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Mourning of a Fragile Heart: Collaboration

Cold rain is my companion on this night that's gone askew I walk the street alone, my heart in splinters and shattered Rain mingles with tears; my world blurred in shades of blue Love is a paradox of emotions, tossed about and scattered I walk the street alone, my heart in splinters and shattered Shadows lengthened in the lambency of burning lamp light Love is a paradox of emotions, tossed about and scattered Melancholy memories haunt me in cloudy visions tonight Shadows lengthened in the lambency of burning lamp light You say it's over and now I’m left with a fragmented heart Melancholy memories haunt me in cloudy visions tonight My pain is raw. I can't comprehend why you would depart You say it's over and now I’m left with a fragmented heart Rain mingles with tears; my world blurred in shades of blue My pain is raw. I can't comprehend why you would depart Cold rain is my companion on this night that's gone askew Thank you to my collaborator. Something old is new again. 1/12/2018 DO-IT Duets Contest sponsor: James E, Lee Jr,

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Line Gauthier

Date: 4/21/2018 4:45:00 PM

Belated congrats on your win with this fine collaborative pantoum, Lin.

Lin Lane
Date: 4/22/2018 5:35:00 AM

Thanks ever so much, Line.

Seren Roberts

Date: 1/21/2018 11:02:00 PM

Well done Jan and Lin isn't it great us sharing first place....

Lin Lane
Date: 1/22/2018 5:38:00 AM

Thanks...yes

Jan Allison

Date: 1/21/2018 9:26:00 AM

woohoooh Lin we did it thanks for agreeing to write with me and congrats on our shared win!!! hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 1/21/2018 10:57:00 AM

We did and it's an honor shared.

Joseph May

Date: 1/21/2018 5:04:00 AM

"A world blurred in shades of blue"...Very nicely done Lin..Congrats on your win, thanks for your support..

Lin Lane
Date: 1/21/2018 10:56:00 AM

Thanks, Joseph. Jan and I are honored.

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 1/18/2018 1:26:00 AM

Breathtaking and melancholy, edged with tragedy of the heart ... the rust on every blade of "goodbye". I adore this collaboration, and you obviously have a wonderful connection. Gorgeous! <3

Lin Lane
Date: 1/21/2018 10:55:00 AM

thank you, greg. I'd type more, but you know why I can't manage right now.

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/12/2018 6:50:00 PM

Hi Lin, Aha , I see who Jan's collaborator is . You two did an amazing job. I enjoy the pantoum form.The heartache and loneliness one feels from losing the one they love, is evident in this well written piece. Excellent job. I wish you both the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2018 9:01:00 PM

Thanks for the compliments and well wishes, Alexis.

Tim Smith

Date: 1/12/2018 5:53:00 PM

This is incredible. I thought I had a chance for first but not after seeing this gem :)

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2018 9:00:00 PM

I'm sure your collaboration will be up to the task, Tim. Thanks!

Jan Allison

Date: 1/12/2018 4:29:00 PM

I found it a real challenge to write the pantoum form and was so pleased with the way the poem turned out in the end. it was my pleasure to collaborate with you Lin:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 1/12/2018 9:00:00 PM

It's always an adventure to write with you, Jan. I'm happy that you're feeling better. Don't over do. Thanks for being my partner.