Loveliness On a Hill

I must have encountered her on a hill, Where scatterings of ferns deepened Through insolent winds that shivered While watching her carry a basket of daisies… She is Loveliness, forlorn in a drowsy pathway, More forlorn than languid endings Or all that death can ever reach. By trying to alienate myself from this image A weariness brushed on a Dresden face so pale That the luster in her eyes became stardust , While I designed a self-tumbling act as a ploy To gaze at her closer , oh one divine mystery. Just there, etches of beauty flatter her hair, Like a dream capricious as twilight leaving And in her almond eyes, the moon-flakes glimmer How by chance, this silhouette found me breathless, That I did gravitate through her bloom, weakening-- She, an air between death and forever… Loveliness on a hill. '2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 5' Contest for Mark Toney Re-submitted 12/18/2018
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Inman Avatar
September 18, 2016 at 8:45 AM
What an absolutely lovely bit of writing you have created here Nette. Such gentle beauty created with image filled phrases. Exceptional!
U.D Palawon  Avatar
September 18, 2016 at 5:40 AM
This is so wonderful to read. Truly poetic! Congrats nette. :)
Wigley Avatar
September 18, 2016 at 12:30 AM
This is lovely, nette, and I particularly like the 'Dresden face' phrase- very descriptive. Well done, Viv x
Allison Avatar
September 17, 2016 at 5:53 PM
a very beautiful write Nette congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Marty Avatar
September 17, 2016 at 5:42 PM
There is a kind of mysterious beauty in all of this poem. I was lost in your world and metaphoric words!
Hamilton Avatar
September 17, 2016 at 3:01 PM
Congratulations Nette on a fine win, I was looking for less lines, however....this is a beautiful write that could not be ignored, poetic beauty will always win, I almost forgot about the 10 words as I was lost in the power and the beauty of the write. Well done!
Goff Avatar
September 17, 2016 at 7:28 AM
'forlorn in a drowsy pathway' sweet indeed!
Gupta Avatar
September 17, 2016 at 6:11 AM
Thank God that the gravitation worked and we did get this lovely gift ... nice indeed ...
Raha Avatar
September 17, 2016 at 4:14 AM
Oh Beautiful sentiment nette,just beautiful. straight into fav.
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