Melted Down

It took eight and a half years
You finally melted me down
Dribbled me on the floor
The liquification of me
Not needed any more

When I had started
I was so strong
I worked hours on end
Was part of the team
Took part in your dream

Some how I got lost along the way
To much heat every day
Not noticing the signs
Lost inside the lines
Unable to comprehend
No longer able to pretend

Now I am a different shape
Cooled within the mold
Put on a press and rolled
Up for auction and sold
Left to the highest bidder
Sold and more than bitter

So the dance begins again
Yet I am not the same
More familiar with the game
I will protect myself
Refuse to be put on a shelf
I will not be pushed aside
Melted or undefined
I am much stronger redefined
My new armor is asbestos lined


Meltdown Contest
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July 11, 2013 at 10:32 PM
Richard.. Congratulations, in the MELTDOWN contest... take care-- always~ Linda
Lamoureux Avatar
July 12, 2013 at 6:48 AM
Thanks Linda
Anglesey Avatar
July 11, 2013 at 6:57 PM
Melt down perfectly described in the first stanza. Hopeful that the asbestos lined armor will assure that you won't get lost inside the lines again. Great expression and congrats on the meltdown win :)
Lamoureux Avatar
July 11, 2013 at 7:08 PM
Thanks Karen.
Gildersleeve Avatar
July 9, 2013 at 10:11 AM
Richard such strength and courage conveyed in this poem. Congrats on your fabulous win. Warm Smiles, Connie
Lamoureux Avatar
July 9, 2013 at 6:15 PM
Thanks for your visits Connie
Bono Avatar
July 8, 2013 at 9:31 PM
You beat me by 1 place. But you deserve it.2 more days.Love Colleen
Lamoureux Avatar
July 9, 2013 at 7:16 AM
One more Day! I hope you have a truly wonderful trip.
Jordan Avatar
July 8, 2013 at 7:09 PM
You nailed this one! Too many of us have been there with you. Fine writing, Richard, and congratulations... Jack
Lamoureux Avatar
July 9, 2013 at 8:31 AM
Thanks Jack
Richards Avatar
July 8, 2013 at 5:40 PM
This indeed, was a melt down of a difficult kind.........I hope you are stronger and wiser wearing your new suit of armor. :) Congratulations, Richard!
Lamoureux Avatar
July 9, 2013 at 8:32 AM
Thanks Carrie.
Buil Avatar
June 27, 2013 at 9:37 AM
Amazing...somehow you find just the perfect words. I wish you the best in this contest! I know you'll definitely be placed for it! It's always so sad to be forgotten and put away... but we learn from mistakes. This reminds me of the song Titanium by David Guetta... Wonderful write!
Lamoureux Avatar
June 27, 2013 at 6:16 PM
I love that song. Thanks for all your visits today.
Trifiatis Avatar
June 12, 2013 at 6:11 AM
You got wiser, mon ami, Richard, thus your value has increased so much that no-one will be able to buy you out! Wonderful verse, marvelous message! Thank you and good luck!
Lamoureux Avatar
June 12, 2013 at 6:29 AM
Thanks Demetrios. I appreciate your visit.
Oyewole Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 9:11 PM
Great write. I'm really impressed with this pen and I hope it will be ranked high in the contest. Well done and Good luck. AO
Lamoureux Avatar
June 27, 2013 at 6:17 PM
Thanks sorry I missed this kind comment till now.
Macfarlane Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 7:13 PM
I think I will adapt this mindset ,so powerful! Great entry for the contest Rick. Hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 7:38 PM
Thanks Cecilia, hugs back
Widjanarko Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 6:03 PM
Still "WOW"-ing the asbestos lined, I really amazed about how this poem ends, really spectacular line Rick! :D good luck for the contest, and wishing you a wonderful day there :D hug, Yanny
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 6:09 PM
Hi Yanny, so nice to have a visit from you today, hugs Rick
Bauer Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 3:43 PM
very powerful and poetic! i like this very much!
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 3:53 PM
Thanks ilene. Hugs Rick
Gunatillake Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 11:41 AM
Oh! hello welcome home! This is fantastic "I am much stronger redefined My new armor is asbestos lined" why not steel? Ha! ha! Thank you for your comments on my last poem. did n't get any mood to write any new. hope to do one soon. Hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 3:54 PM
Hugs back
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 2:26 PM
Hi Manel, let me know when you have inspiration, I will be happy to read your words.
Onclaud Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 11:36 AM
bold and forceful write write.. i like the way your clinched this with a tranformational end line, richard... well done!.:) huggs
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 3:54 PM
Hugs back
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 2:26 PM
Thanks Nette
Hicks Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 10:50 AM
Powerful entry! A very easy going flow and I was struck by the coldness of the last line... I believe this will do well!
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 2:26 PM
Thanks Tim.
Manassian Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 10:21 AM
Richard...how do you do it? How does inspiration come for contests? I don't know...for me it is the other way around. Inspiration comes from life, then I think of contests! Incredible. Hey...about the senryu with the quote from you...If you want to check it out, go to Anne Lise Poem about dreaming...the one that won a contest. I read that one and read your comment, and you mentioned also Shakespear and to sleep perchance to dream...then...the comment that inspired me! :) Yes...you do inspire me!
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 2:29 PM
Sometimes all I need is a single word and ideas pop into my head. To be honest I find it very surprising. I will check out the comment Eileen. Hugs Rick
Kendrick Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 10:02 AM
That asbestos is very dangerous so one can be injured from heartache and disappointment or be physically injured from the dangerous sustance asbestos..Enjoyed reading your unique work..Thanks for the visit to my work..Your comments are always encouraging..Sara
Lamoureux Avatar
June 11, 2013 at 2:30 PM
I never thought of the danger part when I chose that word, good point. Thanks Sara
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