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Lupita's Request

Lupita…forgive me, For I would never sin from these lips, Such words that would spoil the beauty of your existence; But if you requested such a crime, I’d argue for remnants of your time, And charm you as my fatal audience. Of these things I would cite verbally, Would be the origin of shape, gifted upon your figure, Those curves that gave birth to the unpredictable patterns of life, Swaying the adoration of midnight flesh, into these new testaments of woman. How simply intoxicating is this craving? To bear witness to chocolate unspoiled, as it lay peacefully naked over maker’s canvas; Let it not melt away, before millions can sample its sensuous glow. Perhaps art can be reborn from such stillness, While wasted labels could fade into retirement, Convincing the almighty to revise the structure of Eve, And acknowledge this last miracle…Lupita. What else could be molded from this paradise, but a Queen’s thoughts and motives? If there is nothing but truth in this crime, then I’ve painted the solitude of heaven, perfectly.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 10/28/2014 10:37:00 PM
I can see why this is a winning poem Jiril. You have a way of weaving words that command attention. Free verse that is written well is rare and you have that talent. A truly wonderful piece!
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 10/29/2014 5:15:00 PM
Thank you Connie. Appreciate the love.
Date: 9/20/2014 4:04:00 PM
Jiril, I am so impressed by this incredible piece! Thanks for sharing this gem! Pandita
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 9/20/2014 5:07:00 PM
Thanks Pandita. Appreciate the love
Date: 6/10/2014 5:50:00 PM
Omg love it! The last few lines especially! And I usually prefer rhymes so that's saying a whole lot! - Emmy xoxo
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 6/10/2014 6:35:00 PM
Thank you Emily. Appreciate the love.
Date: 5/20/2014 4:02:00 PM
Oh my! Jiril, I have only read a couple but may I just say, "bravo". Such beauty flows from your pen and I feel honored such a creative poet would even read, much less comment on my poem. I seem to only think in rhym, most of the time, lol. Hopefully, I will grow to be able write true poetry.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 5/20/2014 5:05:00 PM
Arlene. Thank you. I appreciate the love. Trust me, there's nothing wrong with your poetry. Write the way you want too. Peace.
Date: 5/20/2014 2:12:00 PM
This is great! Absolutely love it! Thanks for visiting my page and for the comment. I appreciate it.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 5/20/2014 2:58:00 PM
Thanks Latosha. Appreciate the love.
Date: 4/30/2014 7:18:00 PM
impressed by your imaginative mind, jiril.. sweet congrats on your shining win!.. huggs
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/30/2014 8:41:00 PM
Thank You. Nette. Appreciate the love.
Date: 4/30/2014 7:52:00 AM
Wonderful write Jiril ! Congrats on great win !
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/30/2014 12:35:00 PM
Thank you Dr. Upma. Appreciate the love.
Date: 4/30/2014 2:07:00 AM
Great write on Rock My world contest. Congrats on the win. Jiril
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/30/2014 7:41:00 AM
Thanks. Dr. Ram, appreciate the love.
Date: 4/29/2014 8:06:00 PM
Hi Jiril, a xool rocking poem... Congrats in D G.'s contest.... Linda
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/29/2014 9:48:00 PM
Thanks Poet. Appreciate the love.
Date: 4/25/2014 7:22:00 PM
very provocative verse Light & Love
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/25/2014 8:29:00 PM
Thanks Debbie. The provocative parts are metaphors actually. But I appreciate the love. Peace.
Date: 4/14/2014 6:20:00 AM
You have a great skill with words and imagery, I enjoyed this as well
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/14/2014 7:51:00 AM
Thank you Casarah. Appreciate the love.
Date: 4/12/2014 7:57:00 PM
Nicely written, thank you for stopping by and now I will know your work as well…Jesse
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Date: 4/12/2014 5:45:00 PM
Nicely penned romantic write my friend..
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/12/2014 6:35:00 PM
Thank you Ken. Appreciate the love.
Date: 4/5/2014 7:06:00 PM
I was lost in my imagination enjoying the decadence and erotic undertow of this piece. The mind will flow to levels beyond a poets inclinations. The beauty of art is that it meets the audience where it wishes to travel.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 4/5/2014 7:44:00 PM
Thank you Richard. Appreciate the love.
Date: 3/30/2014 9:03:00 AM
Chocolate is beautiful! Your depiction blew me away! Jeril, You sir, are a master poet. I have the utmost for you and your work! 7 my best, chuck
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/30/2014 10:18:00 AM
Thanks Chuck. Always appreciate the love you show my poetry.
Date: 3/10/2014 12:23:00 AM
This is incredibly sexy and romantic. Wonderful poem for a wonderful actress.
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/10/2014 4:44:00 PM
Lol. actually the line your referring to sexually is a metaphor, "the peacefully naked" part is not sexual, but a metaphor for Lupita's love for her beautiful dark skin, and allowing the public to view as well, so in essence metaphorically "naked".
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/10/2014 2:49:00 PM
Thanks A.E. Appreciate the love.
Date: 3/9/2014 5:39:00 PM
Able choice of words...romantic...and beautiful ending. // paul
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/9/2014 6:23:00 PM
Thanks Paul. Appreciate the love.
Date: 3/8/2014 2:36:00 PM
jiril; this one great poem. coming from the heart. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/8/2014 2:56:00 PM
Thanks Lucilla. Appreciate the love.
Date: 3/5/2014 10:43:00 PM
Jiril, this is the best poem ive read today. deep, and straight forward....SKAT
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/5/2014 10:45:00 PM
Wow. Thanks SKAT. Appreciate the love.
Date: 3/3/2014 10:32:00 PM
This is smooth haha, and it deep. Really like this poem Jiril. Enjoyed!
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/9/2014 12:01:00 AM
Appreciate the love, bruh
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/3/2014 11:00:00 PM
Thanks. Landon
Date: 3/1/2014 5:57:00 PM
Nicely written Jirill. A visit worth my time... Verlena
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Jiril Clemons
Date: 3/1/2014 6:08:00 PM
Thanks Verlena. Appreciate the love.