Magnification

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Written: November 24, 2023 ____________________________________________ Close-up screening will show the flaws. Under microscope, watch the draws. With fresh style—microscopy tool. Sight blur has been fixed—law or rule. Microscope grips when bright hue thaws. Close-up screening will show the flaws. Scab thinness—less than two microns Hook the dwarf scope—to grasp ions. A maze echo—of magic dream. Wanning under the noiseless stream Close-up screening will show the flaws. Disclosure of traces—that yaws Pathways forged by spirits with faith. We all crave relief from the wraith. Who blesses hearts—effects show cause Close-up screening will show the flaws.

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Mark Toney

Date: 12/21/2023 3:21:00 PM

I enjoyed your quatern, Lasaad, especially the progression starting with the physical, moving into the metaphysical, and concluding with the spiritual. Impressive.

Julia Ward

Date: 12/21/2023 7:33:00 AM

You were a tiny bit away from coming third, Sotto Poet. I had to give you an HM instead as the rule displayed a comma after "Close up". Had you done so, you would have to have written a different first line. // Well done for the HM!

Ink Empress

Date: 11/25/2023 5:38:00 AM

Is there any prompt or any subject that you cant write on? Really this left me in awe. And how wise is this poem. Not all that which glitters is gold theres so much to something if one looks closely: we will find all the flaws, and flaws do add beauty to the imperfections. I really love the way you’ve written this dear sotto! You really are an impeccable writer. And this definitely made me think too. I love also the rhymes in this. I think this will score high. If they read closely and patiently

Silent One

Date: 11/25/2023 2:52:00 AM

An important message in your poem dear Sotto poet... you always rhyme so well and you are right we need to look closer to make a change and make a difference.. Great poem for the contest..

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/24/2023 2:11:00 PM

Yes, sometimes under the microscope the exact problem is defined be it a bacteria, a virus, or a personality defect. Thanks for sharing this creative one with us and for dropping by my page with congratulations. Sara K

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 11/24/2023 1:16:00 PM

I like the magical feel to the metaphorical magnification to which you refer. Closing up screening of most anything (or anyone) will show their flaws. There seem to be something almost spiritual about your poem. I particularly liked the last verse. And...repeating the use of 'Close-up screening will show the flaws' anchored your poem quite well. This is a brilliantly constructed, flawless Quatern. I admire your diversity in writing in various poetic forms! your poetess friend, Sara

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/24/2023 12:19:00 PM

- Close-up screening shows more than the eye can see - Great writing as always, Las :) - hugs