Susan Ashley Poet Free verse

Melting Point

The moment I saw you
I fell in love with the universe.
Like raindrops rippling a still pond,
our concentric circles coalesced -
moving past duality and melting into oneness.


Susan Ashley
May 14, 2019


*dedicated to my soulmate and husband, Bill*


~ First Place ~
Contest: May 2019 Premier 5 (Max 5 Lines)
Sponsor: Brian Strand


*The Sufi poet Rumi wrote; “The lover asked his beloved, do you love yourself more than you love me? The beloved replied, I have died to myself but I live for thee.”

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Patrick Ituma October 12, 2019 at 1:41 PM I fell in love with your poems knowing you are a contest champion, I just wish I can become a premium member so I can challenge you too, lol, nice poem man. Susan Ashley October 14, 2019 at 9:23 AM Your heartwarming comments are a joy to receive, Patrick. I'm so please to know that you enjoyed my poem. Please know that you can enter any contest here, you do not have to be a premium member to compete in premium and/or standard contests. Your gracious visit is appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich August 7, 2019 at 5:34 PM was just browsing your trophy wins again. You have quite a few on one page. That is so awesome, and I still love this poem. Susan Ashley August 10, 2019 at 6:11 PM Thank you, Andrea, for your gracious visit and precious comments. It’s heartwarming to know you love my poem. I love it too.. your lovely presence here is greatly appreciated. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael July 15, 2019 at 5:49 AM Fortune smiles on the fortunate... A line I read from you before... Great imagery I must say... Congratulation on your win...a really outstanding poem...One that will be read forever... Susan Ashley July 19, 2019 at 6:14 PM Arturo, it is always a delight to have your wonderful presence grace my poem. Thank you for sharing your precious comments and kind congrats with me. Warmest wishes always, mon ami.. ~Susan

Jeanne Mcgee June 25, 2019 at 9:57 PM I love the last line especially...congratulations on your win with this poem earlier... Susan Ashley June 26, 2019 at 9:10 PM Jeanne, it is a pleasure to have your wonderful presence gracing my poetry page. Thank you for your gracious comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

John Hamilton June 6, 2019 at 10:53 AM Beautiful writing as always Susan, a well deserved win, I concur with the sentiments you expressed, oneness in love is special. Love your alliteration in line 4 well done!! Susan Ashley June 6, 2019 at 5:52 PM I relish your esteemed presence gracing my page, John. Thank you for sharing your precious and uplifting comments with me, my friend. I’m so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich June 2, 2019 at 1:42 PM I see you got two trophy wins from Brian recently. That is so cool!! Susan Ashley June 2, 2019 at 6:52 PM Yes, I've been very fortunate lately, Andrea. It's nice anytime I'm on the other side of an N/A.. lol! Thank you for your return visit and gracious comments. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Warren Doll May 20, 2019 at 11:45 AM So well written and deserving of first place, Susan. Especially, the last line. All the best~ Warren Susan Ashley May 21, 2019 at 8:14 PM Thank you, Warren, for your wonderful comments. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Your kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Dean Wood May 20, 2019 at 9:52 AM This is lovely Susan. Still on top of your game I see! Susan Ashley May 21, 2019 at 8:11 PM Dean, it’s wonderful to hear from you. Thank you for your uplifting comments and heartwarming visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich May 19, 2019 at 5:23 PM wow, what a magical little poem. Congrats on your awesome win. Susan Ashley May 19, 2019 at 8:52 PM It is always such a pleasure when your presence graces my page, Andrea. Thank you for your kind congrats and lovely comments. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley May 18, 2019 at 6:38 PM This is getting bad, I commented on this poem before-now I see my comment has disappeared. Is it gremlins at this site or else at my computer? My dear friend, congratulations on this fine poem being awarded first place. A very deserving award. Fantastic imagery and depths. A fav.. Susan Ashley May 18, 2019 at 7:46 PM My dear friend, technology isn't always what it's cracked up to be.. I do believe that your comment has gone missing. However, I relish your beautiful comments, heartwarming congrats and the fav. Your kind spirit and true friendship is deeply appreciated, Robert. Warmest wishes always, my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues May 18, 2019 at 2:42 PM A lovely way to describe oneness! Susan Ashley May 18, 2019 at 7:31 PM Thank you, Kim, for your wonderful visit and lovely comment. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

John Lawless May 18, 2019 at 7:45 AM OH YEAH....when that "twoness" becomes "oneness".....beware the "little' ripples.... Susan Ashley May 18, 2019 at 7:31 PM Indeed! :)) Thank you for your gracious visit and wicked awesome comments, John. Your Boston presence lights up my South Coast page. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

P.S. Awtry May 18, 2019 at 7:43 AM Back with applause for your trophy win! Susan Ashley May 18, 2019 at 7:26 PM Thank you, my sweet friend, for the lovely applause - I can hear it from here :) You are truly appreciated, P.S. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Tania Kitchin May 18, 2019 at 6:51 AM Congratulations on your trophy win with this gem! Susan Ashley May 18, 2019 at 7:23 PM I relish your kind congrats, Tania. Thank you for your wonderful comments. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 17, 2019 at 3:27 PM Sublime <3 Congratulations for your win! xomo Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:38 PM Thank you for your wonderful comment and warm congrats, my lovely! Your shining presence and kindness is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan <3

Line Gauthier May 17, 2019 at 1:59 PM Beautiful, Susan. Congrats on your well deserved gold medal finish. Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:06 PM Your return visit and kind congrats are appreciated, Line. Thank you for your kindness. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus May 17, 2019 at 1:51 PM A pleasure to return and reread this awesome poem, Susan....and to congratulate you on your much deserved Trophy! ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:37 PM I am doubly delighted by your return visit and heartwarming congrats, Paul. You are truly appreciated, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan

Winged Warrior May 17, 2019 at 12:10 PM Hey sissy...your illumination is brighter than ever...Congrats!!! on your top win...you do the family trio proud...bro bro Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 9:01 PM Three cheers for the family trio, my wonderful bro bro! I relish the light of your presence and your heartwarming congrats. I'm pleased I made you proud, big bro, I must take after you! Warmest wishes and hugs, your lil sis, Illum <3

William Kelii Kekaula May 17, 2019 at 11:29 AM Congratulations on your worthy win with this priceless gem Susan, Aloha William Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:56 PM Your lovely comments and kind congrats are truly appreciated, William. Thank you for your inspiring presence, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Panagiota Romios May 17, 2019 at 9:15 AM Susan, great job! Panagiota Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:07 PM Thank you for your lovely visit and heartwarming comments, Panagiota. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

P.S. Awtry May 17, 2019 at 6:31 AM Every syllable is perfect... but that first sentence communes directly with the heart. I have to catch my breath each time I read it... completely lovely :) Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:54 PM Your valued presence and precious comments are deeply appreciated, P.S. Thank you for sharing your lovely thoughts with me, their beauty inspires me. Warmest wishes always, my sweet friend.. ~Susan

Rico Leffanta May 15, 2019 at 2:42 PM We can tell you are one of the lucky ones - not only by your writing from experience, but the Validation Code is YES - Aloha! Rico Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:47 PM Lol! There's nothing more validating than a YES validation code.. ha! Thank you for your gracious visit and heartwarming comments, Rico. It's a pleasure to hear from you. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Nette Onclaud May 15, 2019 at 1:49 PM ohh yes, the blending of two hearts brings charm to this otherwise wired world... so amazing in few lines, susan... huggs Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:32 PM Nette, your presence is uplifting and is truly appreciated. Thank you for your lovely comments, they are received with joy. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus May 15, 2019 at 9:14 AM Awesome! The moment I read the initial 2 lines I could have stopped there, and pondered about love at first sight! The rest of the poem builds up on that gripping introduction, till two merge into one. Of late I have noticed the striking force of your shorter poems...goes to prove what a talented writer you are, my friend. ~ Warm regards & Hugs // paul Susan Ashley May 17, 2019 at 8:28 PM Thank you for your most cherished comments which I hold near and dear to my heart, Paul. Your shining presence is ever a source of inspiration for me, as is your potent use of brevity in your beautiful poetry - I think it's safe to say that you've had an influence on me :)) Warmest wishes and hugs always, my dear friend.. ~Susan

Heidi Sands May 15, 2019 at 7:40 AM This is so nice Susan. Beautifully written :) Susan Ashley May 16, 2019 at 6:22 PM Thank you, Heidi, for your lovely visit and wonderful comments. It’s so nice to hear from you. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

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