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Mortality

He is the silly brother of death is never seen around the cradle and has never turned up for the first smoke first beer first love He is waiting for you with jester cap and painted grin halfway Roaring with laughter he pushes aside infinity Together on the seesaw he pushes you higher and higher until you dangle over boundless gorges until you scream you have to go because you have so many things to do so little time to spend With both feet back on solid ground you buy him a drink and wait for his big brother to arrive

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 11/29/2010 11:21:00 AM
What a great poem -- wonderfully visual in both an intellectual and physical way. Poetry as this is such a pleasure to read, yes? I have both feet back on the ground now, but would like to know how long you have been writing? Also, I would like to thank you again for letting me join this most talented group of poets. Take care, Niels B.
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Date: 10/30/2010 1:03:00 PM
Nicely written piece.
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Date: 1/8/2010 9:39:00 AM
Congrats on your wonderful poem making it through the first round, keep your powerful pen writing… excellent you! Your friend in poetry Adeleke
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Date: 1/5/2010 7:57:00 AM
Congratulations Niels, You have made it through the first round of judging for Poetrysoup October 13, 2009 poetry contest with your very interesting poem, "Mortality". Your implication of death in this poem was very effective. No wonder 2009 was a successful year of poetry for you. I come, now, wishing you continued success in your writing endeavors throughout 2010 and for many years to come. God be with you. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 12/22/2009 10:23:00 AM
Congratulations on being a first round survivor and the best to you in the finals Niels. I wish you the best in your writing endeavors in 2010 whatever they may be. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/21/2009 9:48:00 PM
Wow! Congratulations on making it through the first round and best wishes on advancing to the finals, Niels. Lainie
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Date: 12/21/2009 8:19:00 AM
Congrats on your poem winning the first round of PS contest!! Very well deserved, enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry. Here’s wishing you a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!! May 2010 be your best year ever! Love Light Patty
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Date: 12/20/2009 2:41:00 PM
Congratulations on moving to the next round with this great poem, Niels! Wishing you joy and happiness in the New Year, love, Carolyn
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Date: 12/20/2009 9:31:00 AM
Many congratulations on reaching the second round with your fine poem >> James
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Date: 11/16/2009 9:12:00 PM
Congratulations on being featured this week. Love, Iolanda
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Date: 11/16/2009 11:33:00 AM
Congrats on your feature poem this week! Love Light Patty
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Date: 11/16/2009 10:36:00 AM
Many congratulations on your poem being featured this week >> James
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Date: 11/16/2009 5:25:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week. I wish you the best in your writing endeavors. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/15/2009 6:56:00 PM
There is a lot of depth for the reader to think about in this poem. Good use of imagery. Congratulations on having your poem featured. I wish you continued success with your writing. Karen
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Date: 8/22/2009 5:46:00 PM
Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry with us today Niels. Keep your pen flowing and have a wonderful day. Love, Carol
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