Misplaced Concern

I become quite vain when around pretty girls.
And a whole flock of them makes my head whirl.
Attempting sensitivity,
I asked one, "Do you have a disease?"
She said, "I was fine a moment ago, but NOW I wanna hurl!"



NOTE: This was based off a true story (though I exaggerated it slightly, for the sake of having it rhyme and fit with the limerick). I came into work one day and noticed one of my co-workers didn't look so hot. I was concerned and said, "Are you feeling alright today? Did you sleep well?". She just looked at me and said, "I'm quite fine, Timmy. I've actually had a full nine hours sleep... I just didn't take the time to put my make-up on this morning". Needless to say I never quite heard the end of it...
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May 20, 2013 at 10:10 AM
LOL! Poor girl! However, makeup is overrated. I'm sure if she never wore makeup she would be still extremely pretty. Don't worry, Timothy, I've had my share of embarrassing moments as well. They fade in time...unless she chooses to never forgive you. Haha!
Hicks Avatar
May 20, 2013 at 5:17 PM
Yes... I like the look of natural skin! I get used to how people look WITH make up and then get confused when they take it off... it's a tedious chore if you ask me (I obviously don't know what it's like, but I image I'd be a somewhat sloppy girl if I was female... LOL!)...
Tacito Avatar
May 20, 2013 at 9:25 AM
HA! Some people...this was awesome to read!
Hicks Avatar
May 20, 2013 at 5:16 PM
Thank you Drake... we all got a good laugh at it in the end so I honestly don't regret saying it...
A   Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 7:51 PM
wow! I will call it the wrong insensitive way to approach some one having a bad day... But, what do I know.. I would have saved the conversation, and just walked away. anyways~ you did good rhyming the limerick... LINDA
Hicks Avatar
May 19, 2013 at 12:32 AM
Well it might make more sense if you knew the people in the situation... I just thought it was funny to write about... lol. Thanks for stopping by and sharing a laugh!
Lamoureux Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 7:52 AM
Ouch! That must have hurt. Good thing you have two feet or did you find a way to get that one into your mouth as well? Thanks for the laugh Tim.
Hicks Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 2:48 PM
A mouthful of feet... you clever, you! In an odd way I'm thankful for these embarrassing moments... they make good material at least. My "sensitivity" might be lacking though... lol.
Jones Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 7:04 AM
Thanks for the smile this morning!
Hicks Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 2:46 PM
You're welcome :)
Sivey Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 6:04 AM
This is hilarious my friend! I just loved reading this incredible delightful and wondrous poem Timothy! What a tremendous piece, you have written a glorious poem...so are you still this sensitive around girls? Ha ha, Great Work!!
Hicks Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 2:46 PM
I'm working on it... it isn't easy! My mentality is that they won't take it personally... *sigh*... I'm not the brightest of the bunch!
Jad Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 5:25 AM
Very lovely poem... It is enjoyable. But I am pretty concerned about your sensitivity around girls.. Is that true? or part of the poetic scheme? :D
Hicks Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 2:45 PM
Well I didn't actually say, "Do you have a disease?"... though I might as well have, judging by the prolonged reaction! Don't girls appreciate when guys notice things? Lol...
Dietrich Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 1:06 AM
hahaha. good one. It reminds me when a student says, Teacher, you look tired. that pisses me off so bad if they say it when I had a good night's sleep@@@
Hicks Avatar
May 18, 2013 at 2:44 PM
Yes... well... I learned my lesson! I figured they would be pleased that I bothered to notice at all... guess not, in this case!
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