Mosh Pit Medicine

The General is a bit of an authoritarian.
He says, Breathe! And you say, how much?
Twilight is much more chill; she just says, “See you ‘round!”
But then you’re bouncing along to a happy tune,
and that’s not so good when The Man is holding
a soldering iron in confined spaces.
So, the General, it is.
The Man spends all his time mapping and zapping,
meting out death to fireflies and moths
who are out past their bedtimes.
I think the OR doubles as a mosh pit;
there’s a large plexiglass shield over the huge monitor,
full of cracks. I’m guessing he’s an Auburn fan who
kept throwing instruments at the screens during the games.
And the room is like 56 degrees.
Likely, the General is not well endowed and wants to make
sure everyone else looks bad. Just to be sure, they
take a little more off the top.
It’s a strange experience. 
But you can mess with them. I told ‘em,
“May the Lord bless you while I’m gone!”
They didn’t like that, double-padlocked the doors.
Then, the General says, “Okay, we’re ready now.”
“Now?” I ask. No, now.
I watch the plunger get short,
feel the chill in my forearm,
the rush of warm across my chest,
and I enter the floo network and re-appear back in my room,
wishing I could have gotten a well placed punch off at the General.

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Date: 10/27/2022 4:45:00 PM
You just summed up the current state of Medicine to a teeeee!!! Well done and bravo!!! Loved every little bit!! (And I take it you're feeling fine to have penned that doozie) Cheers! :-) Becky
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Date: 10/27/2022 12:45:00 PM
I really don't know what the best form is for this. Prose poetry seems wrong because it has line breaks. Narrative seems wrong because there's not any attempt at rhyme or structure. Guess it doesn't matter, but opinions are welcome!
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Jeff Kyser
Date: 10/27/2022 5:02:00 PM
Strange day. The General is general anesthesia. The Man is the doctor. Mapping and zapping electrical pathways. Just some strange observations and a general dislike of being put completely under, but it turns out the doctor can do a better job when you’re completely out, they can control the move,ent of the chest for breathing, etc.
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L Milton Hankins
Date: 10/27/2022 2:20:00 PM
Free Verse works about as well as anything, Jeff. I'm not really sure I understand what is going on here, Jeff?
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