Mountaintop Lake

On mountaintop lake I swam all alone
while the afternoon sweltering sun shone
being 95 degrees out this was a treat
but little did I know who I would meet,

Floating on my back towards some reeds
I felt something tickle me on my feet
looking around I didn't see anything
the water kind of brackish but pretty clean,

Before I knew it the monster grabbed me
his amphibious head and body made me scream
looking like part man and part fish
his mouth puckering opening and closing as if to kiss,

He dragged me mercilessly several feet down
and gasping for air I feared I would drown
so with all my might I kicked him where it hurts
and while he cowered I swam away with a lurch,

Running to shore where I had my belongings
I remembered I had brought a weapon for a warning
the Gill man coming out of the water towards me
I yelled "STOP" or I'm going to zap you positively,

At first he didn't understand me or flee
and like a puppy dog he tilted his head simply
turning around frustrated he went back to the water
diving in he disappeared like a reptilian otter,

Arriving at the police station I replayed the scene
of the gill man in the lake who was the color green
the police just stared at me like I was a loon
and said "lady you must've been watching the creature
from the black lagoon!"


5-15-17

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 6/25/2017 9:59:00 AM
What a creepy kind of guy to do such a thing to you. Anybody else have your experience?
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Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 6/25/2017 8:35:00 PM
Thank God it was just my imagination used in this poem after watching that old black and white movie "Revenge of the Creature from the Black Lagoon", lol! Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Alfred!~Che :)
Date: 6/11/2017 1:30:00 PM
Lol! You sure know how to make a person laugh and smile, Cheryl. Very funny poem, with rib-tickling ending. A real humorous write. Love always.
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Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 6/11/2017 7:43:00 PM
Glad I could make you laugh a bit Freddie; Lord knows we could use a little more chuckles these days! Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit! P & L~Che :)
Date: 5/17/2017 8:03:00 AM
Lol! Horror movies sure have changed haven't they! Can't believe this one used to scare me! Great poem!
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Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 5/17/2017 9:00:00 AM
They were so corny back then that they were funny! (Thats why they're fun to watch~if you ever need a chuckle!) Thanks for very kind comment and visit!~Che :)
Date: 5/16/2017 9:55:00 PM
Cheryl, you right some great stuff! I love it! Thanks for sharing. - Dean
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Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 5/17/2017 7:33:00 AM
Thanks so much for very kind comment and visit Dean; appreciate it!~Che :)
Date: 5/16/2017 1:22:00 AM
Swamp thing! I'm staying out the pool for a while now. Nice one.
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Cheryl Hoffman
Date: 5/16/2017 8:15:00 AM
Lol, I don't blame you Rob! Thanks for very kind comment and visit!~Che :)
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