Minichu's Dilemma

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For Mohan Chutani's Let's Minichu on Dilemma 26 July 24

restless thoughts drain my mind
to stay or leave, a choice plaguing  dead of night
fate...unkind 

one dream on hold 
while hours invade without delight--
I'm cold 

coins tossed
nothing goes right--
lost!

restless thoughts drain my mind
while hours invade without delight
lost!

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Beata Agustin

Date: 8/22/2024 7:05:00 AM

Wow! Congratulations! Thanks for sharing this... and for sharing your poetic talent Kabayan. Thanks so much for your constant uplifting comments. It's my prayer that you're doing well... God bless you.

thriveni c mysore

Date: 8/16/2024 10:10:00 PM

beautiful write dear poet. congratulations on your win.

Crystol Woods

Date: 8/15/2024 6:38:00 AM

Such delicious language in such a limited form! You came up with a wonderful expression of dilemma! The coin toss! Xo

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/15/2024 5:52:00 AM

Nette, CONGRATS on your win~~and your ability to make a minichu flow sensibly. Janice

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 8/14/2024 10:12:00 PM

Nice write, Nette. Yes, situations may require tossing of coin. Congratulations.

Mohan Chutani

Date: 8/14/2024 9:36:00 PM

Dear Nette, nice to see your poem in my contest. long time no see. A perfect minichu on dilemma as to how it makes you restless & takes away all ur peace of mind & energy. Congrats on your placement in my contest. Best.... Mohan

Ink Empress

Date: 7/28/2024 1:20:00 PM

Fate is sometimes unkind and we sometimes are stuck in a loop of questions.. what a deep minichu! I love this! And flow is so seamless! Best wishes dear nette