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Love Strike

Upon shy reach,
His fingers touch mine—
Quickly though, they move away from me… 

I bite his lips,
Crushing his coiling coy
And snatch his hands back onto me

I am a cobra…
I dance to the beat of his anxious worship

Copyright © Laura Breidenthal | Year Posted 2015

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Kp Nunez Date: 5/14/2015 8:46:00 PM Whoa...dancing dangerously with passion... I see another side of you, my friend! I was on the edge of my seat! hahaha...Such intelligence in the write. You leave imagination to the reader...Compelling read! 7 again. Hugs! Kim :-) Login to Reply

Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/22/2015 7:42:00 AM I am impressed once again! Login to Reply

Justin Bordner Date: 4/19/2015 8:41:00 PM Such severe seduction!!! You won't allow his lust to escape your reach Laura..."I dance to the beat of his anxious worship..." that's a sexy bite! This is an image of poised passion that is romantically possessive and erogenously dangerous...the way you integrate the title with the metaphor is sexy smart...I love this poem...J.A.B. A FAV!!! Login to Reply Laura Breidenthal Date: 4/19/2015 10:33:00 PM It makes me so so happy that you love this poem. : ) Thanks for reading and faving.. I'm always faving yours. I am waiting patiently for your next piece, Justin. In the meantime, I will stop by your page and read some of my favs. ;) ~Laura

James Marshall Goff Date: 4/19/2015 11:27:00 AM Laura! What a perfect, real emotion! Really evocative write! jimbo Login to Reply Laura Breidenthal Date: 4/19/2015 3:59:00 PM Thanks very much! Glad to have your feedback! ~Laura

Jack Ellison Date: 4/19/2015 7:51:00 AM Is it warm in here or is it just me!!! Your words are simply delicious! YUM! Big huggsies dear Laura! xxx Login to Reply Laura Breidenthal Date: 4/19/2015 3:57:00 PM Heehee! Yay! Glad you enjoyed the poem, Jack! ~Laura

James Peranteau Date: 4/19/2015 6:38:00 AM Now that is one striking write dear poet.....NO PUN INTENDED ! I love the terse writes. Now I'm not knocking anyones writes, but, if ya can say it while your chewing, and hit a home run.....it didn't take long to say it ! *smiles* Believe it or not, at a ball game, and the cameras are roll'n, and everyone in the stands look so bored, ...even though the score is 3 tah 3 in the 11th.....then comes Johnny swing'em ups...Kapow...it took 3 seconds and that balls outtah here ! It took 3 seconds and the crowds are screeming ! That's how I like writing my poetry ! *smiles*...Much love, james Login to Reply Laura Breidenthal Date: 4/19/2015 3:56:00 PM Awwww, James! That's what I loooove about your poetry! You have such a distinctive style too. I will definitely be visiting you page more often. Thanks again for stopping by and reading. Keep writing yourself! You've hit many home runs my friend. ~Laura