Love Remains Alive In Death - Collaboration With Silent One


A Collaboration w/Silent One


Flowers you placed on the window
now wilt, crumbling in my palm
Their scent seems to have transcended,
accompanying you to the heavens

Your fragrance still lingers,
sometimes I hear you whispering my name
Shadows in the garden appear ... and disappear,
maybe hiding in an overgrown, decaying garden

Dusty photos filled with memories,
show happy faces full of love
Now this face is engraved with fatigue;
lost in realms of profound sadness,
as constant misery poisons these veins,
disabling the mind into a sombre retreat

Unsweetened taste grace my lips
in the land of the living,
bitter regrets darkly shadow my mind 
Feeling your loss deeply, 
as the pain gains more barren ground

In this accursed place of perpetual sadness,
I dwell alone in a house of desolate walls
Though they talk sometimes ... 
I hear you whispering my name at night:
You say come to bed soon,
put your sorrow away
and lay beside me, my love

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017



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Date: 7/8/2017 1:45:00 PM
Hi My brother Freddie. What a sad take on loss here. The come to bed bit stopped me with a jolt. I am still so thrilled about your commenta on my work also that I had to come here also to say it again. Well done my friend. Jannie
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Date: 6/29/2017 9:02:00 AM
Wow, this is an outstanding collaboration Freddie, really seamless can't tell who wrote what. Impeccable in it's storytelling poetically. We all feel the pain of this loss.
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Date: 6/13/2017 11:08:00 AM
An excellent collaboration, Freddie and Silent One, painful but amazing :) that final line nails it all:)
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Date: 6/9/2017 12:56:00 PM
Hi Freddie, I agree with the others below, you and Silent have penned a well written collaboration. I found it to very sad. Nevertheless it was well composed. This would have been an easy seven- Alexis
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Date: 6/9/2017 2:55:00 AM
What a wonderful collaboration between two brilliant poets. I really loved it even though it made me a little sad. So good to see Silent1 still sharing his brilliant poetry........Keep writing together both of you......... Maria
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Date: 6/8/2017 4:59:00 PM
raish lamed...stay chill poet
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Date: 6/8/2017 2:35:00 PM
- I knew this was a wonderful poem, although theme is of sadness - Love the end ... I hear she whispers ... and she will always be there :) - Thank you both of you <3 - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/8/2017 1:52:00 PM
This is a profound piece. It carries the reader through the pain...hoping for the resolution to come. Thank you, Freddie for your visit to my poem. I'm not as active as before, but I'm glad I got to read this lovely collab by you and Silent One. You're both very talented poets.
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Date: 6/8/2017 1:33:00 PM
I can feel the weight of sadness in this exquisite, expressive poem. Wonderful collaboration, Freddie and Silent (whom Imiss very much on this site!). :(
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Date: 6/8/2017 1:05:00 PM
This really tugs at my heart, you guys! I have such an emotional response to this poem, I can feel the pain and loss with every line. Well done, both of you. (Hugs)x2
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Date: 6/8/2017 8:48:00 AM
Wow, this is really deep and sad and lonely but such a wonderful collaboration. You two did a wonderful job with this, the stanzas flow together so well that it is difficult to tell two poets were involved with this amazing piece. Bravo my friend. Freddie, you should list this as a collaboration with Silent One in the title. Just my opinion.
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Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 6/8/2017 9:21:00 AM
Ty, Chris. It was great working w/such an immensely talented poet. Appreciate the glowing comments and the title change suggestion. Love and peace, bro.
Date: 6/8/2017 8:42:00 AM
A sad one. I like the line: i dwell alone in. House of desolute walls though they talk sometimes. Nice collaboration.
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Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 6/8/2017 9:18:00 AM
Ty, Kim. Death is always a tough subject. But an honest poet knows that they must write about it from time to time. We all know intuitively that one partner in all likelihood will die before the other. The one that lives on, carries a heavy burden of grief and loss. That is the way of the earth unfortunately. Love always.
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