Mists of Goodbye

Gray clouds gathering, distant eyes shrouded;
inner vellum lids cannot disguise
the fugitive from love you are.
Your cherished, throbbing body near,
Far, far away your misplaced mind;
Hesitant words reach out to you,
entangling in a torturous maze
where two hearts stumble in the mists.

August 20, 2014
Faye Lanham Gibson

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/31/2014 10:48:00 PM
a stunning heartbreaker so finely quilled, faye.. thank you for gracing my contest and congrats!
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Date: 8/30/2014 12:26:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Faye:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 8/24/2014 1:14:00 AM
this is a wow poem Faye excellent pen gl in contest hugs
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Date: 8/23/2014 12:25:00 AM
I had to reread this one to make sure I got it. I agree with Carrie. that one line is terrific! The whole thing is a great depiction of two growing apart. Instead of ships that pass in the night, it's two ships that separate in the mist. it's funny but I was thinking of going a similar route as you did somehow, if and when i ever got around to doing this challenge!!
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Date: 8/22/2014 9:15:00 PM
"inner vellum lids cannot disguise" ....wow ..that is a terrific way of describing it !! again....a great entry!
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Date: 8/22/2014 8:05:00 PM
I wished I had written for this one. My friend, this is a very good entry! Good luck....
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Date: 8/20/2014 10:33:00 PM
Dear Faye: Nicely done, this write. All the best then, Leon.
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Date: 8/20/2014 12:23:00 PM
Oh very deep and dark and a great take on the theme:-) Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xx
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