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Mother Sun

how beautiful the day harmonizing tweets bright and unbundled the sun sips her coffee smiling down…just you wait…she says…i have a treat today Spring is on the way she warms her child rubbing gently her arms kissing her forehead her child holds out her arms to the sides and spins…the tears of the sun gush she dusts off her child’s jacket sunflower petals strewn on the streets… comely and calamitous a trusting face uplifts… the sun stares straight ahead with potential energy and poise she won’t disparage her child telling her an unfair fairy tale for tomorrow’s not promised 3/3/2022 Brian Strand’s Freed Verse

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Valsa George

Date: 3/3/2022 7:18:00 PM

A very mischievous and tender love between a mother and child ! You have given the mighty sun the loveliness and care of a mother and the spring .... the dependence of a child that is cossetted by the mother's affection! Enjoyed reading this, Kim

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/3/2022 7:30:00 PM

Thank you, Valsa!

Laura Leiser

Date: 3/3/2022 5:24:00 PM

I love the playful and creative personification of nature in your fine poem, Kim! You are so imaginative and I so enjoy reading your poems! Good luck in the contest! :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/3/2022 7:30:00 PM

Thank you, Laura! :)

M. L. Kiser

Date: 3/3/2022 3:30:00 PM

Wow, in light of present events, no, there is no guarantee of tomorrow; still we must also stress the possibility of hope. Well done.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/3/2022 7:29:00 PM

Thank you, M.L.!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/3/2022 10:39:00 AM

this is gorgeous "the sun sips her coffee smiling down…just you wait…she says…i have a treat today" Metaphorical miraculously penned.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/3/2022 7:29:00 PM

Thank you, Caren!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/3/2022 7:38:00 AM

Beautiful the day, Kim-- spring's on the way. Enjoyed the images of mother and child and the powerful message in the ending line.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/3/2022 7:29:00 PM

Thank you, Vijay!

Jenna Logan

Date: 3/3/2022 7:25:00 AM

I was delighted by your write, Kim. Funny, how we interpret things in different ways. I always imagine the sun as male and the moon as female, but the warmth of the sun would certainly be motherly.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/3/2022 7:29:00 PM

Thank you, Jenna! :)