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Marlene

Way, way back in 1974, When I was just a teen Three friends and I went to this place I'm sure you never seen We all went on a camping trip Two miles in the woods We packed our gear, our fishing poles And all our other goods This place in Pennsylvania, Has a gorgeous waterfall This story's true I'm telling you... So here's what I recall We were standing in our underwear Bathing in the river The water was so darn cold My lips began to shiver We were so deep into the woods; We never would be found But you won't believe what we saw When we turned around Strolling down the mountain And bringing all their gear Were four girls who saw us all In our underwear All the girls were our age And one was VERY fine I told my friends to all- "BACK OFF" For that one there, was mine As the hours passed, I kissed that girl Yep, she had fallen for me So I took my knife and I carved our names In this big old tree Forty years later I went back To see what I would find To my surprise there was that tree And the names I left behind FYI: Although I only spent a weekend with this girl that I met over 40 years ago, for some reason I'll never forget her name. "Marlene" This was in Bushkill Falls, Pa. I was 16 years old and believe it or not back in the day I thumbed it there. From NJ where I lived it was a two Hour car ride. It took us twelve hours by thumb. Most Original Poetry Contest Sponsor: Juliet Legion

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Date: 6/3/2021 7:07:00 PM
Aww, dear Charlie, you never fail to charm me. What a wonderful reverie, a marvelous poem. Your shining pen spills captivating ink, my wonderful friend and adventurer.. I can't believe you thumbed 12 hours to get there.. lol! what a wild man! and I mean that in the most endearing way, as a teen I would have found that to be an enticing quality lol! :)) Congratulations for your wonderful win in Juliet's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 5/23/2021 7:17:00 PM
Thanks for entering your original poem, Charles. You told an interesting story. It sounds like a memorable experience. This was a difficult contest to judge. Keep up the creativity.
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Date: 5/23/2021 2:10:00 PM
Congratulations! Sometimes, it's nice to look back and remember those sweet experiences when we were younger....
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Date: 2/24/2021 7:58:00 PM
That is an amazing write! I thoroughly enjoyed the read. Great poem!
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Date: 4/25/2018 8:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Charles, wonderful poem and so special ..Hugs Eve ~`*
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Charles Messina
Date: 4/25/2018 10:44:00 PM
Hi Eve, thank you so much for reading and your congrats! Nice to see you....hugs // Charlie
Date: 4/25/2018 2:33:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. A great memory... told very well.
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Charles Messina
Date: 4/25/2018 2:40:00 PM
Hi Susan, thank you so much! Thanks for reading and your kind words.....much appreciated...Charlie
Date: 4/25/2018 9:44:00 AM
This is a striking poem (in spite of the imperfect rhyme scheme of gear and underwear). Very entertaining and sweet. Congrats on your well deserved bronze finish, Charles.
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Charles Messina
Date: 4/25/2018 9:54:00 AM
Hi Line, My imperfections are recognized quite often as a result of my 10th grade education..lol But I am trying my dear.. Thanks for the bronze award in your contest...Stay well....Charlie
Date: 4/25/2018 9:09:00 AM
What a wonderful memory you have shared with us! It brought back memories from my own teen years and the guys who made my heart leap:-)! Congratulations on your win and thanks for the memories, my friend! Hugs. Pandita
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Charles Messina
Date: 4/25/2018 9:21:00 AM
Hello Dear, thanks for your kind words. If those guys that made your heart leap saw your beautiful writings now, for sure their hearts would be leaping still. Thanks for reading....hugs Charlie And BTW, yes I would have loved to try some of that delicious Meat Pie ! Yum !
Date: 4/2/2018 6:28:00 PM
Hello Charlie, I have read this poem several times, because I enjoyed this poem. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Charles Messina
Date: 4/2/2018 6:58:00 PM
Hi Darlene, thanks so much for reading and liking this poem. This is one of my great childhood memories. Have a wonderful evening as well my friend. All the very best, Charlie
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Charles Messina
Date: 4/2/2018 6:58:00 PM
Hi Darlene, thanks so much for reading and liking this poem. This is one of my great childhood memories. Have a wonderful evening as well my friend. All the very best, Charlie

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