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Mail Order Maiden - Ct

I smiled invitingly, the screen Revealed woman of my ideal Russian silk beauty, pure, unseen Pillow lips, brush eyelash appeal I said I could serve her well, my earnings Would purchase nicest things of her yearnings I'll fly her here, get her spousal visa Her eyes alight, replied, "Sure... I'm Leeza" " I need a man on good money" I smiled, " Two fifty salary" Her sqint, " Oh, it is that each month?" Sense shrieked above smooth aesthetic Her theme clearly spelt pretentious - Need to switch her off, tremendous 2nd September 2020 Written for Contest: Charronet Sponsor: Charles Messina

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Jan Allison

Date: 10/13/2020 10:20:00 AM

lol I once wrote about an internet bride your poem made me smile:-) Many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/13/2020 9:22:00 AM

Sigrid, this is a delightful wink and a smile with a heavy dose of irony and reality about intentions. Really nice imagery that carries your theme. And, there is a sadness about the man's loneliness and desire for a mate. Congratulations on your HM.

Charles Messina

Date: 10/13/2020 6:16:00 AM

Sigrid, Thanks for entering my contest. I agree with Carolyn...there are many a woman who will only date a wealthy soul. Your format was off on the last stanza or this would have placed higher. Congratulations on your placement. All the best...Charlie

Gershon Wolf

Date: 9/4/2020 11:17:00 AM

Ha, ha! I very like! ~ Igor Fofoofnik

Bobby May

Date: 9/2/2020 3:02:00 PM

Interesting write my friend! Well done!

Sigrid Ermine
Date: 9/2/2020 10:03:00 PM

Cherries, cheers, Bobby.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/2/2020 9:55:00 AM

There actually are some women who will only date wealthy men, Sigrid. I see "wealth" differently. An abundance of love is what I seek. I like the way you ended your poem. Pretentious indeed! Hugs, Carolyn

Sigrid Ermine
Date: 9/2/2020 2:09:00 PM

Indeed! This scenario is rampant! .... Two fools who deserve each other! Thank you, Carolyn. Appreciate your time

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/2/2020 5:27:00 AM

At least she was honest --she wanted money above all. You built her portrait well, Sigrid. All the best.

Sigrid Ermine
Date: 9/2/2020 5:43:00 AM

Yeah, that's right. Sonnet for Contest, pretty limited scope. Easy option! Ta, Vijay