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Love Strike

Upon shy reach, His fingers touch mine— Quickly though, they move away from me… I bite his lips, Crushing his coiling coy And snatch his hands back onto me I am a cobra… I dance to the beat of his anxious worship

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Kp Nunez

Date: 5/14/2015 8:46:00 PM

Whoa...dancing dangerously with passion... I see another side of you, my friend! I was on the edge of my seat! hahaha...Such intelligence in the write. You leave imagination to the reader...Compelling read! 7 again. Hugs! Kim :-)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/22/2015 7:42:00 AM

I am impressed once again!

Justin Bordner

Date: 4/19/2015 8:41:00 PM

Such severe seduction!!! You won't allow his lust to escape your reach Laura..."I dance to the beat of his anxious worship..." that's a sexy bite! This is an image of poised passion that is romantically possessive and erogenously dangerous...the way you integrate the title with the metaphor is sexy smart...I love this poem...J.A.B. A FAV!!!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/19/2015 10:33:00 PM

It makes me so so happy that you love this poem. : ) Thanks for reading and faving.. I'm always faving yours. I am waiting patiently for your next piece, Justin. In the meantime, I will stop by your page and read some of my favs. ;) ~Laura

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/19/2015 11:27:00 AM

Laura! What a perfect, real emotion! Really evocative write! jimbo

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/19/2015 3:59:00 PM

Thanks very much! Glad to have your feedback! ~Laura

Jack Ellison

Date: 4/19/2015 7:51:00 AM

Is it warm in here or is it just me!!! Your words are simply delicious! YUM! Big huggsies dear Laura! xxx

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/19/2015 3:57:00 PM

Heehee! Yay! Glad you enjoyed the poem, Jack! ~Laura

James Peranteau

Date: 4/19/2015 6:38:00 AM

Now that is one striking write dear poet.....NO PUN INTENDED ! I love the terse writes. Now I'm not knocking anyones writes, but, if ya can say it while your chewing, and hit a home run.....it didn't take long to say it ! *smiles* Believe it or not, at a ball game, and the cameras are roll'n, and everyone in the stands look so bored, ...even though the score is 3 tah 3 in the 11th.....then comes Johnny swing'em ups...Kapow...it took 3 seconds and that balls outtah here ! It took 3 seconds and the crowds are screeming ! That's how I like writing my poetry ! *smiles*...Much love, james

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 4/19/2015 3:56:00 PM

Awwww, James! That's what I loooove about your poetry! You have such a distinctive style too. I will definitely be visiting you page more often. Thanks again for stopping by and reading. Keep writing yourself! You've hit many home runs my friend. ~Laura