Dr Hitendra Mehta Poet Senryu

Me Still As Statue

shadow beautiful 
outline smooth as wife 
but mannequine

touched her softly still
dreaming oneness through feel 
though statue stood still

wife shook my sweet dream  
real replacing plastic feel
me still as statue  

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By Hitendra Mehta
February 2011

Honours - 9th Place  
Members Contest - Special Sentimental Senryu 
Sponsor - Linda Marie - The Sweetheart of P.S.

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Carol Sunshine Brown February 24, 2011 at 10:57 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Linda-Marie's contest "Special Sentimental Senryu". Long list of winners so glad to see your name among them Hitendra. Love, Carol

Kabuteng P.Ink K. February 21, 2011 at 11:42 AM Congrats Hitendra on your win :) -- really like how you ended this , made it come full circle :) very sweet & nicely written -- enjoyed reading this :D

Debbie Guzzi February 20, 2011 at 2:37 PM the verses are verying touching! Light & Love

Deirdre Omaidin February 18, 2011 at 7:41 AM Congrats on being among the winners. Thanks for nice comments DÉirdre

Michael J. Falotico February 18, 2011 at 5:03 AM Congrats!!! for your well written entry in Lindas contest

Constance La France February 18, 2011 at 4:41 AM Congratulations on you win in Linda's contest with this profound Senryu~~

Elaine George February 18, 2011 at 12:00 AM Beautiful Senryu, dear Hitendra. Many congrat's on your BIG WIN. Lainie

Andrea Dietrich February 17, 2011 at 9:11 PM oh, and now to rate it! 7 of course.

Andrea Dietrich February 17, 2011 at 9:10 PM oh, my goodness, this is absolutely wonderful, HItendra, the way you took it to YOU still as a statue, struck dumb with awe at the end. Wow, congratulations. A fave!

Kash Poet February 17, 2011 at 5:50 PM This is a wonderful write from you Hitendra !Congrats on your win---kashinath

Robert A. Dufresne February 17, 2011 at 5:06 PM very very good and imaginative Hitendra. Congratulations to you!

Wilma Neels February 17, 2011 at 12:02 PM Hitendra, congratulations on your win in Linda's contest ;-)

Sharon Ruebel February 17, 2011 at 10:11 AM Hello Hitendra, Congratulations on your win my dear poet. I love the words you have penned here As Always, Shar

Audrey Haick February 17, 2011 at 9:48 AM Congratulations on your fine win in the contest, Hitendra. Enjoy it! Always, Annalise

Nette Onclaud February 16, 2011 at 9:11 PM so unique and deserving of the great win, hitendra.. CONGRATS! :) huggs, nette

Tahera Mannan February 16, 2011 at 8:21 PM Beautiful. Many congrats for this win.

Robert Pettit February 16, 2011 at 7:49 PM Good triple entry here Hitendra. Congratulations on winning in Linda's contest with this.

John Freeman February 16, 2011 at 7:31 PM Congratulations Hitendra, on your worthy poem's honored place. Agape, Moses

Dr.Ram Mehta February 16, 2011 at 6:05 PM Congratulations on the win in the contest of Linda, Hitendra

Linda-Marie Sweetheart February 16, 2011 at 5:46 PM Congrats Hitendra on your success in my contest luv.. thankxx for your support always ...

Honesty Oimbo February 13, 2011 at 4:44 AM this a splendid senryu

Carolyn Devonshire February 11, 2011 at 10:49 AM Welcome back, Hitendra. Thank you for stopping by and visiting my poem. I hope you will be posting some new work soon! Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart February 5, 2011 at 6:43 PM thankxx for supporting my current contest Hitendra.. I did a blog today on my contest so please go read about syllables and count luv.. appreciate the support and will read fully at judging time...good luck...

Dr.Ram Mehta February 5, 2011 at 10:35 AM Nice multiple senryu with nice pen picture, Hitendra

Carolyn Devonshire February 5, 2011 at 2:22 AM Very curious how you were reaching to touch the statue and then became very still as your wife woke you. Perhaps you should haved continued dreaming, Hitendra. A very intriguing poem that really captures the reader's attention. Best wishes in the contest. Love, Carolyn