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lovebirds

(Inspired by ‘paranoir’ by Riz Mack)

Reckless Jack and fair Jill, youthful hearts aroused,
did scale that hill, less for water, than illicit thrills.

Atop that perilous height, they began a lover’s fight.
Stolen moments, once sweetly solaced, can prove brief.

Alas, the twisted tryst, turned awkward tumble swift,
with clothes askew and most immodest bruises blue.

Honest folk, share this lesson far and wide, by rhyme and tune -
beware young lovers, less passion's tide prove a bumpy slide to ruin.




07.0620
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024


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Date: 6/21/2024 8:12:00 PM
Crush much?
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Anais Vionet
Date: 6/23/2024 8:24:00 AM
Oh, I'm in constant crush!
Date: 6/20/2024 2:29:00 PM
Which is why I do my loving in the dales and valleys. Problems. Solutions. I'll be here all week...
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Tom Woody
Date: 6/20/2024 6:20:00 PM
What does Jill look like? Wait! Nevermind
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Anais Vionet
Date: 6/20/2024 3:40:00 PM
What if you’re down there and Jack & Jill rolled down on you?
Date: 6/20/2024 1:12:00 PM
Your fairy tale apt, Anais. I read quasi/dark poem' "Dictated to by They" Like the lampoon upon “I’ve met the enemy, and he is us” Your version is the love aspect, love is so ephemeral
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Anais Vionet
Date: 6/23/2024 8:23:00 AM
Is it dark? Is it more realistic than a well on a hill. Aren't there long-term lovers?
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