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The Art of J.R. Slattum | Sun and Moon

"O summer wants to know just why
You're oft' to chase me off the sky,"
Said Moon to Sun, with teary eye,
"For it's quite up to me ...
To dance the silver sea!"

"Well, Summer winked at me at noon,"
Said Sun, "Thus teasing me to swoon -
We're playing favorites, Mister Moon,
For THIS star misbehaves ...
To dance the golden waves!"

"But that can't be - not half a chance,
I'm made to paint the eve's romance,"
Said Moon, to Sun, with cordial glance,
"Tis lovers wait my cue ...
To dance the briny blue!"

"Yet, wee ones play my shoreline, bright
On hot days filled with laughs and light
In surf," said Sun, "A-churning white,
My shine on waters, cold,
To dance the ocean, gold!"

"Of summer sky, you've twice as much,
I've wished so long, your golden touch,
Still ... I take care of dreams and such,
One silver-shined doubloon ...
To dance the sea!" Said Moon.

"Come on, let's have some shiny fun!"
But came no answer from the Sun,
Now her long summer day was done ...
And Moonie's mischief ... just begun!






~ 3rd Place ~  in the "The Sun And The Moon" Poetry Contest, Chantelle Anne Cooke, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 6/2/2020 6:45:00 PM
Back to congratulate you for this splendid podium win, another remarkable poem from your golden pen!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/3/2020 12:21:00 AM
Thank you very kindly, John, it is much appreciated, my friend. Blessings! :o)
Date: 6/2/2020 6:58:00 AM
I agree, this is indeed a poetic masterpiece exhibiting truly wonderful and gifted poetic talent my friend. A fav and pray you never stop gifting us such poems.. God bless..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/3/2020 12:20:00 AM
Thank you very kindly, Roberto, it is much appreciated, my good friend. Blessings! :o)
Date: 6/1/2020 9:42:00 PM
I loved the whimsy in this playful piece Greg. Congratulations on your podium win! xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/3/2020 12:20:00 AM
Thank you very kindly, Connie, it is much appreciated, my friend. This was fun. Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 5/31/2020 10:58:00 AM
a great little story. congrats!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/3/2020 12:19:00 AM
Thank you very kindly, Jeanne, it is much appreciated, my friend. Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 5/31/2020 10:10:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! God bless you.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/3/2020 12:19:00 AM
Thank you very kindly, Beata, it is much appreciated, my friend. Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 5/30/2020 11:04:00 PM
Fantasy with every lien, Greg, love it. Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 11:24:00 PM
Thank you so much, Eve, that means a lot ... blessings, Dear Poet! :o) <3
Date: 5/30/2020 7:34:00 PM
I love the playfulness in this poem. Fantastically written. Congratulations on your Podium win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 10:21:00 PM
That's very kind of you to say, JC - thank you so much for the comments, my friend! :o)
Date: 5/30/2020 3:32:00 PM
I knew it, Greg:-) Congratulations on your podium finish, my friend!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 10:20:00 PM
You were my good luck charm, Ed - blessings, my friend!
Date: 5/30/2020 1:25:00 PM
ahh, I think you reversed it (the way I see it) and made sun the female!! This is really cute and playful personification, Greg. BIG congrats to you.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 10:20:00 PM
Thank you very much, Andrea, that is much appreciated - blessings and congrats to you, too, Buddy! :o) <3
Date: 5/30/2020 12:26:00 PM
That's a beautiful masterpiece you have written with such soothing melodious imagery Greg. Congratulations on your win :)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 10:19:00 PM
Many thanks to you, Aditi, I so greatly appreciate the kind words! :o) <3
Date: 5/29/2020 10:19:00 AM
Greg, such fun in the sun with your sun/moon dialog! Great personification and I loved your aaabb format. I'm sure this will be very well appreciated in the contest, my friend.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 10:18:00 PM
Thank you very much, John, that means a lot to me. Blessings, friend! :o)
Date: 5/29/2020 9:09:00 AM
An interesting take on the theme, a conversation between the sun and moon, nice personification, enjoyed this one G!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 10:18:00 PM
Oh, that's very kind, John - thank you so much, my friend! :o)
Date: 5/29/2020 8:59:00 AM
A refreshingly unique take on the theme, Greg:-) Me likey! This one is a winner, for sure.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 10:17:00 PM
Thank you kindly, Sir Edward - I'm pleased you enjoyed it, Brother! :o)
Date: 5/29/2020 5:54:00 AM
Very creative and well composed Greg, a conversation between two heavenly bodies. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/30/2020 10:17:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Tom - blessings! :o)
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