Mountains

The base camp was my youth
I stood alone, ill-equipped, looking up.
The challenge before me, gullies filled with tangled unknowns
and sharp lessons.
My guides had abandoned me, left, tight lipped
no map, no promise
little hope
and so I started my ascent,
faltering, stumbling, tightly gripping
any friendships I could find,
skinning my knees on setbacks as ages passed
until I found myself peering over the summit,
elated.
But in the distance
oh God.................
another mountain
and at its base
another me

For contest 'Mountains', sponsor Julia Ward
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Rycroft Avatar
July 22, 2016 at 3:20 PM
Congrats well written great poem xx
Wigley Avatar
July 23, 2016 at 12:54 AM
Thanks Wendy, glad you liked it. Viv x
Cheema Avatar
July 21, 2016 at 2:06 PM
Viv, what an achievement! After one ascent you're ready for the next! Congrats at your great achievement!
A  Avatar
July 19, 2016 at 10:57 AM
Congratulations Viv....skat
Wigley Avatar
July 19, 2016 at 3:16 PM
Thanks, Skat, hope you're well, Viv x
Medders Tobechi Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 3:17 PM
Very deep imagery.....Congratulations on your trophy win....
Wigley Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 9:56 PM
Cheers, Janice, glad you like it. Viv x
Roper Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 2:13 PM
I love the imageries you have left, Viv, wow... Congratulations on your win!
Wigley Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 9:57 PM
Thanks Eve, a bit surprised, myself. Viv x
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July 18, 2016 at 11:14 AM
The conquest! reminds me of my mountain climbing days...:D Congrats on your win.
Rodrigues Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 8:55 AM
Very nice! Comgrats!
Chansarkar Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 8:37 AM
Another one and then another, yes never ending mountains for us!Congrats Viv.its a lovely poem!
Haight Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 8:19 AM
I love your poem, Viv, and it's metaphorical power. Congrats on your well-deserved Second Place in this Premiere Contest. 7 Sandra
Smith Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 6:35 AM
Congratulations Viv, well done...
Wigley Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 6:47 AM
Thank you Charlie, appreciate the visit. Regards, Viv
Rycroft Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 4:22 AM
Congrat well written great poem x
Wigley Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 6:04 AM
Thanks Wendy, very kind. Viv x
Ward Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 12:27 AM
I enjoyed the humour in this one, making the mountain to second position in my contest. Well done, Viv! Don't forget to alter "it's base" to 'its base', then it will shine even more. Julia, xx
Wigley Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 1:39 AM
Thanks, Julia, good point. Very kind. Viv x
Murray Avatar
July 13, 2016 at 3:26 PM
We all climb mountains hoping it is our last. Amazing piece Viv.
Wigley Avatar
July 14, 2016 at 6:56 AM
I would ford every stream with you, Jean. Assuming you have a puncture repair kit. Viv x
Lamoureux Avatar
July 13, 2016 at 5:39 AM
I like the feel of this piece, well expressed!
Wigley Avatar
July 13, 2016 at 7:22 AM
Thanks, Richard, a little allegorical maybe, we all have mountains. Regards, Viv
La France Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 5:27 PM
Viv, this is WONDERFUL best of luck in the contest and I am loving it 7 ~
Wigley Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 11:31 PM
Thanks, BW, hope your metaphorical mountains are little ones x
Dietrich Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 8:51 AM
and a big seven.
Wigley Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 11:32 PM
I'll put it on my mantlepiece x
Dietrich Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 8:50 AM
dang that first part was one WHOLE lifetime for ME, Viv. My next mountain has got to be in another realm?? This is REALLY good work, I love it.
Wigley Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 11:32 PM
I pray that your next mountain is many, many years distant, Andrea. Viv x
Gupta Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 5:50 AM
..."another me..."...Lovely, and brilliantly ...
Wigley Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 8:09 AM
Thanks Probir, me going all complex so early in the day. Regards, Viv
Mark Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 5:11 AM
Clever Viv, well done.....Ian
Wigley Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 5:15 AM
Thanks, Anthony Mark. Er, does Doncaster meaning anything to you? If so, soupmail me. Hmmmm........
Allison Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 4:48 AM
Brilliant take on the mountains theme Mr Viv:-) I hope this is a winner for you:-) Sure have some mountains to climb on our journey through life. hugs jan xx
Wigley Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 4:59 AM
Maybe we should share the same rope, Jan x
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