Mists of Goodbye

Gray clouds gathering, distant eyes shrouded;
inner vellum lids cannot disguise
the fugitive from love you are.
Your cherished, throbbing body near,
Far, far away your misplaced mind;
Hesitant words reach out to you,
entangling in a torturous maze
where two hearts stumble in the mists.

August 20, 2014
Faye Lanham Gibson
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Onclaud Avatar
August 31, 2014 at 10:48 PM
a stunning heartbreaker so finely quilled, faye.. thank you for gracing my contest and congrats!
Allison Avatar
August 30, 2014 at 12:26 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Faye:-) Hugs Jan xx
Hamilton Avatar
August 24, 2014 at 1:14 AM
this is a wow poem Faye excellent pen gl in contest hugs
Dietrich Avatar
August 23, 2014 at 12:25 AM
I had to reread this one to make sure I got it. I agree with Carrie. that one line is terrific! The whole thing is a great depiction of two growing apart. Instead of ships that pass in the night, it's two ships that separate in the mist. it's funny but I was thinking of going a similar route as you did somehow, if and when i ever got around to doing this challenge!!
Richards Avatar
August 22, 2014 at 9:15 PM
"inner vellum lids cannot disguise" ....wow ..that is a terrific way of describing it !! again....a great entry!
Lindley Avatar
August 22, 2014 at 8:05 PM
I wished I had written for this one. My friend, this is a very good entry! Good luck....
Enriquez Avatar
August 20, 2014 at 10:33 PM
Dear Faye: Nicely done, this write. All the best then, Leon.
Allison Avatar
August 20, 2014 at 12:23 PM
Oh very deep and dark and a great take on the theme:-) Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx
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