Lin Lane Poet Pantoum

Mourning of a Fragile Heart: Collaboration

Cold rain is my companion on this night that's gone askew
I walk the street alone, my heart in splinters and shattered
Rain mingles with tears; my world blurred in shades of blue
Love is a paradox of emotions, tossed about and scattered

I walk the street alone, my heart in splinters and shattered
Shadows lengthened in the lambency of burning lamp light
Love is a paradox of emotions, tossed about and scattered
Melancholy memories haunt me in cloudy visions tonight

Shadows lengthened in the lambency of burning lamp light  
You say it's over and now I’m left with a fragmented heart 
Melancholy memories haunt me in cloudy visions tonight 
My pain is raw. I can't comprehend why you would depart 

You say it's over and now I’m left with a fragmented heart 
Rain mingles with tears; my world blurred in shades of blue 
My pain is raw. I can't comprehend why you would depart 
Cold rain is my companion on this night that's gone askew 


Thank you to my collaborator. Something old is new again.

1/12/2018
DO-IT Duets Contest
sponsor: James E, Lee Jr,

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Line Gauthier April 21, 2018 at 4:45 PM Belated congrats on your win with this fine collaborative pantoum, Lin. Lin Lane April 22, 2018 at 5:35 AM Thanks ever so much, Line.

Seren Roberts January 21, 2018 at 11:02 PM Well done Jan and Lin isn't it great us sharing first place.... Lin Lane January 22, 2018 at 5:38 AM Thanks...yes

Jan Allison January 21, 2018 at 9:26 AM woohoooh Lin we did it thanks for agreeing to write with me and congrats on our shared win!!! hugs jan xx Lin Lane January 21, 2018 at 10:57 AM We did and it's an honor shared.

Joseph May January 21, 2018 at 5:04 AM "A world blurred in shades of blue"...Very nicely done Lin..Congrats on your win, thanks for your support.. Lin Lane January 21, 2018 at 10:56 AM Thanks, Joseph. Jan and I are honored.

Gregory Richard Barden January 18, 2018 at 1:26 AM Breathtaking and melancholy, edged with tragedy of the heart ... the rust on every blade of "goodbye". I adore this collaboration, and you obviously have a wonderful connection. Gorgeous! <3 Lin Lane January 21, 2018 at 10:55 AM thank you, greg. I'd type more, but you know why I can't manage right now.

Alexis Y. January 12, 2018 at 6:50 PM Hi Lin, Aha , I see who Jan's collaborator is . You two did an amazing job. I enjoy the pantoum form.The heartache and loneliness one feels from losing the one they love, is evident in this well written piece. Excellent job. I wish you both the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis Lin Lane January 12, 2018 at 9:01 PM Thanks for the compliments and well wishes, Alexis.

Tim Smith January 12, 2018 at 5:53 PM This is incredible. I thought I had a chance for first but not after seeing this gem :) Lin Lane January 12, 2018 at 9:00 PM I'm sure your collaboration will be up to the task, Tim. Thanks!

Jan Allison January 12, 2018 at 4:29 PM I found it a real challenge to write the pantoum form and was so pleased with the way the poem turned out in the end. it was my pleasure to collaborate with you Lin:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane January 12, 2018 at 9:00 PM It's always an adventure to write with you, Jan. I'm happy that you're feeling better. Don't over do. Thanks for being my partner.