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The Monster – Coffee House Writers

The giant beast grasped her in callused claws ... Chaos swirled like the pupil of some evil eye As scorched as the hems of an evening sky The red of its piercings tread a bloody path Like remnants, vermilion, of a wicked wrath Cold crumbs of attachment, evermore awry ... He brought her to his mouth, teeth shining ... Dew dripped and froze upon the feral floor Glistened with a magic that the stars abhor Dark, dire poison giv'n as midnight's tears So etched like an epitaph to bide the years The crowning discernment of a carnal core ... He paused a moment, as she fainted in fear ... The black flame was licking at the sills of ice One passionate potion with improper spice Spilled, once it filled with the oft' killed time As clocks suffered 'tocks', emulating crime Oh, pride was the payment, a caustic price ... The beast brought his lips to her and kissed ... Tenderly ... then placed her on the golden altar. This poem was written in July and N/A'd on August 4, 2020, in the "Strand Completely New ( 5 ) Any Theme Any Form" Poetry Contest ~ 1st Place ~ in the "N/A Rerun 10" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor.

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Date: 8/17/2020 10:07:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a story/poem. Another beauty and the beast story. A Love Story??? Your last line, "Tenderly ... then placed her on the golden altar." but did he take her off????? You could do a part two to this one. Enjoy your win and day..................
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Date: 8/15/2020 1:06:00 PM
Very dark and so descriptive, Greg! The ending is sure creepy too!! Placed on that altar . I think you are watching too many of the kinds of movies I watch. haha! WAy to GO with number one win, my friend. congratulations
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Date: 8/15/2020 12:05:00 AM
John an excellent dark telling...Enjoyed every bit.Congratulations on a well deserved win.
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Date: 8/14/2020 4:08:00 PM
I'm not sure which is worse, to be eaten by the beast or to be laid on the altar (supposedly to be sacrificed), but you build your tension admirably with excellent use of dark imagery. Congratulations on your masterful write and your 1st place win ~ John
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Date: 8/14/2020 1:21:00 PM
Masterfully written, amazing images and you built the tension then released it with a kiss! Well done my friend! Congratulations on your first place win!
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Date: 8/14/2020 10:37:00 AM
Like I said before G, I know you love the dark genre, not my cup of tea but the talent in the write is undeniable. Congrats on a top win!
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Date: 7/3/2020 2:13:00 PM
I agree that this is lovely and amazing poetry. Such that truly sets itself apart. The black flame and the pride payment- both said- life and love are not toys for the selfish taking. A fav, God bless...
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Date: 7/2/2020 9:30:00 PM
Amazing imagery G, but I'm not sure what to make of this one, I know you enjoy the dark writes, so I'm sure you like this one, your talent still shines bright!
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Date: 7/2/2020 6:18:00 AM
Lovely rhyme.. And the beautiful twist in the climax.. Great write Gregory..
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