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Marking Time

The sky slid across a thinly iced sun
As clouds collided amid piled up heaps
Painting noses pink, where powdered breath spun
Webs of frost surrounding when minutes creep
On skittish feet, wary of time’s upkeep
When their passion’s reckless young Romeos
Discard stoic gray for flashy road shows
What impatient eyes fail to calculate...
A serene gleaned as the wisdom of snow
Lands quiet, where wounded hopes hibernate.

1/03/21

N/A in Just Thinkin contest
Sponsor: John Lawless
judged 1/05/21

Copyright © Michelle Faulkner | Year Posted 2021

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Sam Kauffman Date: 5/5/2021 10:08:00 AM Michelle, every line is like looking at the masterpieces in a museum, my friend - richly painted, a seasoning of witty humor of the "pink noses!" This is masterfully crafted with depth. So happy to see it on the winner's list! All the best dear friend! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 5/10/2021 1:34:00 PM Thank you again for your encouraging comments, my friend!

Hilo Poet Date: 5/3/2021 7:31:00 PM An amazing achievement, Michelle, I thoroughly enjoyed the plainness of your words that pulls the whole into a powerful message, my gratitude for your participation, and my compliments on your well-deserved placement my friend, Aloha! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 5/10/2021 1:33:00 PM Thank you for the kind comment, and the placement in your contest, appreciate it very much~

Sigrid Ermine Date: 4/17/2021 3:45:00 PM I completely concur with Sam. Your surreal premise grabs readers, forces us to step into the icy, stark, melancholy setting. Second line, - spinning breath opens poem with wonder and truth. Haunting and bright, deservedly a Top Winner, beautiful in its own essence. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 4/18/2021 12:22:00 PM You are so kind, thank you for such a lovely comment, Sigrid~

Sam Kauffman Date: 1/22/2021 11:26:00 AM Amazing Michelle. You had me at the first line, "the sky slid across a thinly iced sun," followed by line upon line of poetic beauty in movement, images and depth. This is a fav for me. Congratulations on your first place win! More than well deserved. All the best my friend. You inspire me! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 1/25/2021 8:16:00 PM I find your poetry inspiring as well, hope you are staying safe, my friend~

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 1/13/2021 1:52:00 AM I have always said that your poetry is deeply and profoundly superb. your talent enables you to enter a realm of poetry few have discovered - Wonderful write. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 1/13/2021 12:22:00 PM Your comment is a ray of sun to my gray day today, so thank you for that!

Quoth Theraven Date: 1/7/2021 11:27:00 PM Michelle, May hope recover. 'The sky slid across a thinly iced sun'., fascinating. -Richard Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 1/10/2021 6:56:00 PM Now I think of winter as the season to recover and recuperate (and from my husband's illness I have learned it takes as long as it takes)

Gershon Wolf Date: 1/7/2021 8:38:00 PM You dazzle me with your command of the language, as you embed image within haunting image, bringing it all to a stark denouement. Bravo, Michelle! Warmest wishes always, Gershon Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 1/10/2021 6:55:00 PM And you dazzle me with your generous encouragement, gw, and I am a great fan of yours too - hope you have a warm winter!

Rico Leffanta Date: 1/4/2021 11:17:00 AM Just thinkin' - is your husband named, "Mark"? Aloha! Rico Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 1/10/2021 6:53:00 PM No but I did have one of those ill advised summer romances - a long long time ago! - with someone named Mark - a fond memory but best left in the past~

Susan Lawrence Date: 1/4/2021 8:52:00 AM Michelle, So beautiful..mysterious..romantic and melancholy all in one. I love "where wounded hopes hibernate." So many nuances and intimately detailed moments in time! Thank you for this . Susan Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 1/10/2021 6:52:00 PM Thank you for your kind words, Susan, they made me smile!

Regina Mcintosh Date: 1/4/2021 3:39:00 AM Wow... love it. God Bless you Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 1/10/2021 6:51:00 PM Appreciate it, thank you, Regina~

John Watt Date: 1/4/2021 12:01:00 AM I like the skating imagery of the first line, really creative. Also webs of frost. Mostly I like the thought of wounded hopes convalescing in a hibernation of wise and serene snow, the antithesis of flashy Romeos. Brilliant... I predict a wonderful placement for this. I wish I could write this way. Warmly ~ John Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 1/10/2021 6:50:00 PM Maybe it's because I'm older but I find winter more welcome than in my younger years, I appreciate the quiet and calm more - it seems it wasn't right for this particular contest but your generous compliment is win enough for me :)