Mother Says

Mother says when he let me down,

I tore up the flowers from the neighbor’s garden.

I do not recall this, but his failing me

has left a lasting impression.


Written Dec. 1, 2015 by Andrea Dietrich
for nette onclaud's "Fallen in 25-30 words" Poetry Contest

30 Words total by the Word Count Calculator
Written about my father, whom my mother divorced before I turned five.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Babcock Avatar
December 12, 2015 at 2:41 PM
A poem that hits close to your heart. Nice one Andrea. love phyl
Puddifoot Avatar
December 5, 2015 at 8:22 PM
by the very subject matter this contest has thrown up some emotional writes...i like this one, andrea, it's very personal - congrats on your win!
Callus Avatar
December 5, 2015 at 3:22 PM
Emotionally hard hitting; children are effected by even the smallest things, let alone being left in the lurch. Congrats on another worthy win, Andrea.
Austin Avatar
December 5, 2015 at 10:38 AM
You lit pretty hard in love's backyard. Love, daver
Williams Avatar
December 5, 2015 at 2:26 AM
Well done Andrea. Congrats on your win.
Tor Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 10:37 PM
Congratulations Andrea on your win!
A. Sharma Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 9:35 PM
Lovely win Andrea.. big congrats!
A  Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 8:09 PM
Hi Andrea, wonderful win. SKAT
Godwin Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 8:03 PM
With the exception of Ian's "Humpty Dumpty" every "Fallen" read has saddened me. We poets are an emotional, empathizing group of people (I could have said '..empathizing basket cases"). I felt you in this direct, straight forward write and I believed you - congratulations ... CayCay
Lane Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 7:23 PM
well done, Andrea... Congratulations. I'm saddened over your subject matter, but you turned out just fine. ;)
Carmack Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 6:27 PM
Poems like this remind me how blessed I have been with the parents I was given to. Congrats and hugs.
Scars Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 4:36 PM
Congrats on your well deserved win Andrea! lu *smiles*
Onclaud Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 4:32 PM
a truly sensitive, superb piece, andie..sweet, fine congrats and thank you for gracing my contest.. huggs!
Allison Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 4:20 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
Neels Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 12:54 PM
A heartfelt and sad write Andrea. Hope your weekend will be a good one ;)
Inman Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 10:38 AM
Powerful, sad and well written, Andrea.
Yvonne Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 9:49 AM
Extremely unique. A Fav!
Y. Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 11:57 AM
Andrea, what a sad and devastating memory.This write got to me and tugged at my heart strings. Best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis 7
La France Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 7:25 AM
Andrea, what a sad memory to keep, but your poem is brilliant in the telling, 7 ~
Hunjeri Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 5:48 AM
Very touching and deep :-( few words that say a lot.
Andresen Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 4:40 AM
- Sets a deep impression in a child's heart - Powerful lines, Andrea - I wish you luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Jones Avatar
December 1, 2015 at 9:11 PM
Powerful and moving Andrea.....nice to see ya
Laurie Avatar
December 1, 2015 at 6:32 PM
Hello Andrea... the bigger picture leaves the deepest scars - thank you Andrea - Lindsay
Meade Avatar
December 1, 2015 at 6:20 PM
Hurt runs deep when a love looked for does not come . . . you nailed the aguish in this relationship!
Smith Avatar
December 1, 2015 at 4:46 PM
So sad... when things change for you at a young age it is so difficult emotionally.
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