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8/18/2024 for MOTHER SAID with Refractory Rhymes Poetry Contest sponsored by Suzette Richards

Mother Said

How many times must I tell you, monster?
Goddammit, I think it must be the twelfth.
Again! With mud on your feet, in you traipsed.
You are making me extremely angry. 

Goddammit, I think it must be the twelfth.
No Mom, I think it might just be the eighth.
You are making me extremely angry. 
Hey, Mom, can I have a jelly sandwich?

No Mom, I think it might just be the eighth.
For dinner, you will have room for nothing.
Hey, Mom, can I have a jelly sandwich?
Why do you give me such a big problem? 
 
For dinner, you will have room for nothing.
Again!  With mud on your feet, in you traipsed.
Why do you give me such a big problem?  
How many times must I tell you, monster?
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Kendrick Avatar
September 17, 2024 at 7:09 AM
Way to go with this winner. It is so nice to see it in the winners' list. Congratulations to you. Sometimes mom's could tone it down just a little but you turned out okay. Sara K
Crandall Avatar
September 17, 2024 at 7:17 AM
Thanks Sara, haha, she was tasked with raising 4 boys. That makes keeping a clean house a difficult task!
mysore Avatar
September 16, 2024 at 3:33 AM
creative write dear poet. congratulations on your win. hmm did you get the jelly sandwich? beautiful poetic form.
Crandall Avatar
September 16, 2024 at 11:25 PM
Thanks. Yep, just about every day, after coming home from school, I would load up on sugary cereal (and sometimes jelly sandwiches), and not want to eat dinner.
Miller Avatar
September 15, 2024 at 7:44 AM
This is great, congratulations
Crandall Avatar
September 15, 2024 at 11:49 AM
Thank you Terry!
Greenhough Avatar
August 19, 2024 at 12:46 PM
Pantoum, the perfect poetic style for argument. We'll done.
Crandall Avatar
August 19, 2024 at 6:49 PM
Thanks Hilda, I was hoping it would work for a lot of repetitive statements back and forth.
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