Melancholy

The mood lifts from the lips, parched with permanent nicotine,
and falls, like snowflake-ashes from a turbulent volcano.
The uninhabited eye, underneath the patch - a vacant stare
into a cloudless night with flamenco-stars. Further from the truth
comes the truth of perspective, perspicacity, the long draw
of his cigarette and slow sigh of ringlets. The Camel scent
of his clothing mixes with lavender and the draught of tears;
melancholy plugs up the dike. An occasional red fingernail,
as if down a chalkboard, his spine, taunts the old timer.
He grunts, and drains the erupting whiskey bottle. Thoughts
take wing…oft’ he hears her laughter, a bird call. Good eye
plucked from the bar, placed with the rest of the stars -
he doesn’t deserve the halo above his habitat, the floor.
Every day, life spins, like a merry-go-round, with no point.
He’ll never tell - the tale is decades gone and oversold.

5/7/2023
Anatomy of Melancholy 
Sponsor: Craig Cornish
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Agustin Avatar
May 17, 2023 at 12:27 AM
Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me learn the essence of "showing" in creative writing. God bless you, and belated happy Mother's Day.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 17, 2023 at 6:03 AM
Thank you so much, Beata! Happy Mother’s Day to you , sweet Beata! <3
Mohn Avatar
May 16, 2023 at 8:11 PM
wonderful Kim...it is so hard to create a mood and you excelled :)
Rodrigues Avatar
May 17, 2023 at 6:04 AM
Thank you so much, David!
Puddifoot Avatar
May 16, 2023 at 5:04 AM
this is excellent in every way: vivid images, original use of language, and i love the closing line - congrats on your win in craig's contest!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 16, 2023 at 5:52 AM
Thank you so much, Charlotte! xx
Leiser Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 7:45 PM
I love the tale you tell to describe melancholy, Kim! Excellent imagery! Congrats on your win! :)
Rodrigues Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 8:44 PM
Thank you, Laura! :)
Sambourne Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 1:58 PM
A compelling prose-poem. The burning cigarette, the empty whiskey bottle add to the melancholic shade of the self destructive smoker. Congratulations! Brian
Rodrigues Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 2:30 PM
Thank you, Brian!
Y. Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 1:14 PM
Hi Kim, I had a feeling you be on the winner's list. I'm not surprised that you were, Congratulations on a top win. It was well deserved. Happy Belated Mother's Day. Have a nice day-Alexis
Rodrigues Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 2:31 PM
Happy Mother’s Day too :) Thank you, Alexis!
Dutta Avatar
May 14, 2023 at 9:15 PM
Tale I’d decade gone and oversold. Big Congrats to win Top. Love.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 6:44 AM
Thank you for citing what you liked, Anisha! Thank you :)
Turner Avatar
May 14, 2023 at 8:03 PM
Sorry I missed this one, Kim. Brings back a few memories when I used to drink except I was a happy drunk. I seem to always find humor in everything:) Congratulations on your winning write, young lady:)
Rodrigues Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 6:44 AM
Thank you, Daniel! Better I suppose to be a happy drunk but better to be happy and sober minded:) God bless you, sweet friend!
Kauffman Avatar
May 14, 2023 at 7:44 PM
Kim, congratulations on your win. This poem overflows with images telling your story of grief and sadness. Marvelous writing that drew me not only into the story but into the deep melancholy of the man's life. Written with an exquisite touch! Blessings.
Kauffman Avatar
May 14, 2023 at 7:42 PM
Kim, congratulations on your win. This poem overflows with images telling your story of grief and sadness. Marvelous writing that drew me not only into the story but into the deep melancholy of the man's life. Written with an exquisite touch! Blessings.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 6:42 AM
Thank you so much, Sam!
Alex Avatar
May 14, 2023 at 7:28 PM
"parched with permanent nicotine", "a vacant stare into a cloudless night with flamenco-stars" - Beautifully written. Congratulations!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 15, 2023 at 6:42 AM
Thank you, Christuraj!
Mcintosh Avatar
May 14, 2023 at 1:40 PM
Melancholic indeed. Brilliant description you've woven into your poetry. Love it. God bless you. Love, Gina
Rodrigues Avatar
May 14, 2023 at 7:04 PM
Thank you, Gina! God bless you too! xx
Loving Iii Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 7:25 PM
I think their asking for depression when they should be asking for spring. It took me into the work of reading.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 8:19 PM
:)
Buhagiar Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 1:08 AM
Seems everyone is writing on melancholy. Must be some contest. Best for a win. Hugs.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 8:18 PM
Yes it is! Thank you! Hugs, my friend ~ Kim
Wolf Avatar
May 9, 2023 at 7:21 PM
Send him to AA... Better yet, send him to AAA, for a tow and an overhaul. lol. Interesting piece, Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
May 10, 2023 at 8:18 PM
LOL!
Peck Avatar
May 9, 2023 at 9:52 AM
This is beautiful, Kim!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 9, 2023 at 12:13 PM
Thank you, Ann!
Rodrigues Avatar
May 9, 2023 at 12:06 PM
Thank you, Ann!
Y. Avatar
May 8, 2023 at 8:36 PM
WoW! Kim, This well-written write is “ melancholy” through and through. I think you hit the ball out of the park with this write. To me, it’s a home run. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great evening:-) Alexis
Rodrigues Avatar
May 9, 2023 at 12:06 PM
Thank you, Alexis!
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