Muddied

she sits there with the same blank stare as this moonless sky her thoughts stacked like these clouds swirling above her tears streaming faster than this rain shatter on the ground atop puddles as muddied as her soul (Bus scribble)

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Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/17/2020 5:11:00 AM

This reminds me of a time I just sat in the grass and sobbed, with cars driving by.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/17/2020 10:33:00 AM

i bet many of us have done that very thing...sadly... hugs

Frederic Parker

Date: 1/15/2020 6:57:00 PM

very descriptive in observation and contemplation, you have a poet's soul, it's one I recognize

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 7:11:00 PM

wow... thank you so much Frederic....you made me smile this evening :) hugs

John Hamilton

Date: 1/15/2020 12:35:00 PM

I enjoy your so called scribbles, these are deep writes, complex beyond what you know and understand, they are simple for you because you possess a gift ... a skill few have. I'm out of superlatives with you Sandy!

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 7:10:00 PM

wow thank you John...your comment touched me and made me smile...these scribbles used to pop in my head and be lost by time i got home... now i write them when i get the chance so i don't lose them... :) hugs

Running Wolves

Date: 1/15/2020 8:58:00 AM

and through the muddied puddles a lone lungfish waddles its way back to the cleansing ocean... Back to a life of happiness...at peace...at home....renewed in spirit...

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 10:47:00 AM

lol... you have a great imagination...thanks for the great comment..

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/15/2020 7:14:00 AM

I see her-- blank stares--streaming tears..a portrait beautifully painted.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 10:46:00 AM

Thank you so much Vijay...glad i brought her to life for you in so few words :)

Chris Green

Date: 1/15/2020 7:10:00 AM

Sending you a smile and a hug Sandy. Hoping your day is much less muddy than your evening.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 10:45:00 AM

it started out rainy again... supposed to get sunny later.. thanks for the kind words, smile and hug...we all could use more of the three in this world... hugs

Peter Rees

Date: 1/15/2020 6:57:00 AM

Such troubled thoughts. How to unscramble in this frenzied modern world. Your lines quite likely express emotions all too recognisable to many. Nicely written.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 10:44:00 AM

Thank you so much Peter...i am good at throwing emotions out there... many if not all can relate to most emotions in life... :)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/15/2020 6:42:00 AM

A bold portrait; well penned.

Sandra Adams
Date: 1/15/2020 10:43:00 AM

thank you so much M.L.