Richard Lamoureux Poet Villanelle

Midnight Rose

A single black rose as dark as midnight
Represents the pain of my broken heart
Even shadows are pale in the moonlight

Watch as the raven in the eve takes flight
With the moon a contrasting work of art
A single black rose as dark as midnight 

I wish on a star with all of my might
That a happy ending it might impart
Even shadows are pale in the moonlight 

The feeling in my chest is oh so tight
My lover refuses to play her part
A single black rose as dark as midnight

On pedestal I placed her of great height
I prayed nothing would tear us apart
Even shadows are pale in the moonlight

I know I must be a pathetic sight
For I was birthed to be doomed from the start
A single black rose as dark as midnight
Even shadows are pale in the moonlight


Written June 20th 2016 for Broken Wing's Villanele contest.

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Tom Quigley July 1, 2016 at 6:50 PM Heartfelt and dark. Great write! Richard Lamoureux July 1, 2016 at 8:04 PM Thanks Tom.

Eve Roper July 1, 2016 at 2:36 PM hello back to congratulate you on your win! I’ve decided not to comment on MY Reply Box so this is the close as I can get to say thank you. I have not been receiving the replies from poets I don’t know if it’s the my computer or Soup. Hugs Eve Richard Lamoureux July 1, 2016 at 8:05 PM Thanks Eve. Hugs back to you.

Jai Bankson July 1, 2016 at 1:03 PM Had to stop by and see what you were up to..Nice work as always/Great write Richard Lamoureux July 1, 2016 at 8:05 PM Hi Jai, it's nice to have your visit.

Beautiful Scars June 30, 2016 at 8:23 PM Richard, congrats on your placement in the contest :)-luloo

Elaine George June 30, 2016 at 7:46 AM A beautiful rendering of masterful poetry with vivid images delivered with superb emotional impact. Great writing, Richard. I have just posted an epic about a black Rose - the Rose being a black women born in 1825, which I wrote for a photographer and his book of photos on Stone Angels. Elaine Richard Lamoureux July 1, 2016 at 8:06 PM I will check it out Elaine. Thanks for the visit.

Mama Bear June 25, 2016 at 12:02 PM She deserved the black rose as she was too invisible in the darkness herself A 7 on my books and good luck in the contest. Love Mom Richard Lamoureux June 26, 2016 at 8:38 PM Thanks for the 7 and the good luck! Love ya.

Andrea Dietrich June 25, 2016 at 9:53 AM was that remark about not on the Xmas card in reference to a reply I made to someone who commented on my triolet? Richard Lamoureux June 26, 2016 at 8:38 PM Yep, I take it we are in a similar boat.

Andrea Dietrich June 25, 2016 at 9:52 AM oh, I love these rose poems. I did blue, you did black. A few I saw did red. Rose is my favorite of all the flowers and I loved how you did this one so beautifully and symbolically. Richard Lamoureux June 26, 2016 at 8:39 PM Thanks Andrea, I'm glad you like it.

Robert Lindley June 23, 2016 at 4:54 PM GREAT FLOW, IMAGES AND MESSAGE EVERY LADY I EVER PLACED UPON A PEDESTAL, BETRAYED ME AND BROKE MY HEART. This fine poem reminds me of my youth and my great follies in romance. A7 Richard Lamoureux June 24, 2016 at 7:25 AM Sorry to hear that Robert. It appears you made out well in the end.

Eve Roper June 21, 2016 at 10:00 AM Richard, very sad poem, good luck in the contest. Thank you so very much for reading “ Pleasure You To Walk The Night” and all my other poems. Hugs Eve Richard Lamoureux June 22, 2016 at 6:49 AM It was my pleasure to read your work Eve.

Eileen Manassian June 21, 2016 at 1:09 AM I'm away for a while, Richard, but I have to read you...this is beautiful. I love the imagery. Shadows pale...you could never ever be a pathetic sight. Hugs Richard Lamoureux June 21, 2016 at 7:49 AM I have posted a few other ones since last you visited. Richard Lamoureux June 21, 2016 at 7:31 AM I have missed you.

Honestly J.T. June 20, 2016 at 9:25 PM Well done. Thanks for sharing -JT Richard Lamoureux June 21, 2016 at 7:32 AM Thanks JT.

Anne-Lise Andresen June 20, 2016 at 4:30 PM - Very beautiful, Richard - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2016 at 8:08 PM Thanks Anne-Lise. Hugs back to you.

Walter T. Ashe June 20, 2016 at 3:46 PM A black rose would be a sight to see but where "even shadows are pale in the moonlight" ...if ever seen, it sure would never be forgotten! The best to you in this contest! Nice write! Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2016 at 8:09 PM Thanks Walter.:0)

Nette Onclaud June 20, 2016 at 12:18 PM a bleak mood yet beautifully written, rich... i like this!..huggs Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2016 at 8:10 PM Thanks, I get is a bit bleak. Hugs Rick.

Timothy Hicks June 20, 2016 at 11:52 AM It has a dreamy gothic feel to it, Richard. I've never seen a black rose before, but I bet even they look beautiful under the light of the moon. Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2016 at 8:11 PM I like your discription Timothy. Thanks.

Becca Teagan June 20, 2016 at 9:52 AM Really nice Villanelle, Rick. Hugs Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2016 at 8:12 PM I haven't written many in this form, it was a good challenge. Thanks Becca.

Peter Walsh June 20, 2016 at 8:31 AM EVEN SHADOWS ARE PALE IN THE MOONLIGHT....LOVE THE METAPHOR! Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2016 at 9:09 AM Thanks Peter.;0)