Maze

America-
s flag flies
high (like the president)
overhead (our cost)
with colors that
don't run....
the race fair
      with a head start
      and a Barry bonds shot
but the Juggernuats victory
is not mine
nor yours
our victory is lost
and found
here
in the maze....

he drinks shots
when he can afford liquor 
but beer
is the closest of his
confidants
both bubbly and bitter
so sad his dear friend
encourages solace in others
that just
don't
at least not with him
have you ever?
drank alone?
        
the roach from next door
can't get in
and it's raining
it's raining 
hard
the drum of aqua droplets
crashing from oblivion to surface
is deafning/horrifiying/ugly
to it's
alien form
        welcome to America
                  little guy

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 5/3/2009 3:23:00 PM
congrat,well deserved my friend--charma
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Date: 4/30/2009 6:57:00 PM
Wow very strong poem Congratulations on your featured poem!
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Date: 4/30/2009 4:22:00 PM
hell yea this is some true wisdom right here
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Date: 4/30/2009 2:54:00 AM
Congratulations on being featured this week.
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Date: 4/29/2009 1:04:00 PM
Brian, nice work and congrats on your feature...Raul
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Date: 4/28/2009 2:53:00 PM
Brian, Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. Keep writing. Lovingly, Dane Ann (a little gal, smiling)
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Date: 4/28/2009 9:23:00 AM
This is a great bit of writing here...the discontent, the frustration of a runaway government and hapless citizens....yeah, this a favorite!!! Right on, Write on! Steve
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Date: 4/28/2009 9:17:00 AM
Brian, congrats on having your poem featured this week!!!!!!
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Date: 4/27/2009 3:42:00 PM
congratulations on your poem being featured my friend--charma
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Date: 4/27/2009 2:58:00 PM
Times are tough, eh? I was born in 1929. Those were tough times too. Some even ate the "roach from next door." Congrats on this selection. Love, daver
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Date: 4/27/2009 9:32:00 AM
Congrats Brian on "Maze" being featured. I have never been held captive in America. I always felt free to leave if I didn't love it. Of course, I never saw a government check, neither unemployment nor public assistance. Finally saw one at age 17 when I "Earned" my first one serving my country. Seems like these days it's freebies and whining. God Bless. Vince
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Date: 4/27/2009 5:08:00 AM
Hello, this is an excellent piece of art. Anyway, congrats on your featured poem tis week. Mine is also featured. Ernilando
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Date: 4/27/2009 4:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved featured poem this week. May you have many more. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/26/2009 11:43:00 PM
Congrats on your featured poem this week Brian Rgds Brian
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Date: 4/26/2009 4:58:00 PM
Wow...this is excellent work! Congratulations for this awsome piece...and well deserving being featured this week! ~ Carrie
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Date: 4/26/2009 12:05:00 PM
Nice work, congrats on the featured poem too. this is deep.
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Date: 4/21/2009 8:13:00 PM
Very interesting, love the comparisons in this one, for, our country can be so judgemental and mean. Whatever happen to love thy sister and brother. I miss the days of old when people stood for something and together they united to make a difference.
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