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Midnight Rose

A single black rose as dark as midnight
Represents the pain of my broken heart
Even shadows are pale in the moonlight

Watch as the raven in the eve takes flight
With the moon a contrasting work of art
A single black rose as dark as midnight 

I wish on a star with all of my might
That a happy ending it might impart
Even shadows are pale in the moonlight 

The feeling in my chest is oh so tight
My lover refuses to play her part
A single black rose as dark as midnight

On pedestal I placed her of great height
I prayed nothing would tear us apart
Even shadows are pale in the moonlight

I know I must be a pathetic sight
For I was birthed to be doomed from the start
A single black rose as dark as midnight
Even shadows are pale in the moonlight


Written June 20th 2016 for Broken Wing's Villanele contest.

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Tom Quigley Date: 7/1/2016 6:50:00 PM Heartfelt and dark. Great write! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/1/2016 8:04:00 PM Thanks Tom.

Eve Roper Date: 7/1/2016 2:36:00 PM hello back to congratulate you on your win! I’ve decided not to comment on MY Reply Box so this is the close as I can get to say thank you. I have not been receiving the replies from poets I don’t know if it’s the my computer or Soup. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/1/2016 8:05:00 PM Thanks Eve. Hugs back to you.

Jai Bankson Date: 7/1/2016 1:03:00 PM Had to stop by and see what you were up to..Nice work as always/Great write Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/1/2016 8:05:00 PM Hi Jai, it's nice to have your visit.

Beautiful Scars Date: 6/30/2016 8:23:00 PM Richard, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo Login to Reply

Elaine George Date: 6/30/2016 7:46:00 AM A beautiful rendering of masterful poetry with vivid images delivered with superb emotional impact. Great writing, Richard. I have just posted an epic about a black Rose - the Rose being a black women born in 1825, which I wrote for a photographer and his book of photos on Stone Angels. Elaine Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 7/1/2016 8:06:00 PM I will check it out Elaine. Thanks for the visit.

Mama Bear Date: 6/25/2016 12:02:00 PM She deserved the black rose as she was too invisible in the darkness herself A 7 on my books and good luck in the contest. Love Mom Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/26/2016 8:38:00 PM Thanks for the 7 and the good luck! Love ya.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/25/2016 9:53:00 AM was that remark about not on the Xmas card in reference to a reply I made to someone who commented on my triolet? Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/26/2016 8:38:00 PM Yep, I take it we are in a similar boat.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/25/2016 9:52:00 AM oh, I love these rose poems. I did blue, you did black. A few I saw did red. Rose is my favorite of all the flowers and I loved how you did this one so beautifully and symbolically. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/26/2016 8:39:00 PM Thanks Andrea, I'm glad you like it.

Robert Lindley Date: 6/23/2016 4:54:00 PM GREAT FLOW, IMAGES AND MESSAGE EVERY LADY I EVER PLACED UPON A PEDESTAL, BETRAYED ME AND BROKE MY HEART. This fine poem reminds me of my youth and my great follies in romance. A7 Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/24/2016 7:25:00 AM Sorry to hear that Robert. It appears you made out well in the end.

Eve Roper Date: 6/21/2016 10:00:00 AM Richard, very sad poem, good luck in the contest. Thank you so very much for reading “ Pleasure You To Walk The Night” and all my other poems. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/22/2016 6:49:00 AM It was my pleasure to read your work Eve.

Eileen Manassian Date: 6/21/2016 1:09:00 AM I'm away for a while, Richard, but I have to read you...this is beautiful. I love the imagery. Shadows pale...you could never ever be a pathetic sight. Hugs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/21/2016 7:49:00 AM I have posted a few other ones since last you visited. Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/21/2016 7:31:00 AM I have missed you.

Honestly J.T. Date: 6/20/2016 9:25:00 PM Well done. Thanks for sharing -JT Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/21/2016 7:32:00 AM Thanks JT.

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 6/20/2016 4:30:00 PM - Very beautiful, Richard - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/20/2016 8:08:00 PM Thanks Anne-Lise. Hugs back to you.

Walter T. Ashe Date: 6/20/2016 3:46:00 PM A black rose would be a sight to see but where "even shadows are pale in the moonlight" ...if ever seen, it sure would never be forgotten! The best to you in this contest! Nice write! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/20/2016 8:09:00 PM Thanks Walter.:0)

Nette Onclaud Date: 6/20/2016 12:18:00 PM a bleak mood yet beautifully written, rich... i like this!..huggs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/20/2016 8:10:00 PM Thanks, I get is a bit bleak. Hugs Rick.

Timothy Hicks Date: 6/20/2016 11:52:00 AM It has a dreamy gothic feel to it, Richard. I've never seen a black rose before, but I bet even they look beautiful under the light of the moon. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/20/2016 8:11:00 PM I like your discription Timothy. Thanks.

Becca Teagan Date: 6/20/2016 9:52:00 AM Really nice Villanelle, Rick. Hugs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/20/2016 8:12:00 PM I haven't written many in this form, it was a good challenge. Thanks Becca.

Peter Walsh Date: 6/20/2016 8:31:00 AM EVEN SHADOWS ARE PALE IN THE MOONLIGHT....LOVE THE METAPHOR! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 6/20/2016 9:09:00 AM Thanks Peter.;0)