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Moonlight Faded To Dim

"and the birds twitter like whispering violins "
                                       ~ Constance La France

For several years we shared love and laughter
Much too soon came the time, I had to let him go
But he made me promise, then and forever after
to try not to cry, yet my tears continue to flow

I keep him near, for he still lives within my heart
Love was stolen by the hands of time or cruel fate
No kiss has touched my lips since we've been apart
I pray someday my grief and heartache will abate

There is no romantic love song I can bear to hear 
Even bird trilling sounds sad, as if played on violins
It makes me break my promise, not to shed a tear
With each thought of him, a stream of them begins

Now, I've sleepless nights spent remembering him
My arms are empty and there's no music in my ear
Stars no longer sparkle, and moonlight faded to dim
Only in fragile dreams does my loved one reappear



May 16, 2023
Writing Challenge A Quotes
Sponsored by Constance La France

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Jay Narain May 22, 2023 at 10:23 AM Nicely penned poem wit deep emotions and thoughts, Congratulations. Lin Lane May 22, 2023 at 10:32 AM I appreciate your kind comments. Thanks, Jay.

Christuraj Alex May 21, 2023 at 10:35 PM "to try not to cry, yet my tears continue to flow" - Beautifully written. Congratulations! Lin Lane May 22, 2023 at 10:31 AM Thanks so very much, Chris.

Constance La France May 20, 2023 at 11:57 PM Lin, thank you so much for sharing your wonderful poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations and I love your image. ! Lin Lane May 21, 2023 at 3:00 AM Hi Constance. Your contest themes are always unique, and a challenge I gladly accept. Thank you for placing this one on your winning list. The image is how I sometimes envision you, remembering...

Anne-Lise Andresen May 20, 2023 at 7:48 AM - Congratulations on your 1st place in the contest, Lin :) - hugs Lin Lane May 20, 2023 at 8:04 AM Thank you very much, Anne-Lise.

Jan Allison May 17, 2023 at 7:21 AM Such a toughing piece Lin, i imagine many can relate to these feelings of loss in a relationship. The picture is perfect with the poem:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane May 20, 2023 at 8:04 AM Thanks, Jan. Sorrowful that so many can relate, but emotions are difficult to handle when joyful are sad.

Anne-Lise Andresen May 16, 2023 at 1:01 PM - Oh ... here are many deep feelings, Lin :) - A pain so deep ... a love so real ... a loss that only you can put into words - Sad and beautifully written - Best wishes :) - hugs Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 2:05 PM Anne-Lise, your words are so reassuring, and I value them along with our friendship. Thank you ever so much.

Victor Buhagiar May 16, 2023 at 10:49 AM Sad but brilliant. Sometimes grief takes a long time to pass. Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 11:39 AM That's true, Victor. Sometimes it never passes. Thanks a lot for reading and leaving your welcomed thoughts.

Kim Rodrigues May 16, 2023 at 10:10 AM No kisses touch my lips since we've been apart I pray someday my grief and heartache will abate…everyone reacts differently to grief. My dad made a whole montage, with sad romantic music and all when my mom passed. Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 11:38 AM What love your parents must've shared, Kim. That kind of love doesn't happen to everyone, but when it does, it certainly is something to be celebrated. Thanks for letting me know the lines you especially enjoyed.

Valsa George May 16, 2023 at 8:59 AM So touching ! The feelings of one who has lost the love of his /her life is so poignantly delineated without any drama or exaggeration. Even the trilling of birds pains his/her heart. One who has experienced true and sincere love is satiated in life that he /she never craves for anybody else's love. Beautiful poem dear Lin. Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 11:35 AM Dear Valsa, I'm so very pleased that you found so much to like about my poem. Your review is completely insightful about how I felt when I wrote of her plight. Thank you.

Joanna Daniel May 16, 2023 at 8:00 AM Wow! This is a sad beauty, Lin, I love that pic too:) you took her quote to another level:) she'll love this one:) Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 8:04 AM Hi Jo. Thanks so much for liking this one, even though it rings of sorrow. When I saw the painting, I knew where Constance's quote was taking me... not where it led me when I first read it. We never know along what path our thoughts will lead us.

Alexis Y. May 16, 2023 at 6:44 AM Wow! Lin, Your chosen quote inspired you to write such a well-written and heartfelt write. We all dream of love as you described, but most never find it. Nevertheless if one does, it would be well worth it, even if they lost it through unfortunate circumstances. Your last stanza paints such a sad picture. It looks like a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest. PS, Thanks for being the "lone" person to comment on my poem for the contest challenge. Have a nice day- Alexis Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 7:33 AM Alexis, I don't always manage to comment on all the poems written by my friends, so I'm delighted that I found yours and left my thoughts. Love can be the most joyous emotion on earth, and then again it can be the reason for the most emotional pain we've felt. It's a risk, but one worth taking. The alternative? Never knowing what it was like to love someone, or to know their love in return. Thank you, my sweet friend for so many comments you've offered me. I hope all your days are good ones. Hugs.

Daniel Turner May 16, 2023 at 5:23 AM You always seem to write with such ease, Lin. regardless of the topic. Im jealous! I must admit though. I havent felt the feeling your poem describes since high school. Love has been no friend of mine. Lin Lane May 16, 2023 at 5:28 AM Good morning, Danny and thank you for thinking my poetry always flows easily. Sometimes finding the right words is like being drawn down in an undertow. Love can be friend or foe, taking us to the heights and depths of both.