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Masquerade

MASQUERADE Promenade and step! He as Romeo she as Juliet Whirled about wildly in the dance Met they both – just bumping – by chance Promenade and step! Look away without fear At she ‘neath white mask Would she dance with him dare he ask? On suffocating, noisy crowd! Each with secrets Each yearning Protected as by shroud Promenade and step! Music so lively Champagne and wine Drunken dance three quarter time No telling saintly from infamous Nor telling dark from light Careless dancers Candles so bright Promenade and step! Bold and free from alarm Costume and voice their only charms Two now met in each other’s arms \

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Joe Maverick

Date: 5/2/2012 1:42:00 PM

Really enjoyed this Daver such a complex scene brought straight to the reader to enjoy; well done indeed.."

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/24/2012 10:03:00 AM

How creatively you describe the old-time dances held in Medieval times, Daver. That noisy crowd made it hard for Romeo to reach Juliet (the finest love story of all time). Also like the repeating line as it adds the dance cadence to each verse. Beautifully written, my friend. Love, Carolyn

James Peranteau

Date: 4/23/2012 8:06:00 PM

Your reps dear poet make it as though I'm actually on the dance floor with the flowering sylph in white....see; now you've got me dreaming out loud ! *smiles* Awesome write Dave ! Have a wonderful week my friend....much love, james

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/22/2012 10:32:00 PM

Daver, no, I never heard of fopdoodle (or whatever you said). I bet you have tons of fun slang from your youth. Yes, I knew the word Retch. An interesting little story. I used that word in a short story for my creative writing class at age 16. My teacher did not know the word and she circled it and said, "what is THIS?" I felt good to know my teacher did not even know a word like that. It's not THAT uncommon, do you think?

Daver Austin
Date: 5/2/2012 2:27:00 PM

What a retched teacher you had. DUH.

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 4/22/2012 5:44:00 AM

Love it Dave, I will get on my dancin shoes and join you for a round. Can almost hear the music and for sure am in the mood. I do like the repetition you use; so effective! Luv, Elizabeth

Daver Austin
Date: 4/22/2012 8:52:00 AM

Do you know Khachaturian's Masquerade Suite? This was my inspiration. If you don't know it, give a listen. Love, daver

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 4/22/2012 5:20:00 AM

You are a soul man, Daver Austin!:) This one is a beauty, I'm going fave it, for sure! I read this before, it got me to thinking that the world is filled with these Romeos and Juliets. Sometimes I wonder what had inspired Shakespeare. Love this piece! Best wishes, Love you, Mikki

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/21/2012 9:04:00 PM

this has a classic feel to it, Daver. I love the repeating lines and the message behind it. wonderful!! Yep, i'm the toad on the lone stretch of road!!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/21/2012 5:11:00 PM

Enjoyed the rhythm of this one..Somewhat different from the ones that you have been writing lately..Thanks for the kind review of my work.. I am glad that you enjoyed reading my poem about love ....Sara

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/21/2012 1:01:00 PM

Daver....I love this poem you have written today !!!! - Have a lovely weekend with a glass Champagne!!! - oxox Anne-Lise