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Love-POTD

My love asked me so sweet,
Am I lovelier than a moonlit treat?
I vowed to her with all my might,
When I gaze at you, the moon takes flight.

The flower questioned the garden's grace,
Do I bring colors to your sacred space?
The garden pledged to those blooms so rare,
Your presence, dear flower, makes heaven seem bare.

I inquired of my beloved, my heart's desire,
Shall I keep you captive in my eyes, stoking love's fire?
Tenderly, my lover replied with a smile,
In your gaze, the entire universe, I'll defile.

The poet pondered upon his creation,
Why do poems speak of pain and desperation?
The verses paused, took a deep breath,
The poet's tears, now dry, etched upon his breast.

A POTD poem
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Guptar Avatar
September 13, 2023 at 8:32 AM
Sincere emotions fluently and beautifully conveyed from the depth of the heart. Congratulations on your POD. Best regards.
Mitra Avatar
September 10, 2023 at 11:48 AM
Loved the mood of this poem..So Romantic. Proves once again that poetry can never be limited in theme of love.
Kulkarni Avatar
August 29, 2023 at 8:58 AM
Beautifully worded and expressed!
Mahmoud  Avatar
August 7, 2023 at 11:33 PM
This is beautiful
La France Avatar
July 21, 2023 at 9:28 AM
Jay, wonderful poem and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge L Words !
Alex Avatar
July 21, 2023 at 12:54 AM
A powerful poem on the powerful theme of love.
Andresen Avatar
July 20, 2023 at 2:03 PM
- Congratulations on your win, Jay :) - hugs
Goldsmith Avatar
July 20, 2023 at 11:16 AM
Congratulations on your win. A wonderful write/ending. I enjoyed this one. Have a wonderful day....................
Baker Avatar
July 15, 2023 at 4:35 PM
very thought-provoking poetry, Jay. Thanks for sharing with us today. And thanks for your comments when you head my way. Adios my amigo! I've no more to say. Write On! Bill
Lane Avatar
July 15, 2023 at 3:14 PM
Oh, my goodness, Jay. You need not ever be concerned about writing a Sonnet when you write rhyme in verses like these. Poets write of the joys of Spring, Summer days, Autumn leaves and Winter's snow, but I recognize that when a poet's tears fall upon his breast, that poem he's scribed will be one not forgotten by his readers. "Love" is such a poem to me and deserves to be saved as a favorite.
Volumes Avatar
July 15, 2023 at 1:19 PM
This is profound Jay, and I often ask myself what is the reason behind the preponderance of melancholy poems. My answer to myself is that when we are happy , we are busy being happy and have activities to do. When we are morose, we tend to have time on our hands, time to write about it. Your poem is an insight Jay I enjoyed it my friend.
Andresen Avatar
July 15, 2023 at 11:02 AM
- There is a lot of emotion behind a poem... all kinds of emotion... great writing, Jay :) - hugs
Ray Choudhury Avatar
July 15, 2023 at 10:50 AM
Passionate poem, it has a beautiful flow too - really enjoyed! BW ~ Mala
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