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She holds my hand like I’d never wake up after passing -out and drinking one last lick from a broken bottle, only to find myself needing another round of gin. Yet, my woman cuddles me as if this hair isn't filthy even though I haven't hit the showers, even though I can’t take my body to rest, to act functional. And she gleams like she can't smell the reek of alcohol I am breathing… how my heart aches for the last time her mouth kissed me on the face after I broke a promise I couldn’t possibly fulfill-- a lowlife freak, rogue of a man, disappearing into bars and more bars to silence fears so I cannot hear old ghosts on the walls, in nightmares, within her embrace, … but still I can’t love myself the same way that she loves me like I never screamed, denied, told her to go lose herself, banging the door-- telling her that she was worse than my compulsive urge. She loves me -- a reckless quirk-- believing I will see THAT day when I can Change. ....................... 11.17.2016 Creep Contest for Silent One

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Date: 12/2/2016 3:41:00 PM
Wow! Awesome, Nette. Many congrats on your win. Lainey
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Date: 12/1/2016 8:50:00 AM
Hi Nette, Congratulations on your 3rd place win in the"Creep" contest. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 11/21/2016 6:19:00 AM
Addiction is a tough nut. How is it that people don't realize that there is something better? It must have been something bad to drive them there along with a bit of bad luck with their brain chemistry. What a mess. Ugh!
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Date: 11/19/2016 1:10:00 PM
A sobering, gritty and honest poem, Nette. The struggles on both end was well illuminated by your talented pen. Bravos for breaching such a painful subject. An excellent poem on all levels, my dear. Loved it very much. I had relatives who were alcoholics and the unpleasant childhood memories are as real today as it was back then. Much love to you.
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Date: 11/18/2016 10:38:00 AM
Who can explain love? Yet, the drinker doesn't realize what a creep he really is, or how he's hurting those around him. Good work. Love, daver
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Date: 11/18/2016 7:45:00 AM
No doubt, love is blind. Sometimes people love us in spite of horrid flaws, hopefully love can conquer the demon alcohol within! :) Good luck Nette.
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Date: 11/18/2016 5:58:00 AM
What a horrible situation he and she find themselves in! One to believe the other can change while the other rests forever the same! A dynamic and profound poem. Good luck dear, nette! Hugs
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Date: 11/17/2016 8:33:00 PM
This is great brings me to a couple of recent books I've been reading..."The Last Good Kiss" and a few of the scenes from "The Killing Cycle"
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Date: 11/17/2016 6:52:00 PM
Darkly beautiful prose, my friend! I kept seeing a Van Gogh Painting as I read this tumbling epic! jim
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Date: 11/17/2016 5:34:00 PM
Wow! I really love this Nette! Love, Juli-Michelle
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Date: 11/17/2016 2:48:00 PM
A different take on the theme well-done a great poem x
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Date: 11/17/2016 2:24:00 PM
Ah, this is so well written, the imagery your portrayed is picture perfect, and you have struck a chord, in that sometimes love isn't easy, yet we love none the less. "The Last Good Kiss"
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Date: 11/17/2016 12:34:00 PM
- Although the hope is small ... the heart is huge - Broken promises ... brings me 35 years back in time ... the time my heart believed in lies and sweet kisses - A powerful poem in my eyes, Nette - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/17/2016 11:53:00 AM
Woman, you raised the roof. I have an older bro who was an angry, drinking man. His wife kept the fire burning by showing perseverance, warmth until he changed like he was struck by lightning. You have woven an impeccable 7 +poem!
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Date: 11/17/2016 11:32:00 AM
My , faith is tested as one never gives up on love. A most impressive poem which reminds me of the movie, " When a man loves a woman." High up there among the famed contemporary line-up!
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Date: 11/17/2016 10:35:00 AM
Oh Nette..I know a person who loved an alcaholic for many years..even married him..had his kids..Good kids...And its now in his early seventies that he managed to cure himself...She kept believing of that day..It took quite long...but it did save him..and now are enjoying their old happy years tog.Even a creep deserves to be loved.A favourite..Yr poem gave me goosebumps
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Date: 11/17/2016 9:52:00 AM
When I saw the title, I thought this might be about me. :) Funny, but today it probably could be. We all see ourselves much differently than one who cares about us does, at least that I my opinion. Your poem was great Nette, it had an edge to it and there was a darkness that is understood. Really nicely done.
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Date: 11/17/2016 2:24:00 PM
LOL you and me both!!!!!

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