Mother Said

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8/18/2024 for MOTHER SAID with Refractory Rhymes Poetry Contest sponsored by Suzette Richards

How many times must I tell you, monster?
Goddammit, I think it must be the twelfth.
Again! With mud on your feet, in you traipsed.
You are making me extremely angry. 

Goddammit, I think it must be the twelfth.
No Mom, I think it might just be the eighth.
You are making me extremely angry. 
Hey, Mom, can I have a jelly sandwich?

No Mom, I think it might just be the eighth.
For dinner, you will have room for nothing.
Hey, Mom, can I have a jelly sandwich?
Why do you give me such a big problem? 
 
For dinner, you will have room for nothing.
Again!  With mud on your feet, in you traipsed.
Why do you give me such a big problem?  
How many times must I tell you, monster?

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/17/2024 7:09:00 AM

Way to go with this winner. It is so nice to see it in the winners' list. Congratulations to you. Sometimes mom's could tone it down just a little but you turned out okay. Sara K

David Crandall
Date: 9/17/2024 7:17:00 AM

Thanks Sara, haha, she was tasked with raising 4 boys. That makes keeping a clean house a difficult task!

thriveni c mysore

Date: 9/16/2024 3:33:00 AM

creative write dear poet. congratulations on your win. hmm did you get the jelly sandwich? beautiful poetic form.

David Crandall
Date: 9/16/2024 11:25:00 PM

Thanks. Yep, just about every day, after coming home from school, I would load up on sugary cereal (and sometimes jelly sandwiches), and not want to eat dinner.