Mind-Boggling Disarray

There's madness in enlightenment,
preferring darkly recesses of denial
    whilst moon descends sensibilities,
shedding white powder florescence
fracturing every crack & crevice,
most days long to dwell
in oblivion, remembers it fondly,
before unicorns and monsters
became real and materialized
   taunting duskiest memories

always knew in her bones
  that something was askew,
fear and breathlessness
  a huge part of her psyche,
on the surface she seemed
  to have it together but,
    her marrow was aware,
as dysfunctional trembled - -
 nagging blitzed neurons,
  felt its prevailing intrusiveness
a foreboding presence beckoning
in blindingly echoed vocalizations,
 long before time even existed

She lives in continuous disorder,
  tucked away within her own reflection
   chaos extruding every wakeful moment,
powerless to cease mind-boggling adaptations

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 12/12/2016 6:49:00 AM
If this poem is the result of living in continuous disorder, then I say take all of the alphabetically placed cards and toss them straight up into the air, because disorder needs to be the order of the day. Really cool Paloma, scattered thoughts placed on a page for us to wander through...I think I got lost in there
Login to Reply
Date: 12/10/2016 7:45:00 PM
I was in love with this by the 2nd line! You have explored, in Paloma fashion, denial and many of its forms. I bet if I read again, I'd pick up on more 'explorations' and you are definitely a writer to be read more than once. You could be studied line by line and still have more revealed afterwards. Yi, girl ... CayCay
Login to Reply
Date: 12/10/2016 5:57:00 PM
A bit of moon madness Paloma. An explosion of thoughts, scattered yet articulate in contrast. I enjoyed it! 7 ; )
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 6:52:00 PM
Moon madness, I plead the fifth. :) Thanks Connie.
Date: 12/10/2016 5:52:00 PM
A peek into the warped mind of an unbalanced person. Fascinating poem, Paloma. Scary, but undeniably thrilling ride into the heart of madness. Functionally insane, I suppose. Love the prose. Love always.
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 6:52:00 PM
Yeah, that unbalanced brain is mine. :) Functionally insane, isn't that an oxymoron Freddie? Or is that like a highly-functional drunk. Thanks so much.
Date: 12/10/2016 3:03:00 PM
Quite a ride.
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 3:28:00 PM
Grazie mille Doug, you're welcome any time. :)
Date: 12/10/2016 11:41:00 AM
WoW! Paloma, it was as though you let the reader see into the mind of someone with a mental disorder. I must say It was a the bizarre trip. Well done. A without doubt 7+ :-) Alexis
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 3:26:00 PM
Thanks Alexis, much appreciated, glad it took you there. :)
Date: 12/10/2016 10:44:00 AM
This piece has a schizophrenic feel to it. A well expressed captivating piece.
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 10:52:00 AM
I'm not schizophrenic and neither am I. :) Thanks much Richard.
Date: 12/10/2016 9:08:00 AM
I suppose it would all depend on the type of enlightenment. My thoughts are with you, Paloma. Hoping all is well with you:)
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 9:11:00 AM
Oblivion is golden. I'm fine, just writing o'bit of poetic madness to occupy my mind. :) Grazie mille Danny.
Date: 12/10/2016 8:14:00 AM
Wow Paloma - you have it going this morning! What an intense poem describing truth of what many can go through. Well done :)
Login to Reply
P  Avatar
Paloma P
Date: 12/10/2016 9:05:00 AM
Thrilled you enjoyed this one Heidi, yep it's a shame. :)
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter