LOVE MAKES FOOLS

Oh
what a
fool I was
to fall in love
with a girl like that.
To think someone perfect,
who had the pick of the field,
would look twice at a boy like me;
would even notice I existed.
And yet, each night, she invaded my dreams;
my turbulent dreams as I tossed and turned.
Then, one day, I plucked up the courage
to tell her the way that I felt.
I wrote it in a sonnet
and left it in her desk.
With beating heart, I
watched as she read.
I can still
hear her
laugh.

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Date: 6/21/2025 8:44:00 AM
Dear Bryn, your amazing imagery, and use of foreshadowing, brings me there with a tarnished but lively hope, to then share in the heartbreak of your last three lines. The sense of yearning, anticipation and humiliation is palpable and speaks to the prowess of your poetic finesse. Congratulations for your success in Ink's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/21/2025 5:55:00 AM
Congrats. Thanks for sharing this... God bless you.
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Date: 6/21/2025 4:07:00 AM
I really loved reading this poem dear bryn, sometimes some do makes us feel like fools, and its sad when emotions are crushed and when they aren’t acknowledged, i really love the flow and the story that youv told us and delivered through this sad but witty take! Love also your subtle use of alliterations! Pleasure reading this! Congratulations on your win in my contest! Sending you light always
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Date: 6/5/2025 5:56:00 AM
Ouch! Was hoping for a better ending. Here's a funny: all this time I thought you were a she. Unless ... you are and this poem is pure fiction. Oh well, doesn't matter. Hey, nice etheree
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Bryn Strudwick
Date: 6/21/2025 2:29:00 AM
Hi Tom. No, I promise you I have the X and Y chromosomes. Although, of course, the poem is pure fiction!
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