Jenna Logan Poet Pantoum

Memories and Old Melodies

Tonight, as I gaze at a blood red moon in the sky,
I hear the rhythmic pattering of gentle rains.
Memories and old melodies, I recall with a sigh,
as the sweet fragrance of red roses remains.

I hear the rhythmic pattering of gentle rains.
I'm reminded of another time and another day,
as the sweet fragrance of red roses remains.
The day he proposed with a crimson bouquet.

I'm reminded of another time and another day.
With his love declared, I wanted nothing more.
The day he proposed with a crimson bouquet
and the velvety petals that made my heart soar.

With his love declared, I wanted nothing more.
But now, the sugared scent of blooming roses,
and the velvety petals that made my heart soar,
cause my heart to ache. Oh, such pain it imposes.

But now, the sugared scent of blooming roses,
memories and old melodies, I recall with a sigh,
cause my heart to ache. Oh, such pain it imposes,
tonight, as I gaze at a blood red moon in the sky.



May 16, 2022
A Rhyming Pantoum of Five Stanzas Contest
Hosted by Milt Hankins

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Sam Kauffman June 6, 2022 at 11:40 AM Congratulations on your podium win Jenna. Sight and scent has such an ability to carry back in time. You have wonderfully articulated the ambivalence of time travel through memory. Blessings Jenna Logan June 16, 2022 at 4:32 PM Thanks so very much, Sam.

Paulette Calasibetta June 6, 2022 at 7:28 AM Congratulations on your win in the contest. A heartfelt write. :)Paulette Jenna Logan June 6, 2022 at 7:52 AM I'm grateful for your congrats, Paulette, Thank you.

David Kavanagh June 5, 2022 at 10:46 AM Heya Jenna back with congratulations on your top trophy win, I knew this one was always going to floor Milton, well done! Cheers David Jenna Logan June 6, 2022 at 7:52 AM You certainly did call it, David. Thank you so very much.

Connie Marcum Wong June 4, 2022 at 5:49 PM The metaphor of red Moon and red roses is not lost in this beautiful piece Jenna. This form is difficult to write without the lines seeming forced. This is an excellent example of how to write one correctly. Congratulations on your wonderful trophy, it is well deserved! Blessings xxoo Jenna Logan June 4, 2022 at 6:20 PM Thank you so sincerely for your kind thoughts, Connie. This form does require editing and patience. A challenge, but when it comes together, it’s worth the effort.

Emile Pinet June 4, 2022 at 3:35 PM Jenna, how you express yourself is what makes your poetry unique and qualifies it as art, well written my friend, Emile. Jenna Logan June 4, 2022 at 6:16 PM What charming remarks you’ve offered, Emile. Thanks ever so much.

Paula Goldsmith June 4, 2022 at 12:09 PM Congratulations on your win. WOW!! What a "Beautiful" write and picture. Have a blessed day/weekend.......................... Jenna Logan June 4, 2022 at 6:15 PM I’m so glad you like it. Thanks, Paula.

Ann Peck June 4, 2022 at 9:28 AM That's so beautiful and poignant, Jenna. Every line fits so perfectly. Congratulations on First! Jenna Logan June 4, 2022 at 6:14 PM Thank you very much.

Jeff Kyser June 4, 2022 at 7:59 AM Very nice, Jenna! Congrats Jenna Logan June 4, 2022 at 8:26 AM Thank you very much, Jeff.

L Milton Hankins June 4, 2022 at 7:57 AM Jenna, surprised??? I'm not. This poem was the cream of the crop, in my humble opinion. Congratulations for the trophy win in my Pantoum contest. It's a lovely poem, and I am quite pleased. Jenna Logan June 4, 2022 at 8:26 AM Yes, I am, Milt. I'm always surprised with a win, and sometimes with an N/A. Thank you for honoring my lines. I read many of the entries, and I think at least 5 others were top notch quality. I didn't envy you for having to judge.

Charles Reese May 27, 2022 at 9:16 PM A very heartfelt Pantoum and so full of imagery. You should do well in the contest. Jenna Logan June 4, 2022 at 8:08 AM Thank you very much, Charles.

Alexis Y. May 20, 2022 at 5:46 AM WoW! Jenna, You composed such a well-written entry for the contest. It’s not a good feeling when a love such as this goes cold. Good content and imagery. Best wishes for contest. Have a great day:-)Alexis Jenna Logan May 20, 2022 at 11:59 AM It's heartbreaking, but we are not immune to the pain, nor falling in love. Thanks, Alexis.

John Watt May 19, 2022 at 2:01 PM Absolutely stunning in imagery, emotion, and heartbreaking melancholy, Jenna. The sights, sounds, and smells we experience may trigger pleasant memories or bring back thoughts we wish we could leave behind. My favorite line is "the velvety petals that made my heart soar." The blood red moon and eclipse on Sunday was remarkable and apparently was the inspiration for this amazing pantoum... a Fav. Blessings ~ John Jenna Logan May 20, 2022 at 11:58 AM One thing for sure, John. Memories cannot be suppressed, no matter how we try to stop their flow. Thank you for such kind comments.

Tom Cunningham May 18, 2022 at 12:41 AM Lots of sadness in your verse Jenna and quite emotional. I find this form a tricky one to compose. Best of luck in the contest. Tom Jenna Logan May 18, 2022 at 5:19 AM It’s a bit of a boo hoo write, but that’s where my pen took me. Thanks, Tom.

David Kavanagh May 17, 2022 at 8:45 AM I can see your well on the mend Jenna, inspiring romantic poetry, with a hint of Greek tragedy evolving throughout, You will have Milton sighing and crying reading this one, brilliant work, all the best for contest, cheers David Jenna Logan May 17, 2022 at 8:48 AM Thanks a lot, David. I actually started writing this before my illness, but thought it deserved to be completed. We shall see what he thinks of it. It's one of the few I've entered into any contest lately.

Laura Leiser May 16, 2022 at 4:28 PM Outstanding poetry in this difficult form, Jenna! The romantic imagery and creativity are beautiful to read. Love this one! Best of luck in the contest! :) Jenna Logan May 16, 2022 at 5:32 PM Thank you, Laura. It DOES take some thought and rewriting to have a Pantoum make sense, but worth the effort.

Michelle Faulkner May 16, 2022 at 3:52 PM I like how this takes you on a journey through happy, then sad, times, a touch of mystery also, and it concludes so well, nice inspiration of the red moon too, Jenna~ Jenna Logan May 16, 2022 at 4:23 PM Thanks so very much for your kind comments, Michelle.