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Love Strike

Upon shy reach,
His fingers touch mine—
Quickly though, they move away from me… 

I bite his lips,
Crushing his coiling coy
And snatch his hands back onto me

I am a cobra…
I dance to the beat of his anxious worship

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Kp Nunez

May 14, 2015 at 8:46 PM

Whoa...dancing dangerously with passion... I see another side of you, my friend! I was on the edge of my seat! hahaha...Such intelligence in the write. You leave imagination to the reader...Compelling read! 7 again. Hugs! Kim :-)

Richard Lamoureux

April 22, 2015 at 7:42 AM

I am impressed once again!

Justin Bordner

April 19, 2015 at 8:41 PM

Such severe seduction!!! You won't allow his lust to escape your reach Laura..."I dance to the beat of his anxious worship..." that's a sexy bite! This is an image of poised passion that is romantically possessive and erogenously dangerous...the way you integrate the title with the metaphor is sexy smart...I love this poem...J.A.B. A FAV!!!

Laura Breidenthal

April 19, 2015 at 10:33 PM

It makes me so so happy that you love this poem. : ) Thanks for reading and faving.. I'm always faving yours. I am waiting patiently for your next piece, Justin. In the meantime, I will stop by your page and read some of my favs. ;) ~Laura

James Marshall Goff

April 19, 2015 at 11:27 AM

Laura! What a perfect, real emotion! Really evocative write! jimbo

Laura Breidenthal

April 19, 2015 at 3:59 PM

Thanks very much! Glad to have your feedback! ~Laura

Jack Ellison

April 19, 2015 at 7:51 AM

Is it warm in here or is it just me!!! Your words are simply delicious! YUM! Big huggsies dear Laura! xxx

Laura Breidenthal

April 19, 2015 at 3:57 PM

Heehee! Yay! Glad you enjoyed the poem, Jack! ~Laura

James Peranteau

April 19, 2015 at 6:38 AM

Now that is one striking write dear poet.....NO PUN INTENDED ! I love the terse writes. Now I'm not knocking anyones writes, but, if ya can say it while your chewing, and hit a home run.....it didn't take long to say it ! *smiles* Believe it or not, at a ball game, and the cameras are roll'n, and everyone in the stands look so bored, ...even though the score is 3 tah 3 in the 11th.....then comes Johnny swing'em ups...Kapow...it took 3 seconds and that balls outtah here ! It took 3 seconds and the crowds are screeming ! That's how I like writing my poetry ! *smiles*...Much love, james

Laura Breidenthal

April 19, 2015 at 3:56 PM

Awwww, James! That's what I loooove about your poetry! You have such a distinctive style too. I will definitely be visiting you page more often. Thanks again for stopping by and reading. Keep writing yourself! You've hit many home runs my friend. ~Laura

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