Lupita's Request

Lupita…forgive me, 
For I would never sin from these 
lips, 
Such words that would spoil the beauty 
of your existence;
But if you requested such a crime, I’d argue 
for remnants of your time, 
And charm you as my fatal audience. 

Of these things I would cite verbally, 
Would be the origin of shape, gifted upon 
your figure, 
Those curves that gave birth to the unpredictable
patterns of life, 
Swaying the adoration of midnight flesh, into these
new testaments of woman. 

How simply intoxicating is this craving?
To bear witness to chocolate unspoiled, as it lay 
peacefully naked over maker’s canvas; 
Let it not melt away, before millions can sample its 
sensuous glow. 

Perhaps art can be reborn from such stillness, 
While wasted labels could fade into retirement, 
Convincing the almighty to revise the structure of 
Eve, 
And acknowledge this last miracle…Lupita. 

What else could be molded from this paradise, but a
Queen’s thoughts and motives? 
If there is nothing but truth in this crime, then I’ve painted 
the solitude of heaven, perfectly.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Marcum Wong Avatar
October 28, 2014 at 10:37 PM
I can see why this is a winning poem Jiril. You have a way of weaving words that command attention. Free verse that is written well is rare and you have that talent. A truly wonderful piece!
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October 29, 2014 at 5:15 PM
Thank you Connie. Appreciate the love.
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September 20, 2014 at 4:04 PM
Jiril, I am so impressed by this incredible piece! Thanks for sharing this gem! Pandita
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September 20, 2014 at 5:07 PM
Thanks Pandita. Appreciate the love
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June 10, 2014 at 5:50 PM
Omg love it! The last few lines especially! And I usually prefer rhymes so that's saying a whole lot! - Emmy xoxo
Clemons Avatar
June 10, 2014 at 6:35 PM
Thank you Emily. Appreciate the love.
Smith Avatar
May 20, 2014 at 4:02 PM
Oh my! Jiril, I have only read a couple but may I just say, "bravo". Such beauty flows from your pen and I feel honored such a creative poet would even read, much less comment on my poem. I seem to only think in rhym, most of the time, lol. Hopefully, I will grow to be able write true poetry.
Clemons Avatar
May 20, 2014 at 5:05 PM
Arlene. Thank you. I appreciate the love. Trust me, there's nothing wrong with your poetry. Write the way you want too. Peace.
Mitchell Avatar
May 20, 2014 at 2:12 PM
This is great! Absolutely love it! Thanks for visiting my page and for the comment. I appreciate it.
Clemons Avatar
May 20, 2014 at 2:58 PM
Thanks Latosha. Appreciate the love.
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April 30, 2014 at 7:18 PM
impressed by your imaginative mind, jiril.. sweet congrats on your shining win!.. huggs
Clemons Avatar
April 30, 2014 at 8:41 PM
Thank You. Nette. Appreciate the love.
A. Sharma Avatar
April 30, 2014 at 7:52 AM
Wonderful write Jiril ! Congrats on great win !
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April 30, 2014 at 12:35 PM
Thank you Dr. Upma. Appreciate the love.
Mehta Avatar
April 30, 2014 at 2:07 AM
Great write on Rock My world contest. Congrats on the win. Jiril
Clemons Avatar
April 30, 2014 at 7:41 AM
Thanks. Dr. Ram, appreciate the love.
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April 29, 2014 at 8:06 PM
Hi Jiril, a xool rocking poem... Congrats in D G.'s contest.... Linda
Clemons Avatar
April 29, 2014 at 9:48 PM
Thanks Poet. Appreciate the love.
Guzzi Avatar
April 25, 2014 at 7:22 PM
very provocative verse Light & Love
Clemons Avatar
April 25, 2014 at 8:29 PM
Thanks Debbie. The provocative parts are metaphors actually. But I appreciate the love. Peace.
Nance Avatar
April 14, 2014 at 6:20 AM
You have a great skill with words and imagery, I enjoyed this as well
Clemons Avatar
April 14, 2014 at 7:51 AM
Thank you Casarah. Appreciate the love.
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April 12, 2014 at 7:57 PM
Nicely written, thank you for stopping by and now I will know your work as well…Jesse
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April 12, 2014 at 5:45 PM
Nicely penned romantic write my friend..
Clemons Avatar
April 12, 2014 at 6:35 PM
Thank you Ken. Appreciate the love.
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April 5, 2014 at 7:06 PM
I was lost in my imagination enjoying the decadence and erotic undertow of this piece. The mind will flow to levels beyond a poets inclinations. The beauty of art is that it meets the audience where it wishes to travel.
Clemons Avatar
April 5, 2014 at 7:44 PM
Thank you Richard. Appreciate the love.
Melugin Avatar
March 30, 2014 at 9:03 AM
Chocolate is beautiful! Your depiction blew me away! Jeril, You sir, are a master poet. I have the utmost for you and your work! 7 my best, chuck
Clemons Avatar
March 30, 2014 at 10:18 AM
Thanks Chuck. Always appreciate the love you show my poetry.
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March 10, 2014 at 12:23 AM
This is incredibly sexy and romantic. Wonderful poem for a wonderful actress.
Clemons Avatar
March 10, 2014 at 4:44 PM
Lol. actually the line your referring to sexually is a metaphor, "the peacefully naked" part is not sexual, but a metaphor for Lupita's love for her beautiful dark skin, and allowing the public to view as well, so in essence metaphorically "naked".
Clemons Avatar
March 10, 2014 at 2:49 PM
Thanks A.E. Appreciate the love.
Callus Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 5:39 PM
Able choice of words...romantic...and beautiful ending. // paul
Clemons Avatar
March 9, 2014 at 6:23 PM
Thanks Paul. Appreciate the love.
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March 8, 2014 at 2:36 PM
jiril; this one great poem. coming from the heart. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla
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March 8, 2014 at 2:56 PM
Thanks Lucilla. Appreciate the love.
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March 5, 2014 at 10:43 PM
Jiril, this is the best poem ive read today. deep, and straight forward....SKAT
Clemons Avatar
March 5, 2014 at 10:45 PM
Wow. Thanks SKAT. Appreciate the love.
Browning Avatar
March 3, 2014 at 10:32 PM
This is smooth haha, and it deep. Really like this poem Jiril. Enjoyed!
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March 9, 2014 at 12:01 AM
Appreciate the love, bruh
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March 3, 2014 at 11:00 PM
Thanks. Landon
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March 1, 2014 at 5:57 PM
Nicely written Jirill. A visit worth my time... Verlena
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March 1, 2014 at 6:08 PM
Thanks Verlena. Appreciate the love.
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