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Make A Wish

In abandoned fields the silhouette of a dad blowing fluffy seeds from the last dandelion's head towards packed toys in the shed Beyond mountain yields Her hands untied from the bed sweet little girl bleeds yet runs far from the mad lad as blowballs steer her ahead. Inspired by kim Merryman's contest - Make A Wish ( Double or Single Quintain) Thanks Kim ( Not for the contest)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Date: 8/17/2016 9:26:00 PM
oh my goodness, what an impact this one has. So short and yet it says so much. Very unique!!
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Date: 8/11/2016 12:33:00 AM
Spun me around,Made me think.Good write!
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Date: 8/6/2016 11:46:00 AM
This is awesome and fantastic. I love it in every way. Lovely, lovely, so lovely.
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Date: 8/5/2016 7:45:00 AM
Love how the dad made a wish from hopelessness - happy that she escapes. Beautifully and poetically written!
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Date: 7/31/2016 7:13:00 PM
deep excellent pen charmaine wishing you a blessed week pal sorry not been around much to comment my internet was down for some time and family affairs
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Date: 7/28/2016 3:57:00 PM
So sad, but well done.
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Date: 7/14/2016 12:31:00 PM
Came back to read it again...A fave
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Date: 7/13/2016 3:40:00 AM
Very unusual wording, it's like a random word placed in each line to deliberately make the reader pause , it works as a story , but sends the mind off on many tangents....Ian
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Date: 7/11/2016 8:13:00 PM
Powerful, so much packed in these verses! :)
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Date: 7/11/2016 7:02:00 PM
Charmaine, such a deep write, well done, 7 ~
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Date: 7/11/2016 3:19:00 PM
Wow, Charmaine, there is such depth of story telling in what first appears to be the brevity of a two stanza quatrain. Deep in thought and melancholy. Well done, sweet lady !! :)
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Date: 7/11/2016 3:07:00 PM
great imagery Charma - my initial thought for my poem was for dandelion clocks but I couldn't think of what to write - you have done a wonderful job:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/11/2016 2:45:00 PM
You have added to you poem. I really like it...Is blowballs from the dandelion?
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Tim Smith
Date: 7/11/2016 2:54:00 PM
I hadn't seen that term used before...that is what I assumed it to be. It is clear.
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Charmaine Chircop
Date: 7/11/2016 2:50:00 PM
Thanks for reading, The first quintain is about the dad blowing dandelion seeds ..making a wish for his daughter's return. The daughter escaped..those blowballs are ofcourse of the dandelions ..if the topic is about that...Is it not clear?