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Make a Wish

In abandoned fields the silhouette of a dad blowing fluffy seeds from the last dandelion's head towards packed toys in the shed Beyond mountain yields Her hands untied from the bed sweet little girl bleeds yet runs far from the mad lad as blowballs steer her ahead. Inspired by kim Merryman's contest - Make A Wish ( Double or Single Quintain) Thanks Kim ( Not for the contest)

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/17/2016 9:26:00 PM

oh my goodness, what an impact this one has. So short and yet it says so much. Very unique!!

Michael Ainsley

Date: 8/11/2016 12:33:00 AM

Spun me around,Made me think.Good write!

Funom Makama

Date: 8/6/2016 11:46:00 AM

This is awesome and fantastic. I love it in every way. Lovely, lovely, so lovely.

Jesse Day

Date: 8/5/2016 7:45:00 AM

Love how the dad made a wish from hopelessness - happy that she escapes. Beautifully and poetically written!

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 7/31/2016 7:13:00 PM

deep excellent pen charmaine wishing you a blessed week pal sorry not been around much to comment my internet was down for some time and family affairs

M. L. Kiser

Date: 7/28/2016 3:57:00 PM

So sad, but well done.

Tim Smith

Date: 7/14/2016 12:31:00 PM

Came back to read it again...A fave

Anthony Mark

Date: 7/13/2016 3:40:00 AM

Very unusual wording, it's like a random word placed in each line to deliberately make the reader pause , it works as a story , but sends the mind off on many tangents....Ian

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/11/2016 8:13:00 PM

Powerful, so much packed in these verses! :)

Constance La France

Date: 7/11/2016 7:02:00 PM

Charmaine, such a deep write, well done, 7 ~

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/11/2016 3:19:00 PM

Wow, Charmaine, there is such depth of story telling in what first appears to be the brevity of a two stanza quatrain. Deep in thought and melancholy. Well done, sweet lady !! :)

Jan Allison

Date: 7/11/2016 3:07:00 PM

great imagery Charma - my initial thought for my poem was for dandelion clocks but I couldn't think of what to write - you have done a wonderful job:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 7/11/2016 2:45:00 PM

You have added to you poem. I really like it...Is blowballs from the dandelion?

Tim Smith
Date: 7/11/2016 2:54:00 PM

I hadn't seen that term used before...that is what I assumed it to be. It is clear.

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 7/11/2016 2:50:00 PM

Thanks for reading, The first quintain is about the dad blowing dandelion seeds ..making a wish for his daughter's return. The daughter escaped..those blowballs are ofcourse of the dandelions ..if the topic is about that...Is it not clear?