021 1:54:00 PM
Thanks Rico:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/13/2021 7:14:00 AM
At first I thought the title sister was a scapegoat and then I thought differently! I enjoyed the read and thinking about it! Happy Tuesday and good luck xxoo
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Date: 4/13/2021 1:53:00 PM
Thanks Mike:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/13/2021 12:51:00 AM
Relatives often cause some pain. Give her a key :)
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Date: 4/13/2021 1:53:00 PM
Thanks Victor:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/12/2021 9:47:00 PM
Hi Jan, I loved, loved this—good content and rhymes. I found it to be so relatable, it caused me to take a walk down memory lane. And I started thinking about the relationships I had with my own siblings when we were growing up. Best wishes in the contest. Best wishes in the contest. Have a wonderful evening:-) Alexis
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Date: 4/13/2021 1:53:00 PM
Thanks Alexis:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 4/12/2021 2:38:00 PM
My late younger brother always got the upper hand, I assume. He was four years younger than me despite being a boomboom.
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Date: 4/12/2021 2:50:00 PM
thanks for sharing that Robert:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 4/12/2021 2:21:00 PM
Heya Jan, You capture sibling rivalry here, in a lighthearted innocent poem, that really works so well, kids who’d have em, cheers David
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Date: 4/12/2021 2:43:00 PM
Thanks David:-) jugs Janxx
Date: 4/12/2021 2:03:00 PM
Because it is i not but she who always gets the blame
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Date: 4/12/2021 2:42:00 PM
oh so true Christopher:-) hugs Jan xx